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Another Wonderful Chapter ,Oscar and His Grandparents have built a Really Cool Compound for Possibly Oscar’s Adult Life .One of His Friends Invited Him to British Columbia for Christmas Holiday too . His Grandparents Might Be Able to Work a Miracle in Getting a New Passport for Him ,Or Invite All His Friends to The New Coastal Property 🌝
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A beautiful collection of poems about the apple, although you went a little afield with "An apple Eve knew not" and "The apple of my eye is passing fair", but I loved each and every one of them. In fact, "Where the flagstones end" made my stomach growl, so now I have to go and get a snack - I believe I still have some Fuji apples left.
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I wanted to comment not so much on the story, but the writing. Thinking about your writing style which, at least for this story, has a label. It immediately struck me, this is soft writing. I should explain the label, not really for a seasoned author like yourself, but for the benefit of others. I can't take up the space to explain the detail, so here is an extract from and link to an explanation of soft writing. With a soft opening, you’re beginning your story in the day-to-day for your character, the average experience. We’re familiar with the archetypes of plot, of which the most basic is “character exists, something happens to change up the ordinary.” A soft opening isn’t a departure from this, but rather the where we move the focus. With a soft opening, we’re going to start with an increased amount of attention on the “character exists” part of that story, setting up our player(s) and what their daily existence is like before we jump into the “change.” http://https://maxonwriting.com/2015/09/25/being-a-better-writer-hard-and-soft-openings/ It seems to me you do this perfectly and that makes for an engrossing and captivating story which draws in the reader. There is drama, but it's subdued, there is action, which is a slow build, this is not a story that starts with the hard opening of some dramatic incident, rather it is the gentle revelations peeled back to show a life that's been lived. It's got sub plots a plenty and is really well crafted.
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Thank you for sharing such a great story! Looking forward to the contuation!
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2024 Poetry Anthology - Seasons - Week Three
Bill W commented on Valkyrie's blog entry in Gay Authors News
After a brief pause, we pick up where we left off. Attack! -
It looks like a cross between a shaggy cat and a rabbit.
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He's too naughty, he should learn to be as nice as me!
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Well damn..i know he was an assassin but can he catch a break lol .... and brutal but I can imagine it worse; if uve ever seen the medieval torture chambers in Europe ud agree...
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Danae Naldau, Grand Duchy of Malkania Danae Dannkas nodded approvingly to the maid who had just finished doing her hair. She uttered a polite thank you, then sent the maid on her way, nodding again to her reflection for reassurance. The maid had done a first-rate job, especially remembering that Danae's hair was not the easiest to comb. Shoulder-length blonde hair tended to bend into defiant waves, which required precision and willpower to style into the latest trend in Naldau's high
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Don't make me take Surprise hostage...
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You're not allowed to use Rowoon against me.
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Holidays, New Year's and Other Resolutions
Lee Wilson posted new chapter in Doctor Carlo and Brandon
Like Halloween, Brandon and I planned on hosting Thanksgiving dinner for the extended family. This group was quite a bit smaller. The DeMarcos had made other plans, and the kids didn't invite friends. Carson couldn't come down from Boston, either. My parents attended. With only fifteen people, we decided to do it at home after considering, then dismissing, the idea of renting a room and having it catered. Many more people would have caused us to flip that decision. Mason's wife, Murenda, offered -
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Great chapter. I love the retreat and the new reserve. Oscar seems to be getting alot better.
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Nope Never have I been in a forest fire
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Kilmarnock, Scotland
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