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    Chapter 9

    I think I used too many 'B' names. Andy is seeing Bruce, Brandon is Kari's step-dad, and Brett screwed up Hunter. What's funny is DQ writes to me and he said Brandon as well. I'm surprised no one noticed the camera being knocked over...I guess I didn't say specifically that Caleb was, um, startled by Hunter's statement. 😄   I'll release at 50 if we get there, or next Sunday - whichever comes first.
    5 hours ago, dughlas said:

    Hunter is almost as bad as his sister. Andy didn't want to accept Brandon's feelings for her. Hunter seems equally determined that Caleb is straight.

    Caleb doesn't seem the least bit nonplussed by Hunter's online "persona" rather he seems to embrace it by offering ideas and additional help.

    So will we be seeing the next chapter soon?

    I think I used too many 'B' names. Andy is seeing Bruce, Brandon is Kari's step-dad, and Brett screwed up Hunter. What's funny is DQ writes to me and he said Brandon as well.

    I'm surprised no one noticed the camera being knocked over...I guess I didn't say specifically that Caleb was, um, startled by Hunter's statement. 😄

     

    I'll release at 50 if we get there, or next Sunday - whichever comes first.

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    Chapter 7

    Part of Caleb's construction as a character came from watching the movie Lucky Number Slevin with my kids (I'd seen it before, but it was fun to introduce them to it). In my research afterward Ataraxia was the only thing I could find that was named as the reason for Slevin's inability to feel stress - and he wasn't Buddhist. There is also no real evidence it exists, though others who weren't spiritually inclined also claim to have felt this and were pleased to have a name for it - I have no evid
    7 hours ago, seakinklets said:

    Since no ones gonna point it out, I will; Ataraxia is a spiritual enlightenment/calmness, not a neurodivergence. Caleb is obviously the endgame for Hunter, since he's walked the path of Buddha and will feel no anger or frustration at Hunter's bullshit.

    (To be clear I can only find personal articles with no citation of sources or clinical evidence for it being anything but a philosophical and religious idea/state of being. One article just said that its to do with the areas of the brain processing anger and frustration, but anger is a secondary emotion: an outward expression of stuff like betrayal, fear, ect. I'm too in the weeds in psychology for me to not show how I have not achieved Ataraxia at this)

    Part of Caleb's construction as a character came from watching the movie Lucky Number Slevin with my kids (I'd seen it before, but it was fun to introduce them to it). In my research afterward Ataraxia was the only thing I could find that was named as the reason for Slevin's inability to feel stress - and he wasn't Buddhist. There is also no real evidence it exists, though others who weren't spiritually inclined also claim to have felt this and were pleased to have a name for it - I have no evidence if they were trolls or truthful. I make no claims one way or another, it's simply a plot device and that was the information I had.

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    Chapter 22

    Thank you for the notes and the review - I'm delighted new people are finding my stories.
    12 hours ago, belisima said:

    Another great one B.  This one had me sitting on the edge of my seat over his mom and gpa. Cole and Drew are so sweet.  I'd almost forgotten what it was like when I was young and in love.  This brought back some sweet memories.

    Thanks!

    Hugs!

    Thank you for the notes and the review - I'm delighted new people are finding my stories.

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    Chapter 8

    That's okay. Words are supposed to be my job.
    6 hours ago, noahthesmallpotato said:

    I... uh... that was... wow. Still trying to calm myself down from the influx of emotions this chapter threw at me. To say that this is a beautiful chapter is an understatement.

    Again, I'm speechless. I-... wow. How could you do this to me, Dabeagle? I feel like I'm Kyle at the moment, not knowing what words to say.

    That's okay. Words are supposed to be my job.

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    Chapter 14

    Thank you Noah for such kind words. This story was very well received when I released it, and I'm still surprised at how well it did. Thank you for reading and for your comments - happy reading.
    59 minutes ago, noahthesmallpotato said:

    That was quite a journey!

    You know, this is actually the first story I've ever read from you. And I'm really glad I came across this among the thousands of other stories in this website. I am certain that it is among the few special ones that I will be holding close to my heart and never forget about.

    Thank you, Debeagle, for giving us the opportunity to experience 'living' in the world you created. Real life can be tough for all of us, and it can be a lot tougher because of the circumstances of the world right now. However, stories like these serve as an escape route from the pain and confusion that we feel. It gives us a moment to pause and recollect ourselves. For some reason, I think it makes me feel more human. This particular story reminds me that, like Ethan and Nathaniel, there are people out there that are going through the same challenges that we do, that the only way that we can get through this is if we help and support each other, and finding someone who would be with us all the way is something to be cherished and never taken for granted. On the other hand, Ethan and Mason's relationship reminds me of the importance of loyalty. Despite of the other's shortcomings, our love and care for our best friend is the most important. Friendships are meant to build upon each other.

    Again, thanks for writing this story! I hope you are doing well during these times and I look forward to reading your other works!

    Thank you Noah for such kind words. This story was very well received when I released it, and I'm still surprised at how well it did. Thank you for reading and for your comments - happy reading.

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    Chapter 5

    The ~C~ just stands for Corners. I frequently use something of the story name when there is a scene break.
    3 hours ago, noahthesmallpotato said:

    You nailed it! You've successfully put me in a emotional rollercoaster with just a single chapter. My favorite chapter so far! 

    Also, kinda curious. What do the "c"s mean when there's a time skip in the chapter?

    The ~C~ just stands for Corners. I frequently use something of the story name when there is a scene break.

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    Chapter 4

    That's a good point. I won't reveal anything yet, but Hunter has some of his roots in the way Chris Walsh conducts his online persona and he also has some roots in MrsGnomie's character from the baseball themed story they wrote that I enjoyed so much. Boy, my memory gets worse as I go!
    10 hours ago, scrubber6620 said:

    This is an interesting story. But one option is not really something Hunter wants to do. He has limits on his online activities. He could sell his worn and displayed clothes and outfits with no changes to his sexual performances and easily make much  more than the $100 fee from his sugar daddy. I am not saying he should do this , but I bet others on OnlyFans are selling things so he knows what is appealing. Maybe Hunter has thought things through and has made a serious, personal  decision that reflects his values and need for money at this time. He might reconsider this in college ?

    That's a good point. I won't reveal anything yet, but Hunter has some of his roots in the way Chris Walsh conducts his online persona and he also has some roots in MrsGnomie's character from the baseball themed story they wrote that I enjoyed so much. Boy, my memory gets worse as I go!

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    Chapter 4

    I enjoyed writing a lot of Hunter's lines 🙂
    1 hour ago, drsawzall said:

    Another exceptional, well written chapter with much to ponder, layers of depth and shallowness have been added and magnified. many of the the snippets of conversation were spot on!! Too many to quote!!

    She looked like she was grinding her teeth. “We went for ice cream.”

    “Well, that'll make page six,” I said with a roll of my eyes.

    “Dick,” she said and turned to go.

    “How you can get ice cream and dick and still be unhappy I don't know.”

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    “I thought you don't really like the stress relief parties?”

    “I don't. But...in a strange way, I'll miss them, too. The predictable lameness of them.”

    I scrunched my lips up. “I'm not sure you're allowed to miss something you don't actually like.”

    She shrugged. “Still happens. I missed you, so there's the proof.”

    “I can see this is still a fresh wound,” I said, trying to sound worldly. She put her lips together and made a farting noise. Pure class, that one.

    I enjoyed writing a lot of Hunter's lines 🙂

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    Chapter 3

    Thank you for giving it the chance to earn being read. As I mentioned earlier, every character has a journey, has growing to do. I hope you enjoy the remainder.
    2 hours ago, re2 said:

    While I find Hunter’s self-centered and youthful naïveté off putting, you have created a character — and story — that is drawing me in. Quite topical, intelligent, well written and edited. Thank you. Look forward to seeing where your story goes.

     


     

    Thank you for giving it the chance to earn being read. As I mentioned earlier, every character has a journey, has growing to do. I hope you enjoy the remainder.

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    Chapter 1

    That's a shame. Every character has to go through an evolution or period of growth. Even though I say this as the person that wrote it, I'm proud of the story.
    6 hours ago, jaysalmn said:

    Normally, I'm excited when you start a new story. To be honest, I'd rather read a story about Andy and her adventures. A shallow sugar baby isn't my thing. I'll wait patiently for your next story.

    That's a shame. Every character has to go through an evolution or period of growth. Even though I say this as the person that wrote it, I'm proud of the story.

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    Chapter 2

    Hi, and thanks for the comment - glad you're enjoying the story. Panic! is set in the Sanitaria Springs universe and Elliot and Nate are making a cameo appearance as they are part of the ensemble cast from that series.
    34 minutes ago, thepastryagenda said:

    I’m really liking this story. Thanks for sharing it!

    I was wondering which story  Elliot and Nate are from.

     

    Hi, and thanks for the comment - glad you're enjoying the story. Panic! is set in the Sanitaria Springs universe and Elliot and Nate are making a cameo appearance as they are part of the ensemble cast from that series.

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    Chapter 6

    Aww, thanks so much Lisa! Good to see you again!
    10 hours ago, Lisa said:

    I absolutely love your writing, Dabeagle! I was so excited to see a Panic 2! Although I loved reading from Jack’s POV, I really like Derry’s POV also.

    I’m looking forward to the next chapter. :) 

    Aww, thanks so much Lisa! Good to see you again!

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    Chapter 6

    He hasn't, not right away.
    1 hour ago, travlbug said:

    "I'm here if you need me, okay? I know you have Jack, but I'll be the backup plan, okay?" Derry, you may not have realized it before, but Jared's a good friend. ^_^

    Mr. Benson does not blame himself or his ex-wife for their divorce:  He's a wise man. :yes:

    When Derry and Jack question whether they can forgive their Dad and Mom, respectively, Mr. Benson puts the situation into perspective:  "What your parents did wasn't about you…. ...You have to remember that they didn't do this with the intention of hurting you. They did it for other reasons – unhappiness, the need to feel...something other than what they did…. They are still the same people. They still feel the same way toward you."  Again, Mr. Benson proves a wise man.

    "If you [Luke] start to stress...talk to one of us. Get some perspective…" Derry, I think that Mr. Benson's smarts may be rubbing off on you! (If this chapter has a theme, it's about maintaining perspective! :thumbup:)

    So, Derry, have you figured out why Nik seems familiar? 🤔

    He hasn't, not right away.

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    Chapter 2

    There have been many characters with the tendency, the one I like was from Bones.

    There have been many characters with the tendency, the one I like was from Bones.

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    Chapter 4

    Weinerdog beat me to it. I may be strange, but I have things from my own childhood that still come back some days.

    Weinerdog beat me to it. I may be strange, but I have things from my own childhood that still come back some days.

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    Chapter 1

    I was contacted about the series thing. It's great in concept as a feature, but the occasion for me to use it is far too seldom for me to remember.
    5 hours ago, Timothy M. said:

    Uhm I'm confused. Who is Jared ? Is that another name for Luke ? Ah, no, they're brothers. I need to go and read Panic (again) before continuing with this story. BTW you can link stories by making them into a series.

    Okay I'm back after finishing Panic 1. This means I can go on with dissing Jared and Luke. But at least Luke confirmed Derry should say what he thinks and wants. Jack will tell him if he disagrees.

    I was contacted about the series thing. It's great in concept as a feature, but the occasion for me to use it is far too seldom for me to remember.

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    Chapter 1

    The version of Your Song mentioned is from the Moulin Rouge soundtrack. I had a boss in a grocery store named Ken with a bad comb-over and a silly loyalty to a company who couldn't have cared less about him. I once came to work with a hurt wrist, wrapped in a bandage and in a attempt to 'catch me' he threw a box of paper towels at me to see if I'd catch it. I let it drop and stared at him while he smiled and told me he'd been testing me. One of the beer distributors gave him a six pack or case o
    1 hour ago, weinerdog said:

    Excellent start.Maybe it is obvious but with me you have to be a obvious as a nuclear weapon.I think I recognize the name Maddox and the way Derry described the kids I think I know who they are  since you didn't mention the kids names I'm only 99% percent sure who they are.Since they appeared in the first chapter instead of halfway through the story I suspect we will see them again that would be so cool if so.

    I like the character Derry but what up with him dissing Elton John's Your Song?That song is a classic.The soundtrack Derry mentioned that had a cover of Your Song is that for real or is it a story point? If it's real what cover  are you talking about? I would like to check it out on YouTube

    BTW my name is Ken why did you have to make Derry's new boss "KEN" such an a-hole.lol

    The version of Your Song mentioned is from the Moulin Rouge soundtrack. I had a boss in a grocery store named Ken with a bad comb-over and a silly loyalty to a company who couldn't have cared less about him. I once came to work with a hurt wrist, wrapped in a bandage and in a attempt to 'catch me' he threw a box of paper towels at me to see if I'd catch it. I let it drop and stared at him while he smiled and told me he'd been testing me. One of the beer distributors gave him a six pack or case or something for xmas and he threw it on the shelf and smiled, stuck his tongue up against his upper lip and proudly told everyone it was 100% profit. So, that's hwy he's named Ken LOL

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    Chapter 13

    I loved my Bunn for years! I drink less coffee now, relying more on an electric kettle for tea. Still, if it weren't for my kids emptying my tea to make coffee, I'd still be using my Bunn.
    7 hours ago, travlbug said:

    Ryan says that Benji before coffee is "fucking hilarious" and "adorable," clear signs of love. (My favorite thing about waking up is seeing my husband's morning face, even after 28 years 🥰)

    Apex motors? Why does this name remind me of apex predators? Barney won't stand a chance! 

    "If [Luca] wants a goddamn espresso machine, he can buy it himself." Ryan is obviously a philistine. (The only question is whether to buy Italian or German. :yes:)

    Benji wants a Bunn coffee maker? Who hurt you in your childhood? 

    I love Benji's response when Ryan expresses the wish for him to quit dancing: "'So is this a request?'  I snorted. 'Like I get to tell you want to do? Yeah, it's a request.' 'Oh. Well, in that case, granted.'"  Benji is clearly testing Ryan: If Ryan had demanded that Benji quit, I think that the outcome would have been quite different.

    Mom and Dad have shown nothing but support for Ryan and Benji, and all Ryan had to do was tell them how he really felt (admittedly hard to do when your mother's a "force of nature.")  Of course Mom and Dad offer to fund Benji's education (think of the support they've given to Luca, so it makes perfect sense that they would want to do this for Ryan's lover), and Mom's couching it as an investment is brilliant!

    Benji admits to loving Ryan, but he says it to Ryan's Mom (though within Ryan's hearing!). As declarations of love go, this "indirect" approach is one of the more unique I've seen (but it saves on candy and flowers!).

    I love that Ryan has a magic moment of clarity--epiphany-like--while surrounded by his lover and friends. Anything may be possible, as long as you know what you want and work for it. ❤

    I loved my Bunn for years! I drink less coffee now, relying more on an electric kettle for tea. Still, if it weren't for my kids emptying my tea to make coffee, I'd still be using my Bunn.

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    Chapter 11

    And so we did. I guess Id' better gt moving.
    9 minutes ago, Leo C said:

    Hey!  (jumping up and down in excitement) We reached fifty - I reapeat: We reached fifty!!  (Blinking puppy eyes....)

    And so we did. I guess Id' better gt moving.

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