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    9 Houses Down

    I am a fan of your writing and this story did not disappoint.  Brian's inner dialogue was wonderfully written.  I also liked the pace of the plot development,  The bracelet was a clever device and the ending was superb.  Yes, I LIKED your story!!!

    I am a fan of your writing and this story did not disappoint.  Brian's inner dialogue was wonderfully written.  I also liked the pace of the plot development,  The bracelet was a clever device and the ending was superb.  Yes, I LIKED your story!!!

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    Epilogue - Make Me a Beaumont

    I am sad that we have come to this point in Greg and Nate's story.  Like in all stories where I become invested in the characters, I want your story to continue for a long time.  Yet, you chose a meaningful point to find closure.  This story was challenging to me, parts were difficult to read, and the romantic in me kept saying, "No, no, no!"  Thank you for writing such a compelling story with such complex characters.  The poetry reference was exquisite, both in your choice and in your execution

    I am sad that we have come to this point in Greg and Nate's story.  Like in all stories where I become invested in the characters, I want your story to continue for a long time.  Yet, you chose a meaningful point to find closure.  This story was challenging to me, parts were difficult to read, and the romantic in me kept saying, "No, no, no!"  Thank you for writing such a compelling story with such complex characters.  The poetry reference was exquisite, both in your choice and in your execution of its use in the title and across the story.  I will be watching for your next story!

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    Zander's Question

    Just as they had receded into memory you brought these wonderful characters back to life.  Thank you!  Thank you!  What a delightful early Christmas present.

    Just as they had receded into memory you brought these wonderful characters back to life.  Thank you!  Thank you!  What a delightful early Christmas present.

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    Chapter 31

    Thank you for a wonderful story!  I am so not ready to be done with this cast of characters.  So, I am glad to hear that you are not either.  I look forward to the future with anticipation!

    Thank you for a wonderful story!  I am so not ready to be done with this cast of characters.  So, I am glad to hear that you are not either.  I look forward to the future with anticipation!

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    Chapter 11

    I love it when an author draws me in and I become invested in the characters.  Thanks for a great read!  I look forward to reading more of your writing.

    I love it when an author draws me in and I become invested in the characters.  Thanks for a great read!  I look forward to reading more of your writing.

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    Health Crisis

    Caregiving is a demanding and tiring experience, both physically and mentally.  Take care of yourself so that you can take care of your mother.  You may find that taking time to write, even for a short time each day, will help you deal with the stress of your situation.  Know in your heart that you have the support of your readers as you work through this difficult time.

    Caregiving is a demanding and tiring experience, both physically and mentally.  Take care of yourself so that you can take care of your mother.  You may find that taking time to write, even for a short time each day, will help you deal with the stress of your situation.  Know in your heart that you have the support of your readers as you work through this difficult time.

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    Chapter 25

    Thank you so much for this story.  I have greatly enjoyed these characters.  I believe that it is a mark of a successful writer that even when the reader doesn't identify with a character, the reader still develops real empathy for the person portrayed.  You certainly achieved that outcome for me with the characters in Paper Walls.  I will miss them but I will eagerly await your next story!

    Thank you so much for this story.  I have greatly enjoyed these characters.  I believe that it is a mark of a successful writer that even when the reader doesn't identify with a character, the reader still develops real empathy for the person portrayed.  You certainly achieved that outcome for me with the characters in Paper Walls.  I will miss them but I will eagerly await your next story!

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    The Finale

    What a delightful story--well-conceived, well paced, well written.  Thank you for giving the joy of reading your story!

    What a delightful story--well-conceived, well paced, well written.  Thank you for giving the joy of reading your story!

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    Epilogue

    I am very content with "happily ever after," especially for these two delightful characters!  I eagerly looked forward to each new chapter/adventure in part simply because there was so little angst. Thanks for a wonderful story. I will look forward to your next endeavor.   

    I am very content with "happily ever after," especially for these two delightful characters!  I eagerly looked forward to each new chapter/adventure in part simply because there was so little angst. Thanks for a wonderful story. I will look forward to your next endeavor. 

     

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    Party

    I'm adding my kudos for a wonderful ending.  I previously had fell in love with each of these characters and their engaging stories.  This story was a great way to have them meet and interact.     However, the part I liked best is this closing where you captured that moment that so many have experienced where one becomes aware that you are at a transition point where you can't and won't be able to go "home" again and where the pathway to the future that you have been so eagerly pursuin

    I'm adding my kudos for a wonderful ending.  I previously had fell in love with each of these characters and their engaging stories.  This story was a great way to have them meet and interact.  

     

    However, the part I liked best is this closing where you captured that moment that so many have experienced where one becomes aware that you are at a transition point where you can't and won't be able to go "home" again and where the pathway to the future that you have been so eagerly pursuing seems less alluring than the safety of what you have in that moment.  Your words portrayed that bittersweet moment so well.  Thank you! 

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    Chapter 13

    Your words and pacing in this chapter were wonderful!  Life is messy and I love the way you have captured that idea with these two delightful characters and their love story.  I'm sure my eyes must light up (I know my insides do) when I see that you've posted another chapter.

    Your words and pacing in this chapter were wonderful!  Life is messy and I love the way you have captured that idea with these two delightful characters and their love story.  I'm sure my eyes must light up (I know my insides do) when I see that you've posted another chapter.

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    Preparations

    I am greatly enjoying your story.  My friends would say that I was never lacking in self-confidence, but I certainly recognize the inner dialogue going on in Geoff's mind.  I think that you have his inner voice down perfectly.  And, wouldn't we all like to be Tony!

    I am greatly enjoying your story.  My friends would say that I was never lacking in self-confidence, but I certainly recognize the inner dialogue going on in Geoff's mind.  I think that you have his inner voice down perfectly.  And, wouldn't we all like to be Tony!

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    Epilogue

    My simple Thank You expresses heartfelt gratitude for this lovely story and it's engaging characters.  I am an older man who did not come out of the closet until 2008.  I sometime think that I am still in my late adolescence.  Your story had great appeal to me.  Thank you!

    My simple Thank You expresses heartfelt gratitude for this lovely story and it's engaging characters.  I am an older man who did not come out of the closet until 2008.  I sometime think that I am still in my late adolescence.  Your story had great appeal to me.  Thank you!

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    KSM

    I try hard not to judge those who decide to let their life end.  It is not easy for us who remain to deal with such a self-centered decision.  We so want to be a part of the decision, to have our say in the matter.  I do know this  that grief is a fickle companion.  Sometimes, like the fog, it creeps in on little cat paws and can be almost comforting.  At other times, it is like a hard punch to the gut, sucking the wind right out of you and knocking you to your knees.  I know this too, it wouldn

    I try hard not to judge those who decide to let their life end.  It is not easy for us who remain to deal with such a self-centered decision.  We so want to be a part of the decision, to have our say in the matter.  I do know this  that grief is a fickle companion.  Sometimes, like the fog, it creeps in on little cat paws and can be almost comforting.  At other times, it is like a hard punch to the gut, sucking the wind right out of you and knocking you to your knees.  I know this too, it wouldn't hurt so much if we didn't care so much for the ones we love.  Thank you for sharing your story with us.

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