F**ked If I Know

[JSmith]

http://www.voy.com/17262/2/7687.htm

 

This was posted on Comicality's website a few months ago and I finally got around to reading it. To say the least, I'm really impressed with the way the author captured how the teenage mind thinks. So many authors today are always telling the story with a more 'professional' and 'serious' mindset. Their grammar is perfect, the actions and thought process of teenagers in their stories are sometimes well beyond what the 'normal' teenager would think about and do, and they just come off as a little bit fake sometimes.

 

The title isn't really that catchy, but that can always be changed. It's an ongoing chapter story with only one chapter posted so far, but the author has the potential to create a very realistic story.

[LittleBuddhaTW]

Perhaps someone should suggest to the author that they post the story in the e-fiction section of the site and post announcements of new chapters here in the main forum so we can continue to follow it?

[JSmith]

I did, but he's hesitant about doing that for his own reasons.

[JamesSavik]

I can't see it. I get an error message:

 

Invalid Message or Archive

We're sorry, the message you tried to view does not exist anymore.

 

This usually means the message expired, but can be caused by other reasons.

Perhaps you misspelled something?

[JSmith]

http://www.voy.com/17262/2/7687.html

 

That was my fault... I forgot the l on the end.

[viv]

Definitely worth a read... but I already said that once before

 

Seriously great start on something real and it hooked me!

 

Can't wait to read more...

[Dezlboi]

Well, because y'all nagged me supported me so much (hee hee), I put this story up in eFiction and I posted a new chapter. So, thank you for all the kind comments, and let me know wat you think.

 

Cheers,

Dezl