O Dear So Dear

[Christian000]

[O Dear so dear!

I lie to you with my eyes!

Yet do not fret!!

For I repent

With a thousand deaths and countless tears

And endless shrieks of horror and fear

For denying my love and sorrows-

O Dear so dear.]

 

 

 

 

 

 

BTW, I took the exclamation point off of the forth line because the transition between the different tones is too sharp (this makes the poem seem obscure); so, I will return it back to the way I originally had it.

-written between Sunday and today.

Edited June 7, 2008 by Christian000

[AFriendlyFace]

O Dear so dear!

I lie to you with my eyes!

Yet do not fret!!

For I repent

With a thousand deaths and countless tears

And endless shrieks of horror and fear

For denying my love and sorrows-

O Dear so dear.

 

-written between Sunday and today.

I like it, based on the italicized line, in context with the rest of the poem, I'm going to interpret it to mean that the 'lie' is more an omission than an outright fib, but that even that 'lie' the denying of love and sorrows is still painful.

 

Of course I might be completely off base. Anyway, nice job, dude

 

-Kevin

[Christian000]

I like it, based on the italicized line, in context with the rest of the poem, I'm going to interpret it to mean that the 'lie' is more an omission than an outright fib, but that even that 'lie' the denying of love and sorrows is still painful.

 

Of course I might be completely off base. Anyway, nice job, dude

 

-Kevin

You hit the target Kevin.

The narrator does not tell his love how dearly he loves him nor just how much pain he goes through in life; yet he does this out of love. Because he feels guilty for denying him from his feels we can assume that his love also loves him to an extent.

 

He loves him so much that he would keep him entirely from himself to protect him from something undisclosed

---notice that the narrator puts two exclamation points after "fret" and nothing after were he mentions his sufferings; the narrator is much more occupied with his love's possible pain then with his actual pain. also he list is pains not to feel sympathy for himself but to emphasis that he does repent---

but probably from his "sorrows" or whatever he associates with it.

 

Notice also that the poem is in the present tense, so love which is mentioned in the poem is still disclosed- the poem itself is an omission (I wrote the entire poem in [] but I forgot to put them on when I typed it on the cite).

 

The first line is exclamated for the bitter irony and pain of loving someone so dearly yet he may not recognize himself as his "O Dear so dear"- if he actually said it. The narrator is telling himself that it is ok that he denies his most dearest of dears because he makes up for every moment not being with him with his own deep sufferings.

[Christian000]

This poem is very paradoxical (in fact it is the most so I ever written until I vex-up my other poem on Death).

[AFriendlyFace]

He loves him so much that he would keep him entirely from himself to protect him from something undisclosed

---notice that the narrator puts two exclamation points after "fret" and nothing after were he mentions his sufferings; the narrator is much more occupied with his love's possible pain then with his actual pain. also he list is pains not to feel sympathy for himself but to emphasis that he does repent---

but probably from his "sorrows" or whatever he associates with it.

I hadn't noticed that! Thanks for clarifying; that definitely adds a deeper level to the poem!

 

Notice also that the poem is in the present tense, so love which is mentioned in the poem is still disclosed- the poem itself is an omission (I wrote the entire poem in [] but I forgot to put them on when I typed it on the cite).

 

The first line is exclamated for the bitter irony and pain of loving someone so dearly yet he may not recognize himself as his "O Dear so dear"- if he actually said it. The narrator is telling himself that it is ok that he denies his most dearest of dears because he makes up for every moment not being with him with his own deep sufferings.

Excellent! Very thoughtful and well done!

[Christian000]

[O Dear so dear!

I lie to you with my eyes!

Yet do not fret!!

For I repent

With a thousand deaths and countless tears

And endless shrieks of horror and fear

For denying my love and sorrows-

O Dear so dear.]

For all the pros out there- I know you all are wondering why I put so much excessive emphasis on the second line and not so much on the second to last: not just is it italicized and exclaimed, but also it has that "extra" part, "with my eyes" (all the lines in the poem are 4 and 9 syllables except the second line- it stand out completely-, yet it could just be written as "I lie to you!" which has 4 syllables). I have two reasons:

 

1.) "with my eyes" explains that the narrator even denies his feelings in his body language.

 

2.) "with my eyes" is better describing a personal relationship I have with someone which is almost entirely based on body language. This is crucial news to the narrator's love; and it burns him to deny his love something that he wishes to hear so direly (remember the conflict in the narrator, the part of him that wants to tell his love is narrating this poem in his head because he can not tell him the truth for reasons undisclosed -at least not completely- by the narrator). I write the poem in the context of this relationship. At this point, I will admit that I am also the narrator.

- I did not want to admit it at first because I did not want to undermined the validity of the poem by letting the audience know that I wrote the poem in a context they could never read and fully understand.

 

Also you might ask "why put emphasis on the second and not the second to last?"- "they are both the short comings of the narrator to his love, why doesn't the narrator treat them both with the same pain?"

 

1) The narrator does not want to over scrutinize the particular reasons why he repents so much. remember this poem is narrated in his head; also his list of repentance and the reason why he repents are placed side-by-side. he does not want to even think or hint for a slit second the opposite (that lying may not be worth the sacrifice) so he jets over(the dash after the sorrows) to the ultimate reason why he repents for his lies (his "O Dear so dear") which he further emphasis by putting extra space in-between the words of the last line.

 

The last "unknown" in the poem- I mentioned the importance of the lines where he list his repentance and said that they are more focused on the fact that he does repent, then why don't I put an exclamation point at the end of this line?

1.) again, this is referenced just slightly out of context. The narrator, while he is preoccupied more with his love then with himself when he says "Yet do not fret!!", he doubts that he really cares for his spiritual/emotional/mental condition by feeling unsure whether or not it is appropriate to emphasis "For I repent" as if his love really wants to hear this. again, this ties into my personality and many factors that you could only recognize if you actually knew me and my relationship with this person.

Edited June 7, 2008 by Christian000