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Beautiful, as always. Again, very well thought-through and built up. I ctrl-tabbed that chapter in Firefox before I ran off to school, and there's no net there, so chapter nine was all I had in the way of reading all day (....when I didn't want to do school work). So I read it a couple times of course, and every time I'd notice something new. But honestly, now. I'm joining the Cody Liberation Front. I hate you and your cliffhangers. Well, the cliffhangers are alright, really. It's just that you'll have to come with a new chapter, and FAST. If you don't, there'll be a strike. Or something.

Wow I very rarely post in these forums, and I admit I'd much rather send an e-mail, because it doesn't sound so heartful and sincere when it's posted as a comment for the world to see, but here we go. This story is absolutely beautiful. When I write short stories they're usually something I start scribbling on in English class -- and that doesn't necessarily mean they're bad, but this story really shows a lot of consideration. It's so carefully planned out! I love how you drop tidbits about the characters in here and there; a lot of stories begin with a detailed description of the main character, and that's just stupid. Little by little we learn how Cody was thrown out of his home, what he looks like and how he looks at the world. I don't know how much research you did for this story, but you make Cody so realistic that it makes me want to go to Las Vegas again, just to find the places where he's been. I don't know how many times I've read this story now, but it's probably around twenty-five. When I go back and read it again I'll remember another amazing detail I want to comment on and I'll have to go back to this forum and post that as well! You'll hear from me then. -Ellen