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Thank you for saying that, @Mattyboy! That's what I like to go for.
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“One million dollars!” he said, smacking Brad on the side of his head with a rolled up stack of spreadsheets right at the doorway. Brad always tried to show enthusiasm for Aaron’s work, but he had just walked in from two one-hour and three half-hour sessions of personal training and was really tired, so it may not have come off very well this time. “Don’t you do a million every month? Oh, this is only the twenty-first, is that what you mean?” “No! Not the bank’s million” Aaron laughe
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I enjoyed the read, thank you. Seems like you've researched the 60s very well. It's always good when you've got the money deflated appropriately: $20 for a day's pay, etc. You've very effectively captured the heat of pre-AC years, like when you write about brick walls shedding heat in the night. The pop-ups of 60s songs are good, even when I'm familiar with only about half of them. You refer to an actor Guy Madison; I don't know if he's historical or fictional, but those types of references are intriguing to me, and that's fun. Your overall achievement is your use your use of Martians as a metaphor for homosexuals. Good job. Good luck with your writing.
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Brad's a good man. In some future chapter, he'll be explain why he puts up with some things others among us wouldn't. Thanks for the comment about "soundly based and happy." I appreciate it.
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I see that, too, and I don't want things to get saccharine. With more development, I'd like to make them both more complete, actualized, and real; more developed, you might say! I re-worked chap 5 before I posted it, and it ended up with a swerve in it. Let me know what you think. When I lived in Chicago, about a year out after college, a straight couple from college, good friends, newlyweds, came and visited for a weekend. Saturday morning I heard him shout out of the bathroom: "B----, where's the toothbrush?" And Odie, ever the charming host, shouted "THE toothbrush? OMG! I will NEVER be married!"
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“Aaron, you need to start working out.” “Oh I know! It was that conference last week, all those bagels and sweet rolls. I must have put on two pounds!” “Well losing that would be good, but what I mean is you need to start with some free weights. It’d be good for you.” What was this about? “How long before I’d look like you?” “Well, you’re not going to look like me.” Brad hated to break it to him, but there’s a lot of genetics and physiology involved. “But you could look
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Both clever AND funny. P.S., I'm also a bourbon-ado.
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I've always believed the biggest relationship killer is whether or not they put the toothpaste cap back on... Odie
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Good point. This author will take it! Odie
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He was frightened, but look how much better he was at the end of chap 2. And as Summerabbacat pointed out above, that was all because of a good dose of Brad! Thanks esp. for the "adorable" part. Odie
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Thanks for reading! And thanks for your comment; it's generally running 50/50 on the shirt toss. As for me, I think Marie Kondo has the right idea. I've got a couple of bad memories hanging in my closet right now I ought to purge! Odie
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Brad inhaled. “Wake up. You’re on top of me again, I can’t breath.” A mumbled “sorry” came with the move over. “See what I mean? Are you awake? This is why I want separate beds.” The “No!” which came from Aaron was surprisingly strong for someone who had his eyes closed and was mostly asleep. And kind of petulant, Brad thought, like when his little niece says it. Brad wasn’t thrilled with the separate bed idea either, but this was getting bad. He kicked some covers off
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An author always likes to hear that a character rings true. Thank you for reading my story, and thank you for your welcome to GA. It's been a great experience.
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Aaron could see Brad was waiting in front of the bank’s Jackson building (he attended a meeting there). They were going out for Wednesday lunch, as usual. There was some lake effect coming down, and flurries were collecting on Brad’s head and the shoulders of his coat. For the thousandth time, Aaron noticed how good looking he was. “Hello Bradley. Ready?” “Sure. Thai or the chicken place? And it’s ‘Bradford,’ by-the-way.” “Thai.” But there was an interrupt in Aaron’s thou
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Ha! As Dr. Frahnkensteen said to Inga, "It goes without saying."
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LOL, I think the snap carried too many bad memories. Thanks for reading! Odie
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Aaron looked up to see the big, handsome guy from Desktop Services at his door. “Oh, you must be mistaken, I got the upgrade last week. You don’t have another build already, do you?” “No, I just stopped by to talk to you. I’m Brad, by the way.” “Yes, I remember you from when I first started here; you fixed the issue with my network connection. I forget the name of the tech who did my upgrade, he was young, Hispanic. It was on Tuesday. Anyway, he did a great job. He was organized
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Gary, this is great. So many parallels in our stories, I'm relieved I can honestly say I hadn't read yours first. But it shows the journey has been the same for many Jacks and Aarons, doesn't it. Like a Van Gennep liminal state. Odie
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Certainly, the brothers-in-arms among us who don't have that (or Aaron's, or yours truly's) experience are fortunate.
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“Well, they didn’t make fun of me or anything” Aaron thought with relief when he walked out of the fabric store. In fact, other than ‘Hello' and ‘Thank you,’ none of the clerks said anything to him at all. He was glad he didn’t need help finding what he was looking for, because then he didn’t need to explain what he needed a snap for. They were in a section with a lot of other things called “notions” (for some reason). He pulled the snaps out of the plastic bag while on the bus ride
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