Christian000

The audience can assume what happens, but in the poem the poet challenges the audience to take the perspective of the character. To fantasies as an adolescent and be helplessly taken away by sheer blood rush. With this in mind, CLIMAX, the title, does not accurately introduce the more euphorically vague poem. Instead i used it as a one word preface to catch the reader (who expects this poem to open up at a fast pace) in a slightly awkward position -to give the sense of a man/boy who is not under the Complete influence of teenage hormones (otherwise it would have been Much more awkward) yet still unexperienced. As I reread this poem I feel that some mechanics did not work as consistently as I hoped, yet, because it was nothing specific in the poem I was not able to point it out; thank you very much for mentioning this the way you did! -simply the way you articulated click in my head. (about my short lines in this poem) I delivered this poem Exactly how I wanted to (this was the rhythm and structure I chose for particular reasons), yet at times it does not seem as fluid nor as lucid as I hoped. -"mind-rape"- I did not intended to make it appear that way. I wanted a strong vivid description of tension. . . Am glad you mention these line (He quickly approached . . . He wandered). When I wrote this poem I wanted it to entice a wide degree of readers, both average and sharp readers. These lines I used as a point of departure -indicated by the pause then sudden raise in tempo also it is the break where fantasy turns into questionable reality(to the character)- , from this line on the main character, the curious dumbfounded young man, loses his sense of reality. Again, Thank You for your comments and interests!!! (I will post others I have left out now.) - Christian000

interestingly enough, i post 3 poems all around the same time. and the latest poem get the most views. why? simply because it is titled CLIMAX. : )

(p.s.- this story was originally about two guys but since i only use pronouns i changed it so the reader does not get confused) CLIMAX He bit his lip at the sight of her Fearlessly, their eyes dived into each other His heart dropped. ross. and throbbed. Once Twice Thrice He quickly approached climax as his mind ventured through her clothes. . Down to her core, through her skin, to her flesh, He wandered. . . . Adoring her flesh, He made contact. Ripe vigor and skin Like dogs, they pulled on each other. Raping her heart of all it's love- he entered her bosom. With a breathe- With his tongue He entered her soul And There He found Her . ! . Bang Like quick thunder Cupid's arrow ate through his core And wrenched his heart to the surface. . On the floor of the janitor's closet His skin and brawn still tight and wet His clothes drenched in juice. -- He never learned what happened that day.

LOOKING FOR MORE Every day I am found Every night I am lost For I come and go "Friends?" "Family?" Who will I remember Who will I be tomorrow? Since when have I cared?! Who cares if I hate the night! I will still have her Who cares if my hearts lives! With Vanity I dance in the cold air I laugh! I scream! I quench my thirst with sand I beat my drums to death. (while my heart bleeds for truth) With empty lips I kiss the shadows!! (while my heart starves of love) OOH How I mock pain OOH How I've become Numb! . . Oooh How _________ I________ feel _________ so profoundly EMPTY

If Only I Not Love ooh how I dearly hate the accursed creature that beats in my bosom how it sings to all creation how it adores all life how it bleeds two fold for every tear of another how I wish to carve from my flesh, from my dear soul, this monstrous immortal, which at every agonizing beat, pumps my flesh with perpetuating red love Why must I love those who hate me Why must I share the hate of my lovers Why must I be enticed to kiss those who sworn to kill me, those who have sworn me a horrific destiny OH! Poor eyes who suffer my heart's consequences OH! Poor body who must shelter a soul who loves yet hates himself OOH! Poor World, Poor God, Why! Why must you be burdened with all my pain, with all my hate, with all my Love!!!