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    Menace
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  • 08/01/2011
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Memories of You - 1. Chapter 1

The light is fading. The clock is ticking. I knew my time is soon. Memories flew in and out and without a second, my tears slowly tickled down my face.

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I remember our first experience. Our first kiss. It was nothing that I felt before until then. I felt whole, I felt completed. And yet my angel, my love, my saviour left without me, not even a kiss. You said you loved me, but how so when you left and by doing so crushing me. You knew I would do anything for you and yet you still left.
The time is ticking. And soon without a word I'm leaving. Just like you did when the time you were in a endless sleep. After the incident, I felt you leaving me. I felt my other soul suffering, but yet I still craved to see your crystal blue eyes that's filled with love. I still want to see it before you leave. It was a few days before my prayers were answered.
Before you left, you woke up with a smile. The crystal eyes once shut was now open. Shining with light and twinkling with the stars. Your beautiful round lips opening slightly and you said something.

"My love, my partner it's time for me to be at peace. Remember this my love, and remember it well. I will always be with you."

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The light is getting dimmer. The clock is continues to tick.
.........And the clock stops......

Copyright © 2011 Menace; All Rights Reserved.
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On 08/05/2011 04:37 AM, Marzipan said:
Well it was heartbreaking. :hug: Tell me, you tagged it historical, in wich way?
I dun't really know either..it just somehow has an atmosphere of historical way
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Tara00

awww...that was a sad one Dennis! It felt like you lived it but I don't think you have. So placing a picture in front of the readers is a talent in itself! :)

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AC Benus

i find it more of an evocative prose poem than a short story...the way the sections follow read like stanza.

i enjoyed it immensely. I could see those crystal blue eyes....

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Yettie One

Beautifully descriptive and touching.

A glimpse of sadness a trace of dusk, yet beautiful in meaning and thoughtful to us.

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Puss

This is sooo deep and soulful. Some of the best things really do come in small packages.

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Rano

Yip, you know how to paint a picture with words, especially where my vivid imagination is concerned. Your words moved me deeply -- maybe I needed this piece at this point in time, just to appreciate what I have got ... and haven't lost yet :) Well done, Menace

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Emi GS

Indeed a prose poem rather than a short story. The feelings and the hurt was so sound in the poem. I can feel the pain, in which the narrator’s have felt. I can almost see those crystal clear blues eyes. Very strong and heartfelt poem. Loved it. Fantastic job Menace...

 

~Emi. 

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