Panic2: Draw Me 2. Panic Sanitaria Springs

Thank you for such a comprehensive review! Don't read my responses if you haven't read the hidden items in the review!

I'm glad you enjoyed Isaac as much as I do. You may have given up on Family before because it doesn't come from my normal POVs, but from an adult. Sometimes I enjoy those less than I might because it includes things I'd rather not deal with on an everyday basis like work and making meals and planning - you know, adult stuff. It's also hard to draw the line in a story where an adult is taking on the job of parenting a child who is a teen. Teens can be great when you're not in charge of them, but with them struggling toward adulthood and wanting to make their own choices in a more affirmative way and the adult trying to keep them guided on a safe path...it's inevitable that there will be a clash of personalities. So there is some license both in not mentioning every little instance of 'pick that up' or 'turn that off' or 'will you stop freaking nagging me?!?!?' because I want you to like Isaac, not think of him as a brat.

I've gotten the chance to write several intimate scenes and you're right, there is a stereotype that being a certain build or whatever equates with your desires in bed. There are short tops and tall bottoms - or people who simply switch as it suits them or don't do that at all.

With reference to the 'streaming gamer', I'd agree with you except that Isaac was addressing someone who wouldn't know what a streamer was, possibly even without the added context of 'gamer' being attached. Adding in 'gamer' for his grandmother's reference would have been a variation in this case for clarity versus what he might say to a peer.

You're right, it was a roller coaster. So when I was mapping this out in my head I had Derry and Jack and how are they doing now? I'm not a fan, for the most part, of breaking up a couple and yet drama is what moves things forward; conflict. So I thought about having Derrys' father become ill - in fact in the scene where he and Derry talk before the adultery is revealed, I was thinking that Derry's father was arranging his affairs. Killing a character isn't something I take lightly or as an easy plot device - it has repercussions down the road, and frankly we've all read things that are quite sad. So I took a page from my good friend @Israfil in terms of plotting and had him be a cheater - and twisting the knife with whom he had cheated. I think by necessity someone dealing with a tabloid style mess would be very up and down, much like a roller coaster. Derry goes from 'everything is going all right' to 'my hair is on fire and my ass is catching' from one moment to the next because the situation is unresolved and lurking behind everything else. Dysfunctional people manufacture more dysfunction, and Derry's mom was incredibly short-sighted and guided by her anger. I think she will regret it, in time.

I never returned to Derry's job application at the grocery store as he'd landed a new job, but he'd probably revisit that before the end of the summer job at the school.

Thank you again for your review, and thank you for pointing out things that you didn't like as much as others. I appreciate your time!