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  • 01/16/2015
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PBax's Prompt Work - 2. Chapter 2

Poetry Prompt 1 -- Tanka

The pond ice settles

Pops and pings reverberate

Frozen reeds take heed

Yearning for spring is pointless

Pause heavily for rebirth

 

The walnut tree creaks

Another limb drops to death

Needs of fruit denied

What remains feeds more deeply

The root does its job blindly

 

Coyotes howl clear

Trysts of heat in bitter cold

Loud cries of yearning

Sparks of life not yet a pack

The womb holds fast till April

 

Fire takes me aside

Dancing with my shivering

No time to stagnate

Rest prune germinate it calls

Your cycles here are not done

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AC Benus

These are four very good Tanka, and there is a balance with them being together and yet remaining independent in a way. The themes of winter and pause come through very loud and clear, and also you have honed in on the personal nature of feeling that Tanka can allow. I love that the most, because you have used nature as analogy for emotions, and that is what the heart of the form is all about. I hope you write some more of these, and I hope you get inspired to look at the other poetry prompts as well. Great job!

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On 01/17/2015 09:00 AM, AC Benus said:
These are four very good Tanka, and there is a balance with them being together and yet remaining independent in a way. The themes of winter and pause come through very loud and clear, and also you have honed in on the personal nature of feeling that Tanka can allow. I love that the most, because you have used nature as analogy for emotions, and that is what the heart of the form is all about. I hope you write some more of these, and I hope you get inspired to look at the other poetry prompts as well. Great job!
I'm kind of flabbergasted. I knew I enjoyed writing this. To receive such a lovely and encouraging response though, well, it has left me kind of tongue-tied.

 

All I can really say is I'm genuinely grateful you took the time to share these kind words. Thank you.

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