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    Gasoline

    But but but... You know I never, ever use cliffhangers, right?  And a happy New Year to you too.
    On 01/10/2012 04:57 PM, KevinD said:
    Bloodthirsty dirty old cliff-hanging goat!

     

    ;-)

     

    A belated happy new year to you and the crown you so richly deserve but continue to deny...Thanks CJ for another twist!

    But but but... You know I never, ever use cliffhangers, right?

     

    And a happy New Year to you too. :)

    Christmas at the Farm

    But... it's not a cliffhanger!! It's just a lunch (burgers with the lot... though some might say they alone are a deadly peril) and Trevor got an unexpected late Christmas present in the form of his garlic crusher.
    On 12/26/2011 07:13 AM, Swhouston44 said:
    I wish I could second the nomination ...

    C James for King of Evil Cliffhangers.......

    However; I still say this is one of my favorite chapters

    All principal characters are involved, and

    Trevor does not seem to be in immediate danger.

    But what a cliffhanger you leave us with.

    But... it's not a cliffhanger!! It's just a lunch (burgers with the lot... though some might say they alone are a deadly peril) and Trevor got an unexpected late Christmas present in the form of his garlic crusher. :)

    Christmas at the Farm

    But it's not a cliffhanger!!! Basingstoke might have just wanted to give Trevor a present.. it's Christmas, after all!   I am sincerely sorry about the two week hiatus. (until no later than the evening of January 9th, when the next chapter will post, unless I can get it up a few days earlier.) I truly hate the skipped week thing, but I got behind in my writing due to work. CJ
    On 12/26/2011 05:20 AM, Daddydavek said:
    Basingstoke is in the building with them and you are taking a two week hiatus!

    king.gifking.gif C James for King of the Evil Cliffhanger king.gifking.gif

    But it's not a cliffhanger!!! Basingstoke might have just wanted to give Trevor a present.. it's Christmas, after all!

     

    I am sincerely sorry about the two week hiatus. (until no later than the evening of January 9th, when the next chapter will post, unless I can get it up a few days earlier.) I truly hate the skipped week thing, but I got behind in my writing due to work. CJ :)

    Click

    But but but... I never use cliffhangers.
    On 12/21/2011 07:10 AM, Pipo said:
    Wow, great cliffhanger at the end of this chapter!
    But but but... I never use cliffhangers. 0:)
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    Click

    The navy only knows that something on Kookoburra is transmitting on that freq; they don't know what, or why. They think it's Trevor being sloppy. So, they sent of a complaining memo to the customs service. We can expect all to be well, assuming that government bureaucracy functions smoothly, efficiently, and quickly, over the holidays.
    On 12/21/2011 07:20 AM, Napaguy said:
    A time of Revelation and reconciliation in spades. I thought that the naval staff would notify the coast guard about the tracking device on Kukaburra?? Still worried regarding uncertainty regarding Bridget and her obsession to eliminate Trev- Yes indeed even Lisa has her own epiphany. Great story and writing.
    The navy only knows that something on Kookoburra is transmitting on that freq; they don't know what, or why. They think it's Trevor being sloppy. So, they sent of a complaining memo to the customs service. We can expect all to be well, assuming that government bureaucracy functions smoothly, efficiently, and quickly, over the holidays. :)

    Click

    All we know for sure is that Basingstoke is landing, and also knows where Kookaburra is. But, what could go wrong?
    On 12/21/2011 08:01 AM, Daddydavek said:
    So B'stoke is still 'hovering' and probably has access to the K at its mooring in the river.

     

    Still too many loose ends to tie up and we have to wait for another installment to find out what Lisa figured out.

    All we know for sure is that Basingstoke is landing, and also knows where Kookaburra is. But, what could go wrong? :)

    Chapter 1 - Crash Landing

    Bill, I very much enjoyed this story. Thank you!!!!! One aspect that sticks in my mind though is the reverend Fred Phillips. He didn't get ill. That's incongruous, unless you think about it... and remember just how many big name homophobe "reverends" have been caught with rent boys, etc... Let's just say I'm not surprised in the least that reverend Phillips is immune. Well done!!!

    Bill, I very much enjoyed this story. Thank you!!!!!

    One aspect that sticks in my mind though is the reverend Fred Phillips. He didn't get ill. That's incongruous, unless you think about it... and remember just how many big name homophobe "reverends" have been caught with rent boys, etc... Let's just say I'm not surprised in the least that reverend Phillips is immune. Well done!!!

    Heading North

    I'm hemmed in by the title and past declarations; The story title means a circumnavigation of the Earth. ;-)
    On 12/20/2011 04:40 AM, Pipo said:
    So ... a circumnavigation of Australia instead of the world? Interesting change of plans :)
    I'm hemmed in by the title and past declarations; The story title means a circumnavigation of the Earth. ;-)

    Breakfast on the Farm

    Basingstoke is a careful man, so I'm not surprised he came up with a plan that pleased Bridget and Sanchez. Don't worry though, we'll find out what it is, soon enough.
    On 12/07/2011 02:42 PM, Daddydavek said:
    The dirty cop got done dirty with massive pain and agony to boot. Bridget may be in more trouble than she realizes with the cartel as somehow I don't buy Sanchez being all warm and fuzzy.

     

    Trevor and his friends may be in even more trouble than I thought as B'stoke's plan is so favorably reviewed by Sanchez and the witch.

     

    Hopefully, Trev, Shane, Joel and Lisa make good friends on the base. It would be nice if base security could do a sweep of the K and find the plant that B'stoke placed there.

    Basingstoke is a careful man, so I'm not surprised he came up with a plan that pleased Bridget and Sanchez. Don't worry though, we'll find out what it is, soon enough. :)

    Breakfast on the Farm

    The irony is, Bridget saved Lisa and Joel from being arrested.
    On 12/07/2011 02:00 AM, KevinD said:
    I knew something was "up" when the drugs weren't in the suitcases, but didn't expect the Bridget/Geroge relationship ending the way that it did! I though that Sanchez would Send Bridgetmto her "dirt nap" so was surprised when he left her alive...

     

    I wonder how the danger to our four teens will be brought to an end, somehowmSanchez has to fall as well as Bridget in ordermformthem to be safe. Hopefully Blasingstoke will suffer some sort of catastrophic failure whilst airborn...

    The irony is, Bridget saved Lisa and Joel from being arrested. :)

    Breakfast on the Farm

    I suspect George did not find this particular breakfast to his liking, either.
    On 12/06/2011 07:34 PM, Napaguy said:
    Wow not the kind of breakfast I had in mind nor one I would want to be part of. The story seems to be coming to its climax and will be indeed interesting to observe it all come together. My concerns of course are regarding Trevor and friends and how it all plays out. Good writing and a very suspenseful story.
    I suspect George did not find this particular breakfast to his liking, either. :)

    Breakfast on the Farm

    I suspect George did not find this particular breakfast to his liking, either.
    On 12/06/2011 07:34 PM, Napaguy said:
    Wow not the kind of breakfast I had in mind nor one I would want to be part of. The story seems to be coming to its climax and will be indeed interesting to observe it all come together. My concerns of course are regarding Trevor and friends and how it all plays out. Good writing and a very suspenseful story.
    I suspect George did not find this particular breakfast to his liking, either. :)

    So Be It

    Lisa and Joel's visit to the guesthouse, brief though it was, sure spilled the beans to B&G. The good news is that no matter what, it's likely that the guesthouse bugs won't be much further use.   Wasn't it nice of Bridget to wish Lisa and Joel a white Christmas?
    On 11/22/2011 05:03 PM, KevinD said:
    Things have heated up in FL and darn Joel & Lisa for going to the guest house again - argh! Doesn't appear to be enough time for Gonzalez to intercept J & L to stumble upon the new suitcases Bridget just gave to them. That would seem too easy a way for Bridget & George to get caught by their own plans to frame J& L...

     

    And lastly, Trevor seems to be settling into a good mindset for dealing with the surprise of his Mom and the realization of his new extended family. Could Trev & Shane really be so lucky as to having the Australian Navy as their unwitting protectors? Sure would throw a wrench into Blasingstoke's plans!

     

    Circles within circles within circles...

     

    Thanks for another great chapter CJ!

    Lisa and Joel's visit to the guesthouse, brief though it was, sure spilled the beans to B&G. The good news is that no matter what, it's likely that the guesthouse bugs won't be much further use. :)

     

    Wasn't it nice of Bridget to wish Lisa and Joel a white Christmas? :)

    Death & Taxes

    Not all the police are dirty; we only know of George, so far. Manipulative? Um, I gotta admit that one.   Yep, Trevor and his friends have in many ways been pawns. If they can get together and compare notes, they may learn much.
    On 11/17/2011 02:55 AM, Daddydavek said:
    The amount of intrigue in this story is amazing. BS inside lies and misdirection on so many levels. Lawyers as portrayed in this story, including the States Attorney are calculating shills. The police are either dirty or manipulative. Poor Trevor, Shane, Joel and Lisa, they have no idea just how much they were used as pawns and still they are being played as sacrificial lambs, by parents, the mob, law enforcement and just about everyone else.
    Not all the police are dirty; we only know of George, so far. :) Manipulative? Um, I gotta admit that one. :)

     

    Yep, Trevor and his friends have in many ways been pawns. If they can get together and compare notes, they may learn much. :)

    Death & Taxes

    Thanks! But, I've taken to numbering the chapters using Australian math now, which converted #99 to #66, in order to evade admitting that I am a verbose blabbermouth who cannot count.
    On 11/17/2011 07:12 AM, Pipo said:
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    Still going strong after 100 chapters. Thanks and well done! :)

    Thanks!

    But, I've taken to numbering the chapters using Australian math now, which converted #99 to #66, in order to evade admitting that I am a verbose blabbermouth who cannot count. :)

    Death & Taxes

    There's more to learn about Bridget's operations... Trevor faces a very formidable foe, one he's not yet aware of.
    On 11/16/2011 03:53 AM, KevinD said:
    Another great chapter though no visibility of how Trev is doing down under. I'll be biting my fingernails until Joel & Lisa are in Australia with Trev and his family...

     

    As for Bridget, George, Blasingstoke, & and Sanchez??? Hearing how Important Bridget's operation is to the cartel, gives promise to the grisly end that may be I store for Sanchez (&others?) when the house of cards comes tumbling down...One can only hope!

    There's more to learn about Bridget's operations... Trevor faces a very formidable foe, one he's not yet aware of. :)

    Revelation

    But but but... I never use cliffhangers!!   To be honest, there was no such thought in my mind. My original outline called for four chapters, total, between Trevor's first day in Carnarvon and the events in 98. I soon realized it would stretch out a bit, and went with it for character development for Shane, plus setups for what happened in 98 and 99. Looking back, I think I went too far, and before I knew it I had way too many chapters between Trevor's arrival and 98.   Part of the problem w
    On 11/10/2011 04:51 PM, flashpoint2008 said:
    Well, as stated in the forums, I loved chapter 99, after the long break I took from reading it was a fulfilling chapter.

     

    However, I just have to wonder if you stretched out the Shark Bay meanderings for as many chapters as you did just to make Chapter 99 (with the prologue, chapter 100) the chapter of the big reveal. With most authors, I would write off such seemingly crazy speculation off as being the product of my own deranged mind, however, since we are talking about the King of Cliffhangers, I can't help but entertain the possibility of just such an evil one-person conspiracy.

    But but but... I never use cliffhangers!!

     

    To be honest, there was no such thought in my mind. My original outline called for four chapters, total, between Trevor's first day in Carnarvon and the events in 98. I soon realized it would stretch out a bit, and went with it for character development for Shane, plus setups for what happened in 98 and 99. Looking back, I think I went too far, and before I knew it I had way too many chapters between Trevor's arrival and 98.

     

    Part of the problem was I was writing chapter-by-chapter, instead of my preferred method of writing large blocks of text (several chapter's worth) because I was running behind on my posting schedule. I didn't realize it then, but this added to my penchant for verbosity. I resumed my usual method at about chapter 95, but by then I was pretty much locked in to the lead up to 98. :)

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    Revelation

    This is an excellent point!   Dirk mentions this himself in 99; "Frank is wrong in that regard; there was one victim in all this, and that's my son"   Also, he's said several times in past chapters "When Trevor finds out, he'll hate me, and he'll have every right!"   The loss of a parent would have happened no matter what (Rachel was facing prison time, not just financial loss)caused by her own actions. I tend to agree with Dirk; Trevor was the victim here.
    On 11/09/2011 04:12 PM, falling into the story said:
    So the revelation of Trevor's mother leaves me feeling conflicted. Allowing a young boy to think that his mother was dead for 10 years - the grief, the lies, the loss of a parent in a child's formative years - seems to have been an enormous price to pay. And that price was paid primarily by an innocent young boy. In effect, his parents are tax evadors, who yes were swindled by Bridget, but nevertheless seemed to have loved material things more than they loved their own son. Right now they're not ranking too high on my list of favourite human beings.
    This is an excellent point!

     

    Dirk mentions this himself in 99; "Frank is wrong in that regard; there was one victim in all this, and that's my son"

     

    Also, he's said several times in past chapters "When Trevor finds out, he'll hate me, and he'll have every right!"

     

    The loss of a parent would have happened no matter what (Rachel was facing prison time, not just financial loss)caused by her own actions. I tend to agree with Dirk; Trevor was the victim here.

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    Revelation

    Thanks!!!  Arnold Bellevue is mentioned as dead in the narration, so he has to be dead. I had to tread very carefully regarding Rachel on that issue; the narrator could not say she was dead.
    On 11/08/2011 08:57 PM, colinian said:
    Wow! Chapter 99 is amazing with its revelation about everything that happened. It's enough to take ones breath away.

    There were enough hints leading to the reveal at the end of chapter 98 that the woman approaching Kookaburra was Trev's mother. But that reveal faded into nothing compared to all of the other revelations.

    Now what do we have to look forward to? There's Lisa and Joel, in danger from Bridget and George; there's Bridget and George, in danger from Gonzalez and eventually the Feds; there's Trev and Shane, on their way to Perth in a Kookaburra (or should we say Ares?) that Basingstoke rigged a with transmitter that is supposed to let him track the boat from 160 miles away; there's Arnold Bellevue, possibly and perhaps probably murdered by Bridget though with no body who knows where he might be dead or alive; there's Sanchez, who won't want to leave any loose ends that might incriminate him. Good grief!

    All of that means there are more chapters coming, and they will be welcomed!

    Colin B)

    Thanks!!!

     

    Arnold Bellevue is mentioned as dead in the narration, so he has to be dead. :) I had to tread very carefully regarding Rachel on that issue; the narrator could not say she was dead. :)

    And the Sea shall give up its Dead

    That trip to Australia was supposed to be at Christmas, which it almost is.
    On 11/01/2011 12:16 PM, Napaguy said:
    In the recesses of my mind from early on has been this lurking sense that Rachel was still alive. Remember when Dirk urged Trevor to go to Australia and seek out his mothers family? That was one of CJ's clues.

    Great suspenseful writing CJ

    That trip to Australia was supposed to be at Christmas, which it almost is. :)

    And the Sea shall give up its Dead

    The explanation began in the prologue, when the story started. The actual explanation, though, has been foreshadowed all along, and will be made explicit in the next chapter.
    On 11/01/2011 11:51 AM, donkehoti said:
    Great chapter CJ. So the secret witness is probably the same person that is on the dock. And I think I know who. If so, I sure hope you are able to give a reasonable explanation. Have you noticed when you are in Florida the plot really moves forward at a rapid pace, but just marches in place when in Australia? Nonetheless, you are great.
    The explanation began in the prologue, when the story started. The actual explanation, though, has been foreshadowed all along, and will be made explicit in the next chapter. :)

    Strait of Messina

    Great eye!!!   And, as for loving.. one of the categories this story is listed under is "relationship", so fear not.
    On 10/26/2011 06:06 AM, Sympathia said:
    Oooh where do I start!

    First of all, I dont for a minute believe that e-mail came from anybody but that snake-tounged witch. She admitted she has no Yacht so why would she have all the appropriate info bookmarked on her laptop, ready to show Lisa? Nuh-uh, she was involved in that e-mail to Jim somehow and I bet there's some sort of hidden agenda going on here.

    As for Dirk, he really should have manned up long ago about the gay issue, gotta be wondering if things would have gone differently had that particular rift not been there...

     

    Anyway, Trevor has green light to keep going and his money issues are solved. Now PLEASE provide him with some male distraction, the poor guy is suffering! :(

    Great eye!!!

     

    And, as for loving.. one of the categories this story is listed under is "relationship", so fear not. :)

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