I was hoping for a confrontation there. Ehh. I guess I'll just wait for the next chapter.

I still love it though.

Keep 'em coming

Nah, no confrontation yet. Chris still needs to really embarrass himself first. Plenty of time for that...

Aww, sweet chapter

Nah, no confrontation yet. Chris still needs to really embarrass himself first. Plenty of time for that...

I do like the leisurely parts of the story, because you're packing them with information.

I do like the leisurely parts of the story, because you're packing them with information.

Yeah, I've been working on that. There's a lot of backstory, but I've decided that I really don't like huge chunks of expository dialog or third-person lecturing. Bleah. The Story Must Move. Still, without reason for the character's motivation or the world in which they move things get all abstract, and if we go that way we end up waiting for Godot, and he missed his connecting flight so it's gonna be a long wait.

So... bits and pieces. The whole story's chock full of bits and pieces. The trick is putting the right pieces in the right places. Haven't quite got that down with this "one-pass and it's out" format, but I think I'm getting the hang of it.