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Busted chapter 47



[Y'know, I think I like this cliffhanger thing...]


"I'm surprised you came here willingly," Steve said as he slid into the booth across from Joe.


"Yeah, well," Joe said, "it seemed like the best place. I ordered already."


"Not a salad, I hope," Steve said.


"Learned my lesson," Joe said as the waitress came over.


"Hey, hon," she said. She put a pitcher of Coke and a pair of water-spotted glasses on the table. "Pizzas are up in a minute."


"Thanks," Joe said. He gave her a big smile and a small wink. The waitress blushed.


"Decided to bat for my team?" Steve asked.


"Nah," Joe replied. "But it beats dying of food poisoning. So anyway, what did you want?"


"I wanted to talk to you about Chris. What did you want to talk about?"


"I wanted to talk to you about Alex," Joe said.


"Good. Same subject," Steve said.


"What? No, they're two different people. Close, but not the same."


"Joe," Steve said, "I don't think so."


"What do you mean by that?"


"What I mean is that Chris and Alex


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Oh! ... you ... you ... rat!

46 chapters, and then you get all cliffhangery. Grrr.


'twas a wickedly good chapter though.

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I don't think cliffhangers are evil. I think they're necessary, to prevent the situation in which you might as well stop reading because you're already done. I had pretty much dicounted the dissociated personality theory already, and I had already thought that Toby and Chris' illnesses might have had something to do with how Alex -- shall I say manifests?

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I like cliffhangers as a tool, I've just never been very good at them. They force continuity between chapters, which is good. One of the issues that Yankee had was that the chapters all just... ended. There wasn't clear linkage between them. That can work out fine, but it gives the reader time to rest, and that's not always a good thing.


'Course, as I've been kinda bogged down the past few days this cliffhanger may hang for a while. I've not got much queued up.

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