Circumnavigation (99+55) Doomsday in Topics Posted March 22, 2013 I'll be back to the thread later tonight or tomorrow (I'm on a writing jag, finishing up the final chapter, which was drafted but needs a lot of work). So just a fast note for now. First off, a bug THANK YOU to everyone who has commented. This story would not exist without feedback and comments, so in a very real way, the story would not exist without you. THANK YOU!!! On the defibrillator issue; in 2007, they were far less commonplace in non-medical settings than today. Atlantis does not have one, and likely would not have one, even today. Good thought though. Shane's lifesaver training included CPR. Therefor, he's the best hope whomever has the non-beating heart has. However, yes, he was standing in the bilge water, so he was the most at risk. That bilge contains electrical wiring, and also the grounding line for the mast routes through the area. If it's Trevor with the non-beating heart, if the cause is blood loss, CPR (or a defibrillator) can't help him. Lisa was seen after the lighting strike, so we can rule her out. That leaves Shane, Joel, or Trevor. Atlantis is in bad shape; no rig (the mast, sails, etc are all trailing over the side), she has bullet damage, and worse still, structural damage. Even without all that, she could not survive the storm's passage. The back side of the storm is carrying 100 foot seas and 150mph winds; if Atlantis gets in that, she's kindling. A non-survivable event. Also, the only reason the front half of the storm is milder by comparison is the wind (due to the counter clockwise rotation of the storm) is from the rugged, mountainous shore of Jamaica. One way to think of the back calf of the storm is like a solid wall of death running for over a hundred miles north to south, from the shore to the open sea to the south. That wall is moving west at 18 knots. Atlantis is in the way. Atlantis's top speed on engines is, in perfect conditions, 16 knots. Rough seas slow her. Thus, she cannot get out of the way or reach shore. The narration rules out rescue from any source. Also, time is of the essence. Atlantis was already marginal to begin the speed run to the southwest with her rig; she was barely, barely fast enough to have a chance of evading the storm. If her rig could be restored instantly, she'd have a chance, but how does one restore a rig instantly? It'd take a boatyard days. Could four people do it at sea, even without the storm? No. Even if they could splice the mast, they'd need a crane to step it back into place. It took Trevor days to jury rig a sail in the Southern Ocean, and then, he had a mast. And a jury rigged sail would not be enough now; Atlantis needs the speed of her full rig, and it is beyond saving. So, the three with beating hearts aboard Atlantis have a little bit of a conundrum, even without the issue of one person aboard lacking a pulse, a condition that may be permanent. I see the eye of Dean mentioned... okay, let's assume they could make it to the eye. What then? It's about five miles wide and moving about 18 knots. And per Wildone's map, it does not make landfall on Jamaica. (Closest approach was 20 miles per the national hurricane center, and 19 miles from other sources) And Dean will be obeying the historical record in all particulars. Caveat; as you can see from the map, when Dean was off Jamaica, he was not heading perfectly due west, but about three degrees north of true west. Due west is a bearing of 270 degrees, and Dean's course at that time was about 273 degrees. However, in the chapters I said "West". This was done for simplification only and has no plot significance. Dean's course will be exactly as the historical map shows. Okay, I do admit that the situation at the end of Doomsday is a bit on the tense side. And I was very happy to offer Wildone a lightning-less version of the chapter. I have to admit I was hoping he'd decline, because I could not figure out a good way of doing it, and I've had a long, long time to think about it (I knew the ending for Doomsday before I posted the first chapter of Circumnavigation.) About the only thing I could think of was to replace "lightning" with an innocuous term. Maybe "Fuzzy pink bunny". The problem there is Wildone would have had a chapter where they sky erupted and a fuzzy pink bunny blasted Atlantis. BTW, at critical times in the story, Trevor has been watching lightning. Remember the first paragraph of chapter one? The blue flicker of lightning on the horizon lit the night, the air thick and humid, unrelieved by the offshore thunderstorm. Trevor, in his accustomed place at the end of the breakwater, sat watching. It was his favorite place, one where he could be alone with both his thoughts and the moody sea, each of which so often mirrored the other. Also, the first line of the prologue, The dawn came as with a thunder, a fitting omen for the day. Also, in Carnarvon, when an absolutely dejected Trevor was watching distant lighting. That was when Shane appeared in the rain, come to apologize for their fight. Until that point, they'd been enemies. There have been a few other times as well, but those two are the most important, and foreshadowed the end of Doomsday. Actually, quite a few bits of the story foreshadowed Doomsday. Remember Fantome, the big clipper cruise ship lost with all aboard in Mitch? (that's a real story, BTW). There are other things as well. Okay, I do admit that the end of Doomsday was a tad on the tense side. Those aboard Atlantis do indeed face a bit of a conundrum. They have a killer hurricane the size of Texas coming at them from the east, and Bridget's massive fleet to the west and southwest. And that heartbeat issue. And Atlantis is severely damaged in several ways. So yes, I admit, they face a bit of a conundrum. I'm sure we'd all like to see the final chapter as soon as possible. I'm hard at work on it now. What would spur me to even greater efforts (and thus get the chapter ready sooner) is if we could all agree that Doomsday was not a cliffhanger. (Wildone and MikeL are right!). A tad tense, yes. A bit of a conundrum, yes. But surely not a cliffhanger. (as we all know, I never, ever use those). Oh, and in case anyone gets any evil ideas, I'll point out that Circumnavigation won't be eligible for the 2013 Cliffhanger award, because it will be finished posting before the end of December, 2012. CJ Posted 111th of December, 2012.