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2013 - Spring - A Night To Remember Entry

Six Seconds - 6. Six

Five years back and a hundred kilometres away. Sage was still sixteen. He was bandaged and homeless and he was alone, driving a car down a highway in the middle of the night, a single duffel bag in the backseat, leaving the one person he had ever cared about behind. Yet, hope still filled him. His tears stopped, and he reached to retrieve a cigarette from the side pocket of the car door. In Sage's mind, Callen's face was preserved forever; seventeen and golden, vulnerable in the moonlight, and that vision pained him more than ever. But what really mattered was that Callen was happy when Sage had left.

New Seatrouver, Sage thought suddenly. He would stop by New Seatrouver to see if there were any jobs he could do.

He cranked up the radio, blinking tears of exhaustion from his eyes, but Sage wouldn't notice until, too late, the drunk driver heading straight at him at a hundred and twenty kilometres an hour in the opposite direction at the wide curve up ahead.

An ear-shattering scream of horns. The world shook once and then Sage's rusty Volvo smashed to a stop.

The nose of the car had collapsed in a split second of crushing violence, and Sage was pinned to his steering wheel. He lay there, limp, his seat shrouded in curtains of blood, his thoracic cage compressed flat, his internal organs relaxed and still. His life torn asunder in a fleeting moment of impact.

And although Sage was dead by nearly all physiological standpoints, the neurons in his cortex blinked weakly, communicating to each other in rapid-fire for the entirety of six seconds, flashing and diverging into a million forking paths like a school of firefly squid creating bioluminescent labyrinths near the ocean shore.

In the individual streams of some of those divergences, Sage had decided to stop at the side of the road to sleep, and the drunk driver had passed on by. Sage would reach New Seatrouver by the morning. He would find a job, an apartment, and live the rest of his life in solitude. In other paths still, Sage had decided to go west to Portland to enjoy the city before it sank underneath the ocean, instead, never to see Callen again as well. In some, they would instead, reunite when they were fifty five and fifty six, each married, with two children each, and depart on their separate ways.

In other branches, the roads would end for them, blinking out in a lightning flash of blue. Sage would learn that Callen had died driving off an unmanned road off the side of a popular ski resort, and in other ones, Sage was left wishing he had another moment with Callen as he lay pinned in a flipped car at the side of the highway.

Yet in a select few realities where they both remained alive and well, Callen would find Sage six months later at his stay in New Seatrouver, red-faced and furious. They would shout and fight and curse, and in some, Callen would leave to never come back.

But in one, he would stay. They would make up, move in, and spend the better half of their days together. And Callen would finally get the chance to drive Sage out to see the rural night skies, alit with nothing else other than a billion glowing nebulas and possibilities.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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2013 by FishWings. All rights reserved. This story or any portion thereof including all related art may not be reproduced or used in any manner whatsoever except with the express written permission of the author.
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2013 - Spring - A Night To Remember Entry
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I don't think there could have been a better ending for this story (given the start of the story). I liked the last paragraph of the author's note. Hope... Hope in this story, hope in their true love, hope in Callen and Sage that they do get together.

 

Now that I have read the whole story, I must say it's a great story.You write amazingly well. You drew me completely in the story. You said exactly what you should where you should. The imagery were great too. I still remember the scene where Callen gets up to leave and Sage stops him. Small things that make this story beautiful.

 

Your characters are so endearing. They are not perfect. But yes, they are both so noble. It feel a honor to read their tale. It has been a real emotional roller-coaster this last hour. You have well infused humour, romance, tragedy and a bit of mystery in this story. Great story. There's so much more that I want to say about this story. But I'll just say: Kudos to you, Fishie. It's... perfect!

 

P.S The graphics, on the story page, was stunning too.

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On 03/15/2013 10:52 AM, Ieshwar said:
I don't think there could have been a better ending for this story (given the start of the story). I liked the last paragraph of the author's note. Hope... Hope in this story, hope in their true love, hope in Callen and Sage that they do get together.

 

Now that I have read the whole story, I must say it's a great story.You write amazingly well. You drew me completely in the story. You said exactly what you should where you should. The imagery were great too. I still remember the scene where Callen gets up to leave and Sage stops him. Small things that make this story beautiful.

 

Your characters are so endearing. They are not perfect. But yes, they are both so noble. It feel a honor to read their tale. It has been a real emotional roller-coaster this last hour. You have well infused humour, romance, tragedy and a bit of mystery in this story. Great story. There's so much more that I want to say about this story. But I'll just say: Kudos to you, Fishie. It's... perfect!

 

P.S The graphics, on the story page, was stunning too.

Ieshwar, I'm glad you got one of the themes of the story: hope, in a its simplicity. I'm also happy that you liked both the characters -- one of my betas told me that he thought that both of them were flawed. At first I thought that was a bad thing but then I realized no one is perfect. Thank you again for reading! Your comments made my day, really.
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This was a very interesting read. I have to admit in some ways I am very saddened by this entire story, and somewhat disturbed by the concept. I've been been very good with grasping the idea of alternate realities or possibilities without feeling somewhat disturbed at the idea - It always makes me think about how, if there is a reality for every possibility, then somewhere there are some very horrible worlds.

However I must say I overall loved this story - it was a very treasured read, and the theme of hope is lovely. But I do think about what could have been for Sage and Callen and that in some ways makes me feel very desolate.

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On 03/15/2013 04:25 PM, Wicked Witch said:
This was a very interesting read. I have to admit in some ways I am very saddened by this entire story, and somewhat disturbed by the concept. I've been been very good with grasping the idea of alternate realities or possibilities without feeling somewhat disturbed at the idea - It always makes me think about how, if there is a reality for every possibility, then somewhere there are some very horrible worlds.

However I must say I overall loved this story - it was a very treasured read, and the theme of hope is lovely. But I do think about what could have been for Sage and Callen and that in some ways makes me feel very desolate.

Hello Wicked Witch. I am glad that you liked the story overall. The concepts of alternate realities are quite fascinating. I have to agree, "Six Seconds" is essentially a tragic read, and I'm sorry that some aspects of it made you feel desolate. Thank you very much for reading!
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I think you round it off well, clearing things up but leaving for plenty of "possibilities", as you say. The last paragraph is lovely and hopeful, without copping out on the darkness at the centre of the story. Nicely handled piece all round, I'd say.

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On 03/16/2013 09:09 PM, Dolores Esteban said:
I'm completely stunned and at a loss of words. I'm usually hesitant to use it, but I must: :worship: Excellent.
Thank you so much Dolores Esteban. Your kind words mean a lot to me.
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On 03/16/2013 10:47 PM, carringtonrj said:
I think you round it off well, clearing things up but leaving for plenty of "possibilities", as you say. The last paragraph is lovely and hopeful, without copping out on the darkness at the centre of the story. Nicely handled piece all round, I'd say.
Thank you RJ. I tried to bring some hope into an otherwise very tragic ending.
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That was beautiful, bro. Just, like, so beautiful. Q_Q

 

Alternate timelines/worlds is an interesting and mesmerising concept. Through them, anything imaginable is possible. I always find myself wondering how life (both my own and as a whole, including history) would be like different decisions were made, or fate simply choose another route. Plus, it's also fun fantasizing. ;)

 

Amazing stuff, Fishy.

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On 03/18/2013 08:44 AM, Finn said:
That was beautiful, bro. Just, like, so beautiful. Q_Q

 

Alternate timelines/worlds is an interesting and mesmerising concept. Through them, anything imaginable is possible. I always find myself wondering how life (both my own and as a whole, including history) would be like different decisions were made, or fate simply choose another route. Plus, it's also fun fantasizing. ;)

 

Amazing stuff, Fishy.

Hello Finn, thanks for reviewing! Yeah I was just reading your story, funny how it was at the same time. It was interesting because I discovered some minor overlapping concepts of parallel universes in both stories. Thanks for the kind words and thank you for reading.
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Alternate worlds, six seconds of time and a lifetime of heartache rolled into one. I opt to think that they are happy in their hereafter wherever that may be. They went through a lot in their childhood as best friends and then the year as enemies. Maybe that is why they got a chance to make amends with each other, to alleviate all the pain. Beautiful!

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On 03/22/2013 02:54 AM, joann414 said:
Alternate worlds, six seconds of time and a lifetime of heartache rolled into one. I opt to think that they are happy in their hereafter wherever that may be. They went through a lot in their childhood as best friends and then the year as enemies. Maybe that is why they got a chance to make amends with each other, to alleviate all the pain. Beautiful!
I'm glad you saw the ending as happy. That was what I wanted to instill into this story -- surprising hope amidst the inevitable tragedy. Thank you very much for reviewing and reading "Six Seconds" Jo Ann.
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I was so hesitant to read on after that first chapter. I hate unhappy endings. But I love how you told the story. I don't cry often, but it was one of those frustrating cries when you know the ending already and there's nothing you can do to change it. The story was completely beautiful and told in such a simple, but complex way. You have left a very deep impression and I am so glad I read this story. Thank you. ^-^

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On 05/05/2013 11:31 PM, said:
I was so hesitant to read on after that first chapter. I hate unhappy endings. But I love how you told the story. I don't cry often, but it was one of those frustrating cries when you know the ending already and there's nothing you can do to change it. The story was completely beautiful and told in such a simple, but complex way. You have left a very deep impression and I am so glad I read this story. Thank you. ^-^
Thank you for the lovely review Myiege. I am glad that you have enjoyed the story even though you don't like unhappy endings. I tried to instill something different in "Six Seconds."
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I read this and I don't only think of Callen and Sage, but about each of us. I hope that somewhere there is a reality where things that we have each hoped for have happened. Those that we have loved and lost are still with us. Luc, you are simply an amazing writer.

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On 12/19/2013 01:11 PM, A.J. said:
I read this and I don't only think of Callen and Sage, but about each of us. I hope that somewhere there is a reality where things that we have each hoped for have happened. Those that we have loved and lost are still with us. Luc, you are simply an amazing writer.
I really do hope that there are other realities in which all of our loved ones still walk with us. Thanks for taking the time to review everything AJ, I'm glad you enjoyed the story and I really appreciate your feedback.
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On 03/25/2014 03:50 AM, Miles Long said:
Tragically hopeful and very beautiful. Thank you.
nouuu thank YOU for reading :3
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