Hi guys, I have started writing my first story ever, and I wanted to know how much is too much?
I feel like my stories are kind of lengthy because of all the details that I put in my writing. Personally, I think the details are fantastic when the story is sexual in nature. I feel more focused on what's happening.
But, I'm not sure that it's all that necessary to convey imagery when typical situations are occurring.
I'd like to give an excerpt of two paragraphs from a story I'm writing. One is sexual in nature, but the other has more of a subtle tone. Do you think it's important for me to be as descriptive if the situation isn't action filled?
This paragraph was taken from a chapter that was written about an early egyptian male couple. The second chapter sets back to the present.
I turnedover while Saahanib slid his legs under the blankets next to mine. I could feel the warmth from his body as heheld me under his arm while the other rested under the ribs on my lower side. He exhaled in deep relaxation. I waited for him to speak but he stayedsilent. Perhaps,he has fallen asleep, I thought. I relaxed in his arms and began to close my eyes when I felt his fingerstwitch. I stood motionless, as he raisedhis hand and gently caressed my arms, moving his hand further down to mythigh. I could feel his heart beatingharder. My own heart began to beatquickly. As he drove his fingers deeperbetween the linens around my waste, I could feel his fingers graze the top ofmy hairs. I turned over quickly to facehim. I have had just about enough of hisbehavior. "Why do you do thisSah
