[AFriendlyFace] Buy Me A Drink

[Cynical Romantic]

Fun reading. Nice and light. I'm enjoying this one so far, but I'd like to see longer chapters, or several chapters posted at once. It's just not satisfying to read only for a few minutes every few days. But hey, that's a compliment; it means the writing is good! I can't wait to see

Ben's reaction when Aaron explains his nickname... if he works up the courage. Or does Mick rescue him at the critical moment? I'm betting he does!

[wildone]

Kev,

 

Loved the chapter, thanks

 

The conversation between Aaron and Ben had me laughing and smiling the whole time. It is good to see your easing us gently into your new found style of writing cliffhangers . I could see it coming, but actually the whole conversation about each of the names kind of distracts you from what is coming. Great Job.

 

Now the conversation at the beginning between Mick and Aaron makes me a bet nervous. Could Mick actually be interested in Aaron, and is 'sexual', but just doesn't know how to tell him? Even though Mick is promoting Aaron to go for it with Ben, will he switch to a feeling of jealousy if and when they hook up? Also the comment about Dave and Jose being roommates after breaking up.....was that foreshadowing?

 

I think the two things I liked about this chapter were first, that Mick really cares about Aaron and is willing to look out for him much the same way Daisy and Georgio will for BMAD. The second thing is with him interacting in a conversation with Ben about the nicknames for his friends it gave the opportunity to do some great character building of everyone. Heck, even the Jake saving Aaron from his notes shows what a great guy he is.

 

One other final thought (who knew I had so many thoughts in my mind ), I am really liking the way you are presenting the friendship of his friends and the more or less non judgmental way Aaron is reacting to Dave's positive condition. I just wish more people were like this. Thank you . In a way, a lot of stories deal with how friends deal with finding out the main character is gay, you have taken this idea to a higher level.

 

Steve

[AFriendlyFace]

Congratz on your new chapter, Kev Kev! It's smashing as ever

Thanks Niels!!

 

I think I was grinning throughout the whole conversation between Ben and Aaron

Oh and especially when he called him! Sooo funny!

Thanks! If you don't mind me asking, how did the background stuff work? With Aaron knocking over the cds and commenting about the lesbian, etc? I re-wrote and re-worded that quite a few times, in fact it was probably the most revised, heavily worked on section of the chapter. Did it work and feel natural? Could you visualize it?

 

You are however starting to pick up CJames' bad habbits!!! I mean, come on!

We kinda know he's gonna say it, because you wrote that he didn't come up with anything yet...

BUT I WANNA KNOW HOW BEN REACTS!!!

 

Me? Never! LOL, I promise it's really not a cliffhanger heavy story. There's only one more 'kinda cliffhanger' and one more real cliffhanger in the whole thing.

 

 

 

who, me?

 

 

 

 

grrrr... bad, Kevin!

 

 

There's too many funny things in this chapter to even pick out what to highlight. It was a pick-me-up that I sorely needed! Thanks, Kev!

Thanks Steph!!

 

I'm so glad you enjoyed it!!

 

Fun reading. Nice and light. I'm enjoying this one so far, but I'd like to see longer chapters, or several chapters posted at once. It's just not satisfying to read only for a few minutes every few days. But hey, that's a compliment; it means the writing is good!

I'm glad you enjoyed, thanks hotchikk!

 

As for the short chapters...sorry about that. I was actually trying to make the story 'bite size'. To be honest they're also easier for me to write. The sequel will gradually get into longer, heavier chapters though

 

I can't wait to see

Ben's reaction when Aaron explains his nickname... if he works up the courage. Or does Mick rescue him at the critical moment? I'm betting he does!

Hehehe, wait and see!

 

Kev,

 

Loved the chapter, thanks

 

The conversation between Aaron and Ben had me laughing and smiling the whole time. It is good to see your easing us gently into your new found style of writing cliffhangers . I could see it coming, but actually the whole conversation about each of the names kind of distracts you from what is coming. Great Job.

Thanks Steve!! I'm really glad you enjoyed the dialogue. As I said, that was really the first major interaction between the two and it was a lot of fun to write!

 

 

Now the conversation at the beginning between Mick and Aaron makes me a bet nervous. Could Mick actually be interested in Aaron, and is 'sexual', but just doesn't know how to tell him? Even though Mick is promoting Aaron to go for it with Ben, will he switch to a feeling of jealousy if and when they hook up? Also the comment about Dave and Jose being roommates after breaking up.....was that foreshadowing?

Hmm, well I don't want to give away any spoilers but I will say that at least one of those two things either will or will not be discussed further as the story progress

 

I think the two things I liked about this chapter were first, that Mick really cares about Aaron and is willing to look out for him much the same way Daisy and Georgio will for BMAD. The second thing is with him interacting in a conversation with Ben about the nicknames for his friends it gave the opportunity to do some great character building of everyone. Heck, even the Jake saving Aaron from his notes shows what a great guy he is.

Yep, Jake is pretty nifty isn't he? I mean for him to come off as a really loyal friend (to Aaron and Mick) and a good boyfriend to Amanda. Incidentally, he plays a fairly big role toward the end of the story, and if I had to pick my top three favourite scenes in BMAD the one I have in mind with him in it would probably make the cut.

 

One other final thought (who knew I had so many thoughts in my mind ), I am really liking the way you are presenting the friendship of his friends and the more or less non judgmental way Aaron is reacting to Dave's positive condition. I just wish more people were like this. Thank you . In a way, a lot of stories deal with how friends deal with finding out the main character is gay, you have taken this idea to a higher level.

Thanks! I've just written two successive chapters dealing significantly with Cosmo and a third is on the way. So I hope you don't get sick of him

 

 

Thanks for the comments you guys!

 

-Kevin

[steph]

If you don't mind me asking, how did the background stuff work? With Aaron knocking over the cds and commenting about the lesbian, etc? I re-wrote and re-worded that quite a few times, in fact it was probably the most revised, heavily worked on section of the chapter. Did it work and feel natural? Could you visualize it?

I loved this part! I'm laughing just thinking about it!

 

You know though, for a second I thought the next scene was still at the store. I thought Ben had surprised him by calling him when he saw him at the store and when they hung up, he came up behind him, thus Ben had seen all of the funny antics! But hey, you're way was much better... with him getting there early and the tongue and... and... hehehehe... I may have to go read it again...

[Tiff]

Late review. I read this earlier in the week, but then I was doing my own thing and trying to cram a paper for school by a deadline. Procrastinator over here.

 

Anyway, as usual Kevin, I loved this chapter. It's hard for me to pick a favorite chapter because I like them all. It's humorous, and fun, and engaging. Aaron is a doll, really. Too cute and awkward and genuine. I just love him. Ben is shaping up to be an interesting character. It's cool to see that although Aaron has been observing all those guys for a long time, he really doesn't know anything about them other than the small details, like drink choice for Dave and etc. He doesn't know their history, their friendship, their loyalty.

 

There was a very tender scene, IMO, when Ben was telling Aaron that Dave and Jose still live together even if they're broken up. And that Jose insisted on it when they found out about Dave. So in the previous chapter was Jose was acting all possessive and jealous, I think it was more out of protection and love. Like Aaron, Ben has his own great set of friends and they're fiercely protective, maybe because they'd been through a lot? Aaron has his own protective brood in Mick and Jake, right? So I like seeing more of all the characters! It seems that people are not what they seem and who knows? Maybe in the end, everyone becomes friends or at least tolerates one another and such.

 

It's nice to see Ben and Aaron bonding more. Maybe Ben isn't such a playboy, but rather hadn't found anyone to connect with. It was cute watching them joke and laugh about the nicknames. A nice way to bond.

 

Look forward to the next chapter. Excellent job, as always.s

[Bandage]

Thanks! If you don't mind me asking, how did the background stuff work? With Aaron knocking over the cds and commenting about the lesbian, etc? I re-wrote and re-worded that quite a few times, in fact it was probably the most revised, heavily worked on section of the chapter. Did it work and feel natural? Could you visualize it?

 

I loved this part! I'm laughing just thinking about it!

 

You know though, for a second I thought the next scene was still at the store. I thought Ben had surprised him by calling him when he saw him at the store and when they hung up, he came up behind him, thus Ben had seen all of the funny antics! But hey, you're way was much better... with him getting there early and the tongue and... and... hehehehe... I may have to go read it again...

 

I loved that part as well! I really was falling of my chair then, because the whole scene played itself out in my mind! So you really captured it right!

So chop chop! Keep up the good work!

 

 

 

Me? Never! LOL, I promise it's really not a cliffhanger heavy story. There's only one more 'kinda cliffhanger' and one more real cliffhanger in the whole thing.

LOL!

I'll have to read your story before I will be sure of that! You're not that far into the story yet, and still there are some cliffies!

 

As for the short chapters...sorry about that. I was actually trying to make the story 'bite size'. To be honest they're also easier for me to write. The sequel will gradually get into longer, heavier chapters though

Wheee for the longer chapters!

Personally I found your last chapter kinda short as well... You're enjoying yourself and before you know it it stops!

And my guess is you know how that can feel

 

Yep, Jake is pretty nifty isn't he? I mean for him to come off as a really loyal friend (to Aaron and Mick) and a good boyfriend to Amanda. Incidentally, he plays a fairly big role toward the end of the story, and if I had to pick my top three favourite scenes in BMAD the one I have in mind with him in it would probably make the cut.

Jake is loveable I also liked the fact that he jumped in with Mick when Aaron left with Ben for the first time

 

Thanks for the comments you guys!

 

-Kevin

You're welcome

 

Keep writing though!

 

Cheers

 

Niels

[C James]

Great chapter, Kevin!

 

I think Mick is fast becoming my favorite character... he's intriguing.

 

Bmad definitely looked good in this chapter, and I loved the scene where they were joking about nicknames.

 

Hrmmm, what will Aaron do now, tell Bmad or not? Quite a conundrum (and a cliffie! ) My guess is he will; he pretty much has to. This should be good.

[C James]

The reason for this post (I cleared this with Kevin first) was one thing that you MIGHT want to ask an editor or another author or readers about; in a couple of places you had Aaron speaking in two sequential paragraphs. I may be TOTALLY wrong on this, but to me it was slightly confusing (just for a moment) due to the reader having a subconscious assumption of a speaker-change along with the paragraph change. It's grammatically correct, and it is a very minor thing, but I did promise to give you any thoughts I had.

 

Anyone have any opinions?

CJ

[steph]

The reason for this post (I cleared this with Kevin first) was one thing that you MIGHT want to ask an editor or another author or readers about; in a couple of places you had Aaron speaking in two sequential paragraphs. I may be TOTALLY wrong on this, but to me it was slightly confusing (just for a moment) due to the reader having a subconscious assumption of a speaker-change along with the paragraph change. It's grammatically correct, and it is a very minor thing, but I did promise to give you any thoughts I had.

 

Anyone have any opinions?

CJ

Yeah, I mentioned this to Kevin in his second chapter. I don't know if it's a rule or good practice? I understand Kevin's desire to have pauses in the conversation, though, so I'm trying hard to ignore my red pen

[sat8997]

I'll admit we are playing a bit fast and loose with what is considered correct structure. But Kevin was very specific in how he wanted this story to look and feel. The author always has the last say so I'm going with his flow...

[AFriendlyFace]

*sigh*

 

So I had some 'problems' with eFiction and instead of adding the new chapter I accidentally deleted the whole story

 

It's a bit late and I'm very tired so I don't have time to try to re-post everything tonight. Instead then I'm just going to post chapter 6 in a separate thread (which I'll merge back into this one in a couple of days).

 

Sorry about the inconvenience everyone.

 

At least I stuck to updating by the end of the 23rd (I still have almost a half an hour! )....I never promised I'd leave the other chapters up, only that I'd post a new one ( :wacko: )

 

(so not happy about this )

 

Once again apologies all and I hope you like the new chapter,

-Kevin (who is not on the tech team)

[AFriendlyFace]

Chapter 6: The Truth Hurts

 

 

“What’s my nickname, Aaron?” Ben asks, repeating his question as he looks at me expectantly.

 

I should lie. I know I should lie. I should say ‘it’s Hottie’ and kiss him. Or maybe ‘it’s Sexy Ass’ and wink at him or something.

 

But I know he’d see through that. He already seems to have developed a very disconcerting habit of calling me on my bull shit. Anyway, I guess when you think about it ‘Hottie’ doesn’t really fit with ‘Cosmo’, ‘Daisy’, and ‘Giorgio’.

 

“Well…umm, you know how you…I mean sometimes…Well,” I really can’t figure out a way say this.

 

“Aar, com’on. Just tell me” He says as he puts his hand on my arm and appropriates Jake’s nickname for me. Damn! I already like it better when he says it than when Jake does. Why couldn’t his nickname be something cute and affectionate?

 

“Benji is a good nickname for Ben,” I offer. Okay, it’s not exactly the truth, but it’s no lie either!

 

“Yeah, and my mom calls me that sometimes, but what do YOU call me?” See! See! I told you he wasn’t going to fall for lying!

 

Oh well, I’m interested in the guy, and after all they do say that honesty is the cornerstone of any good relationship.

 

“Bmad,” I mumble in a very low voice as I avert my eyes and admire his taste in shoes. Hmm, I wonder if that would change the subject effectively.

 

“Cool, shoes man!” I say quickly in a much louder, more enthusiastic voice. Hey, it’s worth a shot right?

 

“Thanks…but I didn’t hear what you said before that.”

 

WRONG!

 

I look up at him and briefly establish eye contact, pleading with him not to get angry, when I tell him. Suddenly I lose myself in the moment. I mean it’s funny really, I knew he had green eyes, but until now I’d never really noticed just how deep and expressive they were.

 

“You have beautiful eyes,” I say with a slight sigh. I seriously wasn’t stalling there. His eyes are just so beautiful, I couldn’t not tell him when I noticed.

 

“Thanks. I have beautiful eyes, cool shoes, and a nickname. Now what was that nickname again?” Tenacious isn’t he?

 

*gulp*

 

Time to take the plunge.

 

“Bmad,” I say much more loudly this time, steeling my resolve.

 

“Be mad? What? I’m not mad but why won’t you tell me?” He questions haltingly as if none of this made sense. Oh wait it doesn’t.

 

“No, um, your nickname. It’s Bmad. Not ‘be’ as in ‘Be, being, been’,” Do you know your linking verbs, boys and girls? “but ‘B’ as in ‘A, B, C, D…’ ya know, and ‘mad’ is just like how you say it…it’s not mad like ‘angry’” I hope! “It’s really like ‘b, m, a, d’.”

 

“Okkaaayyyy?”

 

Perfect! I knew he wouldn’t be angry! Back to staring into his eyes now.

 

“But what does that mean? Like what’s it stand for?” CRAP! What is this an interrogation?

 

“Buy me a drink,” I say quickly. It’s like ripping off a band-aid. One quick motion, one quick motion.

 

He starts to say something, probably something to the effect of ‘I don’t buy people drinks, they buy me drinks’, then understanding flashes into his deep green, very beautiful eyes, and suddenly they’re glaring at me as though I’d just remarked that he was wearing last year’s color.

 

“That’s all you think I am isn’t it? Some stupid joke?! Some drunken slut who can’t keep his pants on!”

 

Actually it’s your shirt you seem to have that problem with, but now isn’t the time for that.

 

“I didn’t say that? I mean that’s…”

 

“But that’s what you think, isn’t it? You just sit here every goddamn night scribbling in your notes. Jotting down, ‘Oh look, Bmad caught another one’!” f**K! Did he read that? No, he couldn’t have, it wasn’t written anywhere on the page he was looking at.

 

“I…Umm…Sorry?” I offer weakly.

 

“Prick!” he shouts as he puts his cigarette out – thankfully not on my arm – and then storms back inside.

 

 

You know why fish all swim in the same direction when they’re in one of those ‘school’ things? It’s because if one of them turned around and tried to swim in the opposite direction he would crash into all the other fish. Duh.

 

“Ben, wait!” I shout as I take off after him.

 

Unfortunately it’s getting later and the club is starting to fill up. I guess none of the smokers want to try their luck at dancing until they’ve reduced their lung capacity a little farther, and eight of them all seem intent on coming outside just as I’m attempting to do the opposite.

 

By the time I finally make it back inside – I swear they would have lit up and smoked the damn things in the doorway if I hadn’t glared at them – Ben is nowhere to be found. Desperately scanning the club, the first set of eyes I make contact with are Jake’s. He looks concerned and nods his head toward the front. There are fewer people in the front and clearly none of them are Ben, so I rush outside…and right into a line of people queuing up to get in.

 

After I swim err ‘walk’ a bit further I pause, out of breath, and ask the nearest group of guys, “Did anyone see a really hot guy go past?”

 

“Just one,” one of them responds with a leer. Whoa! Did I just get hit on?

 

“Dark blond hair? Having a ‘Joan Collins’ moment?” Another member of the group inquires. “He went that way,” the guy says pointing toward Hollywood Caf

Edited June 24, 2008 by AFriendlyFace

[wildone]

*sigh*

 

So I had some 'problems' with eFiction and instead of adding the new chapter I accidentally deleted the whole story

 

It's a bit late and I'm very tired so I don't have time to try to re-post everything tonight. Instead then I'm just going to post chapter 6 in a separate thread (which I'll merge back into this one in a couple of days).

 

Sorry about the inconvenience everyone.

 

At least I stuck to updating by the end of the 23rd (I still have almost a half an hour! )....I never promised I'd leave the other chapters up, only that I'd post a new one ( :wacko: )

 

(so not happy about this )

 

Once again apologies all and I hope you like the new chapter,

-Kevin (who is not on the tech team)

 

What's done is done, eh?

 

I don't know if I should post here or over there .

 

So I guess since the majority of the posts are here, I will continue on here.

 

Thanks for the new chapter Kevin.

 

I was a little surprised at Ben's reaction to when Aaron finally told him what BMAD stood for. Not so much the immediate anger, but how he was more subdued and maybe....disappointed when Aaron showed up at the coffee shop. I wonder if Aaron's nickname maybe had a bit of truth to it, and Ben needed to reflect on that. Him bringing up meeting Jose at the same booth appeared to be a bit of a teaser of more to come.

 

Got to love Mick, even more. It wonder if Mick and Cosmo have talked and are both on the same page of trying to get the two together.

 

A couple of points had me grinning, first was the analogy of the fish going against the school. Never figured out why they did that, always thought it was kind of like the flying geese, but you answered a lifelong question for me in one sentence. Thanks . I guess I never thought of bar crowds being like a school of fish .

 

The second thing that had me chuckling was since Aaron's makeover, and especially this chapter, he seems to be a little bit more humourous with the fashion statements. The nice shoes, and the shirt in the laundry, I guess I never would have never expected that from Aaron (but from some of your posts, is there a bit of Kevin in Aaron ?).

 

 

Great chapter again Kev, hope you get everything up and running again soon.

 

Steve

[steph]

Kev, I'm kinda confused on the quick resolution of the little tantrum Ben had...

[steph]

I don't know if I should post here or over there .

So I guess since the majority of the posts are here, I will continue on here.

oopsie... I posted over there... :wacko:

 

anyway, I was confused on the resolution, too. I mean, Aaron didn't give Ben anything to work with... well, besides the fact that he did run after him and find him.

[wildone]

Kev, I'm kinda confused on the quick resolution of the little tantrum Ben had...

 

Me too, I made my post here

 

I think there is more to come.

 

Steve

[darkfoxprime]

Yeah, I mentioned this to Kevin in his second chapter. I don't know if it's a rule or good practice? I understand Kevin's desire to have pauses in the conversation, though, so I'm trying hard to ignore my red pen

 

I don't remember exactly what you're rereferring to here, but one general way to indicate that the next paragraph is still being spoken by the same person is to *leave off* the quotation mark at the end of the previous paragraph. That signals that the next paragraph is more of the same quotation. Not sure if it would work in these cases, tho, without seeing it.

 

- dfp

[steph]

I don't remember exactly what you're rereferring to here, but one general way to indicate that the next paragraph is still being spoken by the same person is to *leave off* the quotation mark at the end of the previous paragraph. That signals that the next paragraph is more of the same quotation. Not sure if it would work in these cases, tho, without seeing it.

 

- dfp

true, fox! here's an example where Kevin did exactly what you suggested...

 

[Dion]

I'm really enjoying the story - love the characters - and I confess to laughing a bit at your misfortune, Kev. I'm sorry. I know it must be really frustrating for you.

 

And then when I went to click on page 6 of this thread and read the latest instalment, I got redirected to a page that read 'IRP Driver Error' and my first thought was 'Oh my - what did Kevin do to it?'

 

I really, really apologize. It's the first thing I've laughed about in weeks.

[B1ue]

[C James]

Sorry I'm late.

 

Kevin, this brightened my day. I loved the humor, and the squirming Arron was going! Bmad seems to have issues in some ways.

 

My take on the resolution was; sitting where he did brought back memories and calmed him down.

 

My favorite line has got to be the one about "waearing a different shirt". And of course, Mick being insufferable when right.

Great job Kevin!!

[shadowgod]

Ooo It's the 30th!

 

I'll just sit here and wait patiently for the next chapter, and of course for Cj to declare a cliffhanger... ( he likes doing that dontcha know)

[outoftheashes]

Ooo It's the 30th!

 

I'll just sit here and wait patiently for the next chapter,

 

Just what I was thinking!

[AFriendlyFace]

Hi everyone!

 

Sorry I've been so quiet in here lately! I really REALLY appreciate your thoughts and comments

 

Yeah, I mentioned this to Kevin in his second chapter. I don't know if it's a rule or good practice? I understand Kevin's desire to have pauses in the conversation, though, so I'm trying hard to ignore my red pen

I'll admit we are playing a bit fast and loose with what is considered correct structure. But Kevin was very specific in how he wanted this story to look and feel. The author always has the last say so I'm going with his flow...

Thanks Steph and Sharon.

 

Yep, as I said to Sharon initially my primary concern for the story is how it reads, even if that comes at the expense of proper punctuation sometimes.

 

I was a little surprised at Ben's reaction to when Aaron finally told him what BMAD stood for. Not so much the immediate anger, but how he was more subdued and maybe....disappointed when Aaron showed up at the coffee shop. I wonder if Aaron's nickname maybe had a bit of truth to it, and Ben needed to reflect on that.

Kev, I'm kinda confused on the quick resolution of the little tantrum Ben had...

 

anyway, I was confused on the resolution, too. I mean, Aaron didn't give Ben anything to work with... well, besides the fact that he did run after him and find him.

Bmad seems to have issues in some ways.

 

My take on the resolution was; sitting where he did brought back memories and calmed him down.

 

Mostly what I was going for with that scene was showing the way in which Ben handles his feelings. First off I mean to portray him as somewhat volatile, he expresses his feelings initially but in a fairly extreme way. Next I was hoping to show that he is reluctant to openly and calmly discuss what's bothering him, even when he's calmed down. Aaron wanted to discuss things with him, but he first sent Aaron away (wasn't ready to talk to him at all), and then refused to talk directly about the subject at hand (choosing to discuss he and Daisy's meeting of Giorgio). The final thing I was trying to show is that he does 'get over things' in that he just wanted to put it behind him and continue his evening after he'd calmed down. Those were the major aspects of his personality I was hoping the scene would show

 

I also think CJ and Steve are correct (although this is my interpretation and even though I'm the author I concede that it's still open to interpretation) in that he did need to reflect on how true Aaron's words were and that being in that familiar place did calm him down.

 

Next, I think the mentioning of Jose had relevance there because it actually was meant as a sideways explanation. It's my opinion that Ben, Giorgio, Daisy, and Cosmo are the way they are because of each other. Discussing how far he goes back with Daisy and how Giorgio entered their lives is a roundabout explanation for how he came to be the person he is today and it's a more comfortable way to explain things for Ben than a direct approach would be.

 

A couple of points had me grinning, first was the analogy of the fish going against the school. Never figured out why they did that, always thought it was kind of like the flying geese, but you answered a lifelong question for me in one sentence. Thanks . I guess I never thought of bar crowds being like a school of fish .

Thanks Steve!

 

LOL, well I didn't do research on that; it's just Aaron's opinion (and mine )

 

The second thing that had me chuckling was since Aaron's makeover, and especially this chapter, he seems to be a little bit more humourous with the fashion statements. The nice shoes, and the shirt in the laundry, I guess I never would have never expected that from Aaron (but from some of your posts, is there a bit of Kevin in Aaron ?).

Oh wow! Thank you for pointing this out, Steve! Aaron (and everyone of the other characters) does have a bit of me in them (probably couldn't write them convincingly if they didn't), but I didn't mean to put that part in Aaron. I thought it fit Aaron as I conceptualized him, but I definitely might have been blind to it.

 

However, you're right, in that Aaron is gradually changing as a result of his makeover and a lot of other experiences...so maybe it does work anyway.

[AFriendlyFace]

I'm really enjoying the story - love the characters - and I confess to laughing a bit at your misfortune, Kev. I'm sorry. I know it must be really frustrating for you.

 

And then when I went to click on page 6 of this thread and read the latest instalment, I got redirected to a page that read 'IRP Driver Error' and my first thought was 'Oh my - what did Kevin do to it?'

 

I really, really apologize. It's the first thing I've laughed about in weeks.

 

Well then it was worth it just for that, Dion

 

 

I love that. Good job, Kev.

Thanks, Gabe!

 

Yep, that's one of my favourites too!

 

Kevin, this brightened my day. I loved the humor, and the squirming Arron was going!

 

My favorite line has got to be the one about "waearing a different shirt". And of course, Mick being insufferable when right.

Great job Kevin!!

Thanks CJ!

 

Glad to see that line was so popular!

 

 

Ooo It's the 30th!

 

I'll just sit here and wait patiently for the next chapter, and of course for Cj to declare a cliffhanger... ( he likes doing that dontcha know)

*sigh*

 

I feel awful that I still haven't gotten to fix the eFiction situation. I know it's no excuse, but the reason is simply that I've been very busy this week, and while it's a high priority it's not a fun activity and it's time consuming (at least for me) so I've been putting it off.

 

I will have the next chapter up in some form on time (which gives me exactly an hour), but I'm afraid that form will be another thread post. Sorry Everyone

 

You have my word that I'll have all the chapters in eFiction by Thursday evening (and I'm shooting for Wednesday evening).

 

Just what I was thinking!

 

Woo hoo! Thanks for the comment, Ashes

 

I'm flattered that you're enjoying it and honoured that my story could be your first post!

 

I hope it won't be the last

 

 

 

Take care and have an awesome day all!

 

Kevin

 

(Chapter 7 to follow)