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Zombie

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repeating "only" in line 3 seems unnecessary and the metre is better without :)

AC Benus

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Zombie, like this..? (although the metre is unchanged ;) 

 

My brain is a mire, where everyday I sink

Into deeper regions that seem only fit

For less than subtle minds, that merely think

Rock bottom's a place it will never hit.

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