[DomLuka] TOU Chapter 17 - it's here

[Cris L]

good news

- it's here

 

bad news

- its VERY brief.

[DomLuka]

Yeah, yeah, yeah. Okay, no more short chapters unless I have to. But now you get to wait.

[shadows]

Yes, I get to wait, and ponder the insanity that is slowly enveloping my soul and mind and wondering why you must always always end on a cliffhanger. It isn't good for me.... *wimper* You're raising my blood pressure and I'm only 17! And, I've developed a nervous tic. Of course, that may be due to another things, but still.

 

All right, beyond my insanity, nicely done, nicely done. If you don't mind my asking, why aren't you published? Have you at least tried? You should, your stories are so much more captivating, true to life, and well written than most of the "gay youth" tripe that gets published. You know, if you only released the rest of TOU in book form, I'd probably risk outing myself just to read it...

 

Anyway, I'm off to the tea party.

 

//shadows

[Ann]

Yes, the chapter seemed short compared to what you usually give us, but I really liked it. I wish something with Bree could have been resolved in this one. I still smell trouble with her. However, I was distracted from that by the interaction between Jude and Quinn. I think Jude was humanized even more in this chapter. We

[Cris L]

Yeah, yeah, yeah. Okay, no more short chapters unless I have to. But now you get to wait.

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I don't mind brief or briefs for that matter.... but I do mind VERY brief.

[Conner]

Great chapter, Dom.

 

I liked the way the chapter opened. BTW, please give Quinn his bedroom door back! Quinn has made some definite progress. He's coming around I hope. I think he only had two hissy fits in that chapter. The "headaches" conversation with Jude was cool. Jude is definitely smitten.

 

Speaking about smitten, Taylor is something else. I really like this guy. His irreverence breaks me up. I'm hoping he's in your new story.

 

I'm not sure how to react to Bree going to Myers. I'll have to wait and see how that one unfolds.

 

Hugs,

Conner

[Cris L]

Yeah, yeah, yeah. Okay, no more short chapters unless I have to. But now you get to wait.

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Actually, you get to have no life!!!!

[Rabble_Rouser]

Great Chapter Dom!

 

I liked how you started to move Quinn & Jude onto a more equal level the last couple of chapters. I agree with Conner that I love Taylor, especially when he's yanking Quinn's chain . Now Quinn just has to figure out how to handle Taylor like Jude & Trina do. Jude seems to confide in Taylor alot, so he must have a serious side we haven't seen other the rescue from Johns office.

 

I was getting ready to send Dom a nasty-gram for making me like Mrs.Moore when I started reading but then Jude was sleeping on the floor and ruined all my predictions for this chapter!

 

I think seeing more of the smitten & vulnerable Jude (he only really has Trina & Taylor as friends?!?!) makes me like him even more!

[Bao]

O_o why is it called "the ordianry us" i dotn get it so far lol

[Lucy Kemnitzer]

O_o why is it called "the ordianry us" i dotn get it so far lol

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MYbguess it's because Jude's position is that he's really quite ordinary (though he's extraordinarily mature and sweet), and because ordinariness is the thing that Quinn wants.

[Rocketcnj]

Ann predicted Bree would be trouble....so far, very correct Ann.

 

I think Mrs. Moore will remain clueless...Maybe Jude is right that Mrs. Moore would recognize that Quinn is her only son..so love him and accept him for whom he is or lose him. But its a risk, given her past behavior..so maybe waiting isn't so horrible...and it gives Quinn the chance for he and Jude to develop their relationship without a ton of other pressure. Quinn is starting to see that Trina is correct and that if he stays calm and sees what happens then makes decisions before going too crazy and then reacts to things before they happen, life will be ok..

 

But Bree..wow, she may be trouble and ready for trouble...or maybe she wants to resolve things with her brother and needs a third party to help guide them....who knows..but Chapter 18 sure will be fun to read..

 

I hope Bree comes around..and we still have to wonder what Brad will do....I am just hoping he is better then Adam and in time closer to a Ryan...any how, makes for great reading...and exciting fun:)

 

Michael

[Coming Undone]

Ann predicted Bree would be trouble....so far, very correct Ann.

 

I don't think that this chapter showed anyone as "Trouble"

 

This chapter had the least amount of drama that I can recall in the story.

So Bree is pissed, we still don't know what or who she's pissed at for sure.

Just means she's becoming a women.

 

Switch:

 

Great chapter Dom!!!

[Bao]

why is mar left out so much.

[Rocketcnj]

Ann predicted Bree would be trouble....so far, very correct Ann.

 

I don't think that this chapter showed anyone as "Trouble"

 

 

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Ann predicted that Bree would be 'trouble' because she is pissed at Quinn and she is...in her mind, in my opinion, her brother (whom she always believed to be straight) "stole" a boy (Jude) she had designs on...she also appears to be upset that Quinn wasn't honest with her....add to that, she now has gone to Quinn's counselor and we don't know what she has said or what she wants to say to Quinn. Even Jude recognizes that Bree isn't happy with him. To me, that adds up to "trouble"....particularly since Quinn wants to stay under the radar and isn't quite sure what Bree is feeling and what she will do.

 

So, to me, Bree is a wild card in the making and "trouble" brewing for Quinn. She may surprise us all and become supportive, which is my hope, but I sense she is one angry woman....with potentional "drama" and "trouble" in the making depending upon what she does now and how she expresses her feelings about Quinn, about Jude and about Quinn and Jude being together (in her mind, I am betting she was hoping she had a shot at being Jude's girlfriend..quite the contrary to what has occurred). Hence, my use of the word 'trouble'....well, Chapter 18 will be very interesting to say the least.

 

Michael

[AFriendlyFace]

O_o why is it called "the ordianry us" i dotn get it so far lol

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Well I'd say it's because the whole story is about Quinn's coming to terms with the fact that he's gay and ultimately accepting that he (and Judd, Taylor, Trina and other gay people) are still "ordinary" normal people

 

As for Bree being trouble, I hadn't personally gotten that impression. I mean yes she's mad and confused and she has every right to be. From her point of view her brother refused to trust her enough to come out to her (he even implied he wouldn't have told her at all if Brad hadn't blurted it out), stole her potential boyfriend, and then on the very night that all the drama went down invited him to sleepover. (I'm not saying I'm against Quinn and can't identify with him, just trying to see things from Bree's perspective.)

 

Yet actually inspite of all this she once again COVERS for Quinn by telling their mom that Judd was there to see her. So even though she's angry she's still looking out for her brother, if you ask me it's a clear indication that she remains the loyal sister and has no intentions of doing anything to hurt Quinn.

 

The trouble I see developing however, (and my guess as to why Bree is in Myer's office) lies with Brad. And not that he won't be supportive, but that his mother is in danger. She already went to the hospital and had to stay overnight to be monitored. My guess would be that something's wrong. Quinn's already tried to call Brad twice that day to talk to him, and both times recieved no answer, when Mrs. Moore said specifically that Brad was going to be STAYING HOME because his mother's in the hosipital. So why wouldn't someone who's staying home waiting for someone else to get out of the hospital not be at home?.....if they had to go to the hospital to be with the person. My guess is that after this happened, Mrs. Moore, who works at the hospital, called the school to inform Quinn and Bree (since they're so close to the family), and of course they couldn't get Quinn since he was out to lunch with Judd (and of course now Judd won't be able to meet Bree for lunch as planned.), but they were able to get Bree, for whatever reason I think she was waiting in Myer's office for Quinn. I admit I can't think of a good reason why they'd be waiting in Myer's office (except that maybe he wanted to handle telling the very fragile Quinn the news or something), but that's still what I was automatically thinking when reading the chapter.

 

Anyway have a great day everyone! Take care :-)

[storymonger]

And no one is suspicious of the fact that no one is at home at Brad's residence?

 

And yet Dom feels the need to tell us that little tidbit twice?

[Rocketcnj]

Ann predicted Bree would be trouble....so far, very correct Ann.

 

I don't think that this chapter showed anyone as "Trouble"

 

 

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As for Bree being trouble, I hadn't personally gotten that impression. I mean yes she's mad and confused and she has every right to be. From her point of view her brother refused to trust her enough to come out to her (he even implied he wouldn't have told her at all if Brad hadn't blurted it out), stole her potential boyfriend, and then on the very night that all the drama went down invited him to sleepover. (I'm not saying I'm against Quinn and can't identify with him, just trying to see things from Bree's perspective.)

 

Yet actually inspite of all this she once again COVERS for Quinn by telling their mom that Judd was there to see her. So even though she's angry she's still looking out for her brother, if you ask me it's a clear indication that she remains the loyal sister and has no intentions of doing anything to hurt Quinn.

 

The trouble I see developing however, (and my guess as to why Bree is in Myer's office) lies with Brad. And not that he won't be supportive, but that his mother is in danger. She already went to the hospital and had to stay overnight to be monitored. My guess would be that something's wrong. Quinn's already tried to call Brad twice that day to talk to him, and both times recieved no answer, when Mrs. Moore said specifically that Brad was going to be STAYING HOME because his mother's in the hosipital. So why wouldn't someone who's staying home waiting for someone else to get out of the hospital not be at home?.....if they had to go to the hospital to be with the person. My guess is that after this happened, Mrs. Moore, who works at the hospital, called the school to inform Quinn and Bree (since they're so close to the family), and of course they couldn't get Quinn since he was out to lunch with Judd (and of course now Judd won't be able to meet Bree for lunch as planned.), but they were able to get Bree, for whatever reason I think she was waiting in Myer's office for Quinn. I admit I can't think of a good reason why they'd be waiting in Myer's office (except that maybe he wanted to handle telling the very fragile Quinn the news or something), but that's still what I was automatically thinking when reading the chapter.

 

Anyway have a great day everyone! Take care :-)

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Now, that is an excellent point and one knowing Dom with his unexpected (don't look for the obvious) ways of ending and beginning chapters..I wouldn't doubt that could very well be...and true, Bree did cover for Quinn, even though she is upset with him...and as was said by Jontd, Dom mentioned twice that no one answered at Brad's house...so it could be Brad is at the hospital and there is trouble with his Mom...

 

wow....I have to say that makes a lot of sense...as opposed to worrying that Bree is going to be trouble....true she is upset but her covering for Quinn does show loyalty to him, as she always has..

 

It will be interesting because I do believe that Dom in his classic style always gives us the next chapter with the totally unexpected beginning....so this could be a logical beginning....but it is fun to read the different theories.....and hopefully, Trina has made an impression on Quinn to not so worry so much what others will think or do..and whatever happens won't be so bad since Quinn thinking too much of trying to guess what others are thinking has been worse then the reality.

 

Michael

[Bao]

who is the "us" part if the story is in first person. and why is bree with myers isant her counsler the johns? i think brads mom is fine, i think its the baby. cause the status of the baby hasnt really been mentioned. well i think it was mentioned that brads mom was only 5 month pregnat

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[Alan]

Ann predicted Bree would be trouble....so far, very correct Ann.

 

I don't think that this chapter showed anyone as "Trouble"

 

 

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So, to me, Bree is a wild card in the making and "trouble" brewing for Quinn. She may surprise us all and become supportive, which is my hope, but I sense she is one angry woman....with potentional "drama" and "trouble" in the making depending upon what she does now and how she expresses her feelings about Quinn, about Jude and about Quinn and Jude being together (in her mind, I am betting she was hoping she had a shot at being Jude's girlfriend..quite the contrary to what has occurred). Hence, my use of the word 'trouble'....well, Chapter 18 will be very interesting to say the least.

 

Michael

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Bree's pretty much doing a Quinn. She's magnifying everything and blaming other people for events they really do not control. The 'stealing Jude' idiocy is classic Quinn, and evidently classic Bree as well. Quinn's getting over it. I guess Bree will in tme. She may make life difficult for people around her until she does. I'm surprised by the counsellor, who really should not be discussing Quinn with his younger sister.

[NickolasJames8]

who is the "us" part if the story is in first person. and why is bree with myers isant her counsler the johns?  i think brads mom is fine, i think its the baby.  cause the status of the baby hasnt really been mentioned. well i think it was mentioned that brads mom was only 5 month pregnat

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Maybe the us in The Ordinary Us is Quinns family and his freinds....I dont't know. That's what I always thought. Or maybe it's Quinn and Marrissa, who I have a funny feeling is going to be revealed as a lesbien by the end t of the story

[Coming Undone]

Michael

I've got to go with AFriendlyFace on this one. Bree has been nothing but supportive through out this whole story. This includes the fact that she made up a story to tell Mom why Jude was in the house.

The trouble I see developing however, (and my guess as to why Bree is in Myer's office) lies with Brad. And not that he won't be supportive, but that his mother is in danger.

I do see the fact that Quinn couldn't get Brad on the phone as a bigger concern.

 

Oh and BTW: I think that Bree is mad at herself, she just hasn't realized it yet.

 

Later

[Lucy Kemnitzer]

I'm glad I'm not the only one who thinks Marissa's problem with Trina comes from her own struggles with her orientation.

 

Alternatively, for a little while I thought Brad might be getting together with her, and later I thought Brad might be getting together with Bree.

 

None of these are necessarily what will happen -- and I think the fact that there are all these possibilities arising out of the story is a brilliant reflection of adolescent reality.

[Rocketcnj]

My Clarification to One and All,

 

I indicated in later posts that the reason Bree could be in the counselor's office is as what has been previously posted...its what A Friendly Face posted...however, I still say I am open to the possibility (not saying it is set in stone) as to what Ann said way back when BEFORE Chapter 17 was posted and that Bree may be feelling upset with Quinn and also losing a possible BF in Jude. But, as you all have said, Bree appears supportive of Quinn..just upset with him and by her even covering for him with their Mom shows she still loves him to not "out" him to their Mom...so I officially stand corrected....

 

I now believe that Bree will come around and be the supportive sister she always has been..after all in some ways she and Quinn are best friends besides their only other sibling.

 

As an aside, I have said many moons ago that Marissa has issues....and I wouldn't be surprised if she is a lesbian.

 

No matter what it will be an interesting Chapter 18....and future chapters past that.

 

I also believe that Marissa hit on Trina and then said Trina hit on her...the old I am popular and really Gay but blame the unpopular Gay kid in school.....(having been the Gay Geek kid in school and Jocks hitting on us and then saying we hit on them......grrrr!!!)

 

Michael

[Bao]

im popular and open with my orentation towards guys. people dont care all that much. and trina said that it mar's freinds that spread the rumors. but as far as bree goes, my question still isant asnwered there. why is she with myers. isant her counsler john. any idea when 18 is out?

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[Rocketcnj]

im popular and open with my orentation towards guys. people dont care all that much. and trina said that it mar's freinds that spread the rumors.  but as far as bree goes, my question still isant asnwered there. why is she with myers. isant her counsler john. any idea when 18 is out?

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Bao..I was speaking about when I was in high school..in the late 1970s..way before you were born..today, (and I have done tons of teen youth work) being Gay is far more acceptable then when I grew up in a very small town. I should have also clarified that...would have saved time for all..sorry.

 

Michael