Wow, Sunshine. That was some smokin' writing. For a BLOG entry, no less. You certainly seem to have gotten over that early tentativeness of writing sex scenes. Completely. As always, it's not porn; for you, it's always love, passion, desire, intertwined with the physical act (which can be beautiful on its own, don't get me wrong) in the way that...crap, how do I put it? Well, it's how I want sex to be for me, lol. The whole package. *sigh*

A couple of thoughts - cuz you know I can't just leave you a glowing comment. Like every other author here, you have to find a non-repetitive way to say "dick" that's not crude. And I know it's an age-old battle. But "hardness"? First of all, I would never use that word when talking about sex with my partner. Second, you use it twice. I know it's hard to use "cock" or "dick" but "erection" isn't too bad...I find that sometimes when authors are describing a particular action - stroking, for example - using a sort of clinical term like "shaft" or "erection" is a middle ground between a crude term ("f**kstick") and an overly-vague one ("member" or "sex"), and if it's in an artful scene, it doesn't sound like something out of an anatomy book or a 7th grade health class text.

Also, I feel like I saw something I shouldn't have, since I think I know the people involved...does that make me naughty?

Brilliant stuff, love. So many feelings were wrapped up in that tight little package, I just can't express it properly. Thank you for posting.

Dez

Awwwww

That was so sweat and beautiful, Viv! WOW, so good

Kevin