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  1. jeromed28

    Chapter 23

    Interesting use of historical events. But only the Sphinx, Pompeii and Krakatoa were forces of nature. The rest were decisions made by men and the outcome of those decisions. I get the sentiment though I think the forces of nature are more compelling. That's what I like about good writing, it makes you think while entertaining you and makes you ask questions.
  2. Although it was only the summer I think the thing that sets The Academy apart is the education. The physical stuff I actually expected. I hope you explore more of the "over commitment" mentioned in this chapter because that's a real thing!
  3. “Yes, I showed you last night. Did you forget?” He grinned down at the girl he was enamored with. “I’ll do better job tonight. You see.” Somehow I think Blu is in trouble. ... Bella is not-to-be crossed!
  4. jeromed28

    Chapter 20

    Where's the other shoe? I know Mr and Mrs P have their own shit to work through but at some point they're going to find out that Drew was attacked at school by Cole's granddad and I'm sure that will make things at the very least interesting. I can actually see Mrs P will be more of a grizzly going after Cole's mom and grandad. ... And her children for not keeping her informed of the situation.
  5. jeromed28

    Chapter 16

    "No grandson of mine" ... Yeah, because that always work right? Honestly, has that ever worked? Even the super rich - I've got to toe-the-line for a trust fund - doesn't completely fall for that (we've seen that story line play out before).
  6. jeromed28

    Chapter 15

    why just cross it? Leap across that line. Line? What line?
  7. “Um, please tell her, thank you. Thank you from the bottom of my heart and he’ll be raised with all the love in the world and he’ll always know she loved him,” Link told the man. He didn’t want his kid ever thinking his own mother didn’t want him. No point trying to hide from the situation as it would come out in the end and he didn’t ever want his kid thinking he’d betrayed or lied to him. He knew that as a mother she would in some way love her own child even if she wasn’t part of his life. I think that was the best part of the chapter. Link can go from brat to adult in record speed but
  8. jeromed28

    Chapter 14

    I know i'm a slut but I never get tired of looking a a dick. ... or talking about dicks. ... But i'd never have that convo with one of my sisters!
  9. jeromed28

    Chapter 13

    Keith has baggage but the things he carries in those bags might be useful. ... But History doesn't have to repeat itself ... just echo.
  10. jeromed28

    Chapter 12

    “Once I found out, I understood completely, Mrs. Petrakis. You don't owe me any apology.” You know, being 16 years old - almost 17 - is an interesting time when you think you completely understand things. ... That makes one person that completely understand things. Seems to me we still don't have the details of why Mr. Petrakis was allowed to move his baby momma into a house next door and if being cut off from your wife AND your mistress for 16 years and counting isn't atoning before everyone - God included I don't know what is. Yeah, I get it we don't think about parents being sexual be
  11. jeromed28

    Chapter 11

    I don't know that a knife was involved at all. “That lock won't keep her out. There's a hole on the other side, she'll have it open in five minutes.” The door shook, its hollow core booming inside the small room. “Maybe less.” Old-school doors have a whole on one side that you can stick something into and unlock the door. A nail, a hanger, a toothpick if it is long enough. Obviously she was carrying such an object up the stairs when Cole crashed into her knocking her back into the kitchen. If that is what injured Cole it is not something she can be successfully charged with. The description of
  12. jeromed28

    Chapter 11

    You know, I was thinking the same thing! Rookie move to not lock the door for god's sake!
  13. jeromed28

    Chapter 11

    It has been my experience that it wasn't what was said but what was done. While the song says you don't pull on Superman's cape it could have just as easily had said you don't poke an officer of the law. .. That's assault.
  14. jeromed28

    Chapter 10

    I agree totally with that and they don't always have a given meaning behind them. I can't tell you the number of times I was greeted with "the garbage needs to go out!" or "come take your damned dog out!" And I had a great mom. ... who was a single-mother ... with 7 kids. Time for niceties often were short shrift for expediency. The problem with fiction - even on the Internet - is you only get so much space to create a character. In most teen-oriented stories parents are often not fleshed-out. Sometime you get back around to the back end and parents can present a surprise.
  15. jeromed28

    Chapter 10

    “Hey,” his mother said, entering the room. She was already in sweats and a long tee shirt. “Are you staying?” “Me?” She threw a hip out and gave me a weird look. “Cole lives here, so I think he's covered.” I loved this exchange. ... Shows that while Cole has a view of his mother - that's informed from his experience - she is a little more than he realizes. ... Parents can be asses but they also have to be parents. Many of them are doing the best that they can with what limited skills the have. I remember when I was living in Texas a young couple that lived across the street from
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