Shaylan

I love how you presented the political climate. Made it more realistic. Lots of questions so far, but I know it'll get answered eventually.

Thank you for producing a sequel. As always, your story building is marvelous. Am loving it already. I just don't agree with how the matriarch went about her story telling. The audience is made up of kids, I think she should've used smaller words. I know if I'm seven and she talked to me that way, I would either be very bored and not paying attention cause I don't understand what she's saying, or interrupting every few seconds to ask her to explain. Anticipation is high. Looking forward to reading the rest.

A couple of things: Why did you kill Carlos?! I was starting to like him!!! Have you published this yet? You need to. It's so good. It's like watching a movie. If you have, let me know where please. Mira and Shay are very sweet together. I liked how they interacted with each other. However, a couple of chapters in, I found it tiring. It's like a very exclusive mutual admiration club. Yes. I know that they each feel like the other is the most wonderful and precious thing ever. I get it. Let's move on please. I liked how each of your characters have very distinct "voices". They really came alive. I didn't agree with how Carlos and Morgan change loyalties so fast. Though you did provide adequate explanation for it, I felt there should've been more angst and inner turmoil. Like with Morgan. Sure he didn't like his superiors and some of his companions. But bonds should've been formed anyway. He must've liked someone enough to show some hesitation on killing his former companions, even being a trained soldier. I understand it's not the point of the story. But I feel it was glossed over too much. Overall though, I really enjoyed this. It's so well written. And I'm glad you shared this with us readers. Im just sad it took me this long to discover your work.

OMG! That totally blindsided me. I thought all those scenes were foreshadowings that Brian was gonna die. And when I thought he did, it made me cry (sniffle). But then it appears he's still alive! Yay! But now Philip is dead. Aw. I kind had a feeling it was gonna be him with all his talk of settling down in the last chapter though. But still! (Sob, sob)

Love all your stories; the worlds so complex, the characters so three-dimensional...The names are confusing though, with all the mix-ups sometimes I don't know who's who anymore or if there was another character I haven't read about yet. Same goes with using the same names for your different stories. I encounter a name and wonder why it's so familiar and try to find him in the earlier chapters, only to realize he's from a different story This one in particular is giving me a difficult time piecing together the events and the characters' role. They're like different stories each chapter, so frustrating. Like, is Mr Green from chapter 2 the same as the one here? Or has that something to do with the gates? Also, please change the part wherein Logan tries to keep Henry in bed when he himself can barely get out of his with almost all of his extremities in a cast.