Hasimir Fenrig

Thank you very much for your encouraging words! I'm already much more relaxed about the situation now. Most of my uses of these tenses weren't actually wrong, but I simply overused them. I can imagine that for a native speaker it can become annoying to read a "rare" tense over and over again. I used the past perfect to structure the actions in time more precisely, but this isn't actually necessary. Don't let a mathematician write fiction! The editor even removed some of my "whom"s, which were most certainly correct. A case of hyper-grammar. At the moment, preparing 'Dumb' for release is consuming much more time than expected. And it's costing much much more money than expected. I'm quite sure I missed a license, permit and/or a clearance certificate by the Queen of England, the Pope or the Flying Spaghetti Monster. Quite an endeavor for something I'm doing 'just for fun'. If someone has some valuable hints for self-publishing a kindle book, I'll be glad to listen. I'll re-work the existing chapters of 'The Ardor' while waiting for the final edit of 'Dumb' and, as soon as it is uploaded to amazon, will resume work on 'The Ardor'. That's a promise!

Unfortunately, I have to announce a little delay for the next chapters of 'The Ardor'. I've submitted my story 'Dumb' to a professional editing service and the commented version arrived yesterday via email. There are tons of errors regarding past perfect, past progressive and (some) dialogue attributions. There are some other things wrong (prepositions, some inappropriate words), but those were expected. I'm currently working through the edited version of 'Dumb', checking and approving the changes. Though I know my English is far from perfect, seeing the extent of my ignorance red-on-white is giving me the blues (color-pun intended). I've also started to work over 'The Ardor' again. But I'm a little self-conscious now, questioning every use of past perfect and past progressive. Theoretically, I thought I knew how to use these tenses, but in practice, I obviously don't. I already posted an ad for an editor here on GA. Of course, I'll continue my work on 'The Ardor', but I have to admit that I'm a little afraid and would like to get a grasp on these issues before seriously going on.

Another "retardierender Moment" ^^But this "dream" sequence was a very early idea and I was glad to be able to put it down now. You already reminded yourself of patience, so I'll refrain from this. :-p Thank you for sharing your thoughts!

Chapter 17 I was floating in darkness. That wasn’t quite right, because a pillar of light stretched up and down before me. It extended so far that its ends were out of my sight. The countless, oscillating strands forming this spire were not able to illuminate the blackness surrounding it. Calmness filled me, paired with unwavering determination. I didn’t know what I was so sure about. Maraki was here with me, hovering at an arm length away to my right. I extended my hand. “Hold me, shin’ta’pre

Thank you once more! Yes, Maraki and Elyran are heading for the Ogrushkai Union. It may sound weird, but I'm also looking forward for what will happen there. ^^

I really looked forward for this weekend and did nothing but writing. It was wonderful! ^^ I loved writing about the Carris family, but I think it was time for Elyran and Maraki to go on. There will be many more interesting characters on their journey... and one or two, perhaps even three secrets to be revealed... :-) Thank you for commenting!

All good things come to an end...Before Mrs. Furtado sues me, I just jot a quick thank you! ;-)

I tried canned Grikkar... but it isn't the same... :-) Thank you for your review!

Chapter 16 “An… Or..bit… Orbit… consists of ten Tenths and fifteen Cy..cles that do not belong to any Tenth. Those are called the ‘Cycles of Rest’. A Tenth consists of thirty Cycles. A Cycle consists of twenty-five Units. A Unit consists of fifty Parts. A Part consists of fifty Fractions.” It was amazing. Silya and Dunir had gobbled up the knowledge I had offered them. In less than a Tenth, they had learned all the letters and could read at much more than an elementary level. It only took a li

Thank you so much. It really means a lot to me that people enjoy my stories. 'Opposites attract' being my first will always be something special for me. So I'm more than glad that you liked it.

The Mogul Emperor attuned himself to the characteristic "frequency" of Maraki using his blood. There is no special link between them that Elyran could see. The Emperor is only listening to something that is always there, but now he can do it more accurately. This is the explanation the arcane sciences give us... :-) Thanks again for sharing your comments.

Thanks for your view on this chapter! I very much appreciate your constant input! Maraki wasn't in full Ardor yet; that explains why he was more in control of himself. Elyran's experiences as a bottom weren't negative for him. He got hurt, but only slightly. He's still hoping to find a way for Maraki to take him again. I hope I'm not spoiling too much if I say that the plot'll speed up now. But I'll still take my time for some details and there are some more things to be learned about Maraki and Elyran... ;-)

It was time to give the plot another nudge... ^^ I want to say thank you for all your reviews till now.

Chapter 15 Feida had sent me to bed; something, my uncle had never done. I had offered to help her with her chores, but she had been unrelenting in this question. “Someone who roves about at night has to rest during the Cycle. Especially, if he has just jumped off the chariot to the gods.” She had been dead serious, but her eyes had carried mildness in them. If I ever had a mother, I’d have wanted her to be like Feida. It was afternoon and I was lying in my room, watching the occasional bird

Thank you for easing my worries a little more. ^^ I don't want to rush the plot, but don't want to drag it out either. I hope to find a good balance. Thnaks fpr sharing your opinion!

I was a little worried whether this chapter was too calm.But for a fantasy stroy it's important to bring a little "color" to the world, isn't it? (

I really got a little carried away... ^^But I promise that it'll get there and that your questions will be answered. :-) Thanks for your comment!

I'm a mathematician. All hopes for sanity died a long time ago. :-) I love the Carris family as well... *hinting back* *hinting back* ^^ Thanks a lot for your feedback!

I got a little "carried away" with telling details... but I'm glad you liked it anyway. ^^There are still exams on my desk, but I hope to get another chapter together soon. Thanks for reviewing!

Chapter 14 Waking up in the morning was a treat if your first thought was the memory of being brought to bed by the one you loved. Maraki had carried me to my bed and had laid me down in his careful way. Not a full Fraction had passed before I had been yearning for the warmth of his body and the gentle rocking of his breathing. Kneeling down beside the bed, he had brushed my lips with his and had promised that we would ask Feida and Greiff about him moving into the house first in the morning. D

I'd like to present my first fantasy-themed story: 'The Ardor' It's a sword-and-magic type novel in which romance plays an important part. I don't want to spoiler much of the content, but the tag line reads like this: A thief who learns that stealing the wrong thing can change everything. A warrior on a journey to leave his past behind. A fallen god yearning to return to the mortal world. A story about ancient magic, decisions and love. I want to say thank you to the GA members who regularly post reviews for my story. You're the best! SInce I'm a real attention whore, I want to encourage more people to comment on the story. If something simply doesn't work for you or you think something is really good, let me know. PLEASE!

And warriors do kiss... ^^ I'm experimenting with "retarding moments" (is that the English word... at least it's the German one ^^). I'm very impatient and it's normally hard. But this chapter was really a treat for myself.

You and some other readers were waiting to see what would happen between Elyran and Maraki. Because I loathe waiting myself, I wanted to do something nice for you.Still, I wanted to get this chapter out firat. It was most fun to write.

Thank you. I can only repeat: I love ROMANCE (capital letters intended ^^)

Their former experiences were an interesting point for me as well.They had become close, had become intimate, before their relationship even started. For me that was something new to explore.