Timmy's Journal - 40. Legend - a Rubaiyat

So good, tim! I loved, loved, loved the final verse.... and the one leading into it... the poem culminates beautifully and the message is beautiful... it takes only one to give us faith... in ourselves and someone else... wonderful..... G xo

Beautiful, Tim, just beautiful. garlands....loved the way you used that word. And for me, your words and verses are the manifestation of blessing and mercy.

I like this both in where the words took me but also in the construction of the poem. This is not a form I see myself using so I particularly am awed at the diligence you display in building your skills as a poet.

That was really beautiful. All those images and I loved the last stanza. Yes, I'll agree with Dugh. Some times no firm is necessary to write about what we feel and experience. And I glad and proud you are excelling in the world of poetry through your hard work and dedication. Love that poem Tim...

~Emi.

Beautiful, tim... just beautiful

On 06/26/2016 06:50 AM, Headstall said:

So good, tim! I loved, loved, loved the final verse.... and the one leading into it... the poem culminates beautifully and the message is beautiful... it takes only one to give us faith... in ourselves and someone else... wonderful..... G xo

Thanks Gary, appreciate you reading this piece and your review. I'm glad you liked it.

tim xo

On 06/26/2016 09:52 AM, Parker Owens said:

Beautiful, Tim, just beautiful. garlands....loved the way you used that word. And for me, your words and verses are the manifestation of blessing and mercy.

Glad you liked it Parker. Thanks for you review and your time.

tim xo

On 06/26/2016 09:59 AM, Bucket1 said:

Hey B! Thanks for reading and your review!!

On 06/26/2016 10:13 AM, Valkyrie said:

Beautiful, Tim

Aw Val.. thanks very much for reading and your nice review!

On 06/26/2016 11:51 AM, dughlas said:

I like this both in where the words took me but also in the construction of the poem. This is not a form I see myself using so I particularly am awed at the diligence you display in building your skills as a poet.

Thanks dugh, i like the rubaiyat. It's a challenge to find rhymes that are natural and fit in with what you want to say. Thanks for your great comments and support! I appreciate it.

tim xo

On 06/26/2016 12:43 PM, Emi GS said:

That was really beautiful. All those images and I loved the last stanza. Yes, I'll agree with Dugh. Some times no firm is necessary to write about what we feel and experience. And I glad and proud you are excelling in the world of poetry through your hard work and dedication. Love that poem Tim...

 

~Emi.

Thank you very much, Emi. I appreciate your comments and your support!

tim xo

On 06/28/2016 03:48 AM, LitLover said:

Beautiful, tim... just beautiful

Aw Lit, thanks so much for reading this piece. I appreciate it very much.

tim xo

Aw, tim. This was beautifully written and communicated. Loved it..

On 06/29/2016 03:42 AM, Defiance19 said:

Aw, tim. This was beautifully written and communicated. Loved it..

You always make me smile, Def. Glad you liked it...thanks for reading and your support.

tim xo

There are a couple of forms that impress me because they are good at polarities – Rubaiyat and Cinquains both excel at being light-hearted or grave as mood dictates. Here you chose interlocking Rubaiyat and gave them a timeless feel, which is no small achievement.

Some of the images are really beautiful, but others are equally haunting. Like the vanished gods, and we being like imprinted goslings still looking for our 'mother.'

Awesome poem. Thanks for posting it!

On 06/30/2016 08:08 AM, Reader1810 said:

Hey tim

Loved it all, but I believe I heard Michael speaking the last two verses and he was right in every word he spoke.

As always, nicely done

Aw Reader, you're lovely. Thanks you for reading this and sharing your thoughts, I love to hear what people think..

tim xo

On 07/01/2016 07:58 AM, AC Benus said:

There are a couple of forms that impress me because they are good at polarities – Rubaiyat and Cinquains both excel at being light-hearted or grave as mood dictates. Here you chose interlocking Rubaiyat and gave them a timeless feel, which is no small achievement.

 

Some of the images are really beautiful, but others are equally haunting. Like the vanished gods, and we being like imprinted goslings still looking for our 'mother.'

 

Awesome poem. Thanks for posting it!

Any success I have at poetry is shared with you AC. Your prompts, your sharing of your knowledge and your precious time all have helped me learn. Thank you, AC.

tim xo

On 2016-06-29 at 6:08 PM, Reader1810 said:

Hey tim
Loved it all, but I believe I heard Michael speaking the last two verses and he was right in every word he spoke.
As always, nicely done

Maybe...not exactly me, but it's a great poem!