Hasimir Fenrig
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It may sound weird, but I'm very interested myself in seeing their relationship develop. I have some plans in mind, but sometimes the characters can even surprise the author...
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Chapter 13 My legs burned and I was panting like an old crock, but I had arrived at the shed. Candlelight poured through the gaps between the wooden planks of the door. He was still awake. For a moment, I considered to knock, but decided it’d be better to confront Maraki inside. With careful movements, I opened the door and entered. Maraki was kneeling in the middle of the single room, his back to the door and five candles placed around him. Just seeing him made my heart beat faster and it was
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Chapter 12 It was already dawning when my tears stopped flowing. I had kept asking myself what I had done wrong. Then I had felt angry because of Maraki’s refusal to see me, followed by sadness again. I just couldn’t hold a grudge against him. I heard laughter and the clanking of tableware. Whether Maraki was with them? I pushed back the blanket, let my legs slide out of the bed and sat up taking my time. My head didn’t protest. Carefully, I tested whether my legs were willing to carry me. The
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I like my fans rabid, but my canines I prefer rabies-free... :-pLittle Silya does also have a special name for her Dad. But that'll be a surprise...
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I'm getting a little worried... is the "strangeness" of the Mogul Emperor overdone to a point that he is completely unintelligible?If you like to, you can pm me with your assessment. Thanks for the review! ^^
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You've got all the details right, but I'll paraphrase just to be sure. ^^1. The Mogul Emperor is powerful enough to locate a person in his realm by reaching out for his mind. Elyran, for some unknown (^^) reason, cannot be traced by magic. 2. Maraki and Elyran don't have a clue about 1. 3. Killing the family of the Nuzr shall remind the other Nuzrs that their first duty is to serve the Emperor. They may have a family, but they will fall with the Nuzr. That's one hell of a motivation, isn't it? I really enjoy writing dialogue for the Emperor. I love this off-worldish style. Do you know the opening scene with the Navigator of the 1984 Dune movie? :-)
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Having such an avid fan fuels my motivation... ^^ Thank you very much!
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Chapter 11 The Councilor’s right leg hurt as he ascended the steps to the meditation chamber of his master. He loathed the First Healer of the Court, his haughty demeanor, his arrogance. No one else dared to talk to a member of the Benevolent Council like this. “Ramesh…” The healer had had the audacity to call him by name. “… be more patient. Pains like this are to be expected if you get blasted to pieces by your own magical creation.” His counter spell had barely kept him alive. He didn’t
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Thanks a lot for your review. I'm really eager to put down all the ideas I have planned for this story. Hope you'll like them too. ^^
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Thank you very much for your feedback! I sometimes wonder whether my characters are too stereotypical. Hearing from you that they're not helps me a lot. ^^
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Ideas are there, only time is lacking :-(I hope to finish another chapter by Sunday. Thanks for your feedback!
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I don't want to spoil anything, but the questions you raised have occurred to me as well... :-)
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'Geez, all that self-defence training! For what, I ask?'They're out of the evil prison, but now they are in the evil world... who knows what's lurking around those corners... :-p The Nuzr is gone for sure, but the Councilor... It was quite a new experience for me to write something 'action-packed'. My other stories were quite deliberately paced. Nice to hear it worked for you.
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I'm glad you liked it.I reread this chapter multiple times, always changing something. Seems like it was worth the effort. :-)
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Chapter 10 Maraki hadn’t moved yet. His chin rested on his chest and his muscles were tensed up, but his breathing had calmed down. I put my hands on the floor to get up. This smallest of movements had been enough to draw his attention. Faster than I could see, he had jumped into a crouching position. He was leaning to his right and his left leg was stretched out. He supported himself with both hands. His gaze was fixed on me. Those eyes had lost all resemblance to amber and had turned into t
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It makes me really happy to know that you like my stories that much. It's a nice incentive and motivation to go on writing. Thanks a lot for your praise and feedback!
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I want to thank you for this review and the on-going feedback you give me. Thumbs up! ^^
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As I've commented before I'm heavily experimenting with cliff hangers. This one was impossible to leave out. I'm looking forward to your reaction towards Maraki after the next chapter. I hope to get it finished this weekend. I'm having a little more workload at the university right now. Perhaps I've to do some exam corrections on Saturday, but I won't stand a weekend without writing. ^^
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Don't praise me too much or I might actually believe it.^^ For me, English is a very elegant language. I love to put down ideas and scenes in it. Your theory about my "different" style due to my native language of German is interesting and very plausible.
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That's not how it is supposed to be formatted (all the other chapters are ok). Moreover, I could swear that the formatting was correct when I originally posted it. I've to wait till I'm home and repost this chapter. Thanks for pointing this out to me.
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This cliffhanger insisted to be used :-) Thank you again for your review. I appreciate your constant feedback very much. I'm just an attention whore...^^
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Thank you very much for your friendly feedback. I'm glad you enjoy it so much.My last stories had anti-climatic chapter ends most of the time. I'm experimenting with cliffhangers now. Seems to work ^^.
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Chapter 9 When I woke up, Maraki’s head had slid down into my lap. His shoulder pressed on my leg which had turned numb in return. But I wanted to let him rest after what he has gone through. I bent forward to have a look at his face and the contentedness on it made me smile. As I leant back, my right hand brushed over the heap of his clothes. We had forgotten to dress him again. I snickered silently. The cloak covered all important parts, so it didn’t really matter. My gaze had moved to the pl
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Thanks again! Normally, "sex scenes" are boring to write. That may sound weird, but for me it's true. This one was far more interesting to put down.
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I'm so glad that you enjoyed this chapter so much. For the Ogrushkai language: it's not really based on any language (at least, no one I know). There are two guidelines for myself: Ogrushkai is agglutinative (the apostrophes separate the single words); word order carries additional information like social status or mood. Apart from this "I'm making things up".
