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I'll reveal more in chapter four. It's currently a work in process so hopefully it'll be out soon:-) Thank you for your review
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That's what I asked Santa for ;-) Thank you for your review, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Chapter 4 is in works and I'll have it out soon.
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Thank you for you review, I hope you enjoy the third chapter.
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Thank you for you review, I hope you enjoy the third chapter.
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Gavin dodged around the groups of people littered around the dance floor, steadily making his way to the table where his friends sat. Tate’s words kept repeating in his head. He didn't know if he could handle this again. He fought the urge to look over his shoulder at Tate. “You started without me?” He asked, scowling when he saw the table his friends sat at. Shot glasses and beer bottles littered the surface. In return everyone called out a greeting to him, the effects of the
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I love the depth and emotion your characters have. I can not wait for the next chapter so hop to it kay?
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I hope I didn't disappoint with the second chapter. :-)
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I quite enjoyed looking for inspiration for Tate. ;-)There are reasons for both Gavin and Tate's action, though I'll go more into it later on. Tate knows what he wants and goes after it while Gavin is more hesitant.
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Thank you for your review. I'll look into the forum and appreciate your advice. To be honest I've never heard of an em dash. I think I need to work on my descriptions also. I didn't quite achieve what I was going for with the 'half stutter, half whisper', or with Gavin's stuttering in general. Your revision looks cleaner and it is helpful to see an example of where I can improve. Hopefully my two chapters look okay for my first story, and I'll try to remember your advice for my future chapters.
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“Hi Tate. It’s nice to meet you, I’m Gavin. Welcome to the neighborhood.” “Thanks.” He pointed toward the opposite side of Gavin’s house. A thick covering of trees and an acre separated the two properties. “I’m going to be your new neighbor.” “I didn’t realize that place was for sale. Well, congrats on your new home. When do you officially move in?” Tate grinned. “I’m technically moving in tomorrow, but I don’t plan on leaving tonight. I’m not f
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Thanks. I thought I had caught everything, but apparently not. Oh well, I'll just review my next chapter more thoroughly
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Yay! Thanks! This is the first time I've put anything out there that I've written, so I was a little nervous. :-)
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Chapter 1 The sun had just come up, and the sky was streaked with breath taking shades or pink, blue and orange. Gavin pulled his back door behind him and made his way to the woods behind his home. His long legs encased in a pair of soft grey pajama pants, his torso and feet bare. With travel mug in hand, he headed for his favorite spot. It was a small area that he kept clean of debris with an outdoor chair facing the national forest that ran along the back of his property. Gav
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Gavin has everything...almost. His college loans are paid off, he has a great job, and a house he loves even if it's empty when he comes home. He also has a sexy new neighbor, Tate, that he cannot stop thinking about. Gavin has finally let the past go even if he is clinging to some insecurities and trust issues. Tate wants Gavin more than anything, but it can only work if Gavin can finally move on and accept Tate’s secret.
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