John Galaor

First of all, I had to admit this is not a serious experiment. But it gave us a hint about how it is society. Well, the first case about maltreating a lady, I understand well they did not act, for most of us are cowards. We are not sort of fighters and get scared of being ourselves wounded if we mess into to the act. Pure cowardice, I suppose can be called. we had been raised to be cowards and do not get involved. It is a pure miracle if we can be converted into soldiers to fight a war. There is also also a question of "indifference". This is not the same thing as cowardice, but it is a relative. In the case of bullies in school, it has been proved that bullies had "carte blanche", to bully and to harass a sissy or a gay, or whatever. It is not big deal for most people in school. In the police comes afterwards the facts to a high school, nobody knows any thing of what happened. Nobody has seen the putative bullies to mistreat the sissy, etc. It is about the same attitude. Unless the family of the victim could present a video, nobody would declare any shit against the bullies, that are often some heroic jocks. I think this is also valid for the second case you said, about the phone experiment. I got the idea, that society is a haven for heroes and bullies. They is a way to training in indifference, in a similar way to the Romans of the Empire watching the war games in the circus. Then in our high schools, the bullies are training in harassing losers, or lower class people, for they would be one day the future officers or the army. They had to have the guts to kill people without blinking. I think this is not big deal for authorities, I suppose. J.G.

It was a Sunday morning. An abnormal day that showed some hints of sunshine through some holes in the clouds. So Jimmy went to a nearby Park and sat on a bench to read a book. When he was reading, it appeared his friend Dave, a boy he knew from the working site. Dave made Jimmy to stop reading and convinced him to go with him and his friends to a dancing hall.

Life Adventures of Jimmy La Fonte These series are fragments extracted from a novel I have written. So, in a mainstream novel, events develop at much slower pace than in short stories. This is the case of this novel. Then you have to be a little patient reading this thing. This novel pretends to be an example, a dubious one, of literature. Well to enhance this story a little, I should say, this is a “bildungs-roman”. Not offense intended. Hey! Where are you going?!

Back Indoors After a period of herding sheep I passed a time learning about the inner working of the monastery’s kitchen. There I was doing all the lower works of a beginner, not only to help but also to learn humility. The Gramma said that we can not achieve the enlightenment if we do not passe a time doing the hard works of life like everybody. We were all day busy in the kitchen but nevertheless we had time to play tricks one to another and some practical jokes. One day, a boy c

What is amazing, at least for me, it was the time with each case. In the first case, after 20 minutes, the experiment was called off. In the second case, with the lady much better clothed, it took 4 minutes 15 seconds, for someone bending to help. In the third case, with the actor clothed as an executive or a millionaire, it took just 4.25 seconds for a little crowd to gather around him to help. There were about like 5 or 6 persons helping the imaginary rich man. That's tell me, that I should cloth much better than at present if I want to earn a change of being helped by strangers. Analyzing this in fractions a time, the second case earned a reaction in a fifth of the time, if really the ordinary clothed guy were helped in 20 minutes. But he was not; then the ratio is unknown, or at least it would be greater then 1/5 Then, the ratio of time between the first case and the third, would had been 4/72,000 = (4/20*60*60) if the first person would had got any help at the end of twenty minutes. Any way, not any body even stopped to glance at him, or approached to smell him, to see if he was drunk or something. Nobody called the police, or any phone number asking for help. So, the argument about the poor man stinking does not stand up as likely. Anyway, anyone on drugs would not be whining as much as this actor. You could not dismiss this case saying this is an actor, for you need to watch him for some seconds to determine this. That made me think we worship people with high social rank. I was arguing with a guy I knew in my adolescence. He was now a sort of anarchist Marxist dreaming with the social revolution of the fifties or sixties. I told him, "you are wrong. Ordinary people want to get rich, or at least they want to own as many signs of richness as possible. That made think why so many people in the US are in favor that rich and the big corporations do not pay any taxes. They are dreaming of becoming rich themselves." He was a little stunned, then I continued, "Then your idea of killing the system is gonna fail. People do not want to risk loosing what they own. Even, if they do not own anything, they can dream of grabbing something from richer people, like his wallet, or his car, or something." He did not like my reply. Then, my provisional conclusion is that we worship rich people. We can easily bend down to help them, as you had watched in the video. We are prone to help the powerful, and disregard the powerless. What dismay me is that, very likely, I would had behaved in the same way as the people we can watch in this video. I am not different to them. If we were merely a bunch of primates, probably we are that, we would be also watching for what are doing the alpha male and his henchmen to help them or lick them, if any of them fall off a branch. If an alpha male angry at me, I would surely be quick to bend down and turn around showing my rear at him as a sign of submission. John Galaor

I was amazed watching this video on youtube. Then I invite you to comment, what conclusions you can take from this social experiment. Some would say is an experiment in psychology. In this case it should be social psychology. Comments, please? I want to know if all watchers here think the same as me.

well, Jian. I am here again. You said you like to hear my comments on your stories. Well, I am learning also a lot reading stories that I like. Then, I learned a lot of jargon and common words, and words about sex, by reading stories at nifty. For my knowledge of English is artificial. it comes from reading. Then, I am learning also how to write by reading this story of yours. So, I suppose I am not contradicting myself for commenting what I think are normal errors of composition. Then, many of my comments can be totally far-fetched due to my natural ignorance. I think is easy for me to spot errors of composition, for I had been writing stories for the last ten years or so. Well, I was writing stories in Spanish. But as people did not like my stories in Spanish, I changed to write in English. And I had a lot of mail from my stories in nifty. That had restored my battered self-esteem to comfortable levels. I had been writing in English for the last three years. It has been a little hard for me, as my only knowledge of English has come from reading novels. I had not formal studies of English, neither of writing. Then, I had some troubles with grammar and lexicon. For sometimes I just had the image for a "wrist" or an "ankle" and the word in English did not came ready to my mind. So I had to look in the dictionary. But soon the mind was tamed into finding the correct word almost instantly. I write by means of images; I imagine a scene in my mind and draw a picture of it by writing. That is the way I write. Then, I am going to comment your story. Then first thing that puzzled me was the first paragraph. <“Well, hello to you too, Coop.” Sarcasm suited him well. How could it not? That must have been the sexiest half-smile I’d ever seen in my life!> This phrase made think, Mich met both at Coop apartment? Then a little later, it seem that Mich and Vern did not eyed each other. Then, I had the idea that Vern had left already, but now Mich said that. This and other errors, tell me you write the story in a hurry and never come back to revise what you wrote. The number of errors one can make writing is great. I have to come back to my stories like four or five times at least. And this is only to control the flow of the scenes. How we can pass from a scene to the next. Then, to spot minor errors of grammar, or other, one has to revise the text reading slowly. Almost word by word. Then the next paragraph “My you’re so welcoming.” He scanned my face. I didn’t dare gaze into his eyes, but didn’t look away either. “Can I at least come in first?” Here, a fine point of punctuation. I would had changed the paragraph as the next, “My! You’re so welcoming.” He scanned my face. I didn’t dare gaze into his eyes, but didn’t look away either. Then he said, “Can I at least come in first?” Well, I had more comments to make, but I am blushing. What a jerk I am, trying to correct the story of a native that write so well. I beg your pardon, Jian. I am so sorry. I feel bad. Oh, my god!

here I am again, Jian. This chapter is also very good in the way of composition. Perhaps is not as thrilling as the other chapters. Then, I found a few minor glitches. like this one << I turned to my side. Anyone not used to a single bed would have fallen to the floor if they copied what I did, but I was used to it after years of practice.>> It is not clear the meaning. Why is someone going to fall off of s single bed? I suppose you are using a slang word, "copy" as meaning... if they had done what I did. Anyway, I am not in favor of using slang words, unless they are widespread a lot. The slang word on a region is not understood in other places. So, we have to take care with slang words. I heard say "copy" on radio communications of military personnel. "Do you copied me?" meaning, "do you get what I said?" Next in line was, I love books. Can’t get enough of them. What’s wrong with me? I lunged for the book. It looks exaggerated to use the word "longed" in this case. It is not such a rare word, but it does not looks appropriate for the case. I does not seem to have sense to use the word "longed" for this action. Then you say, “You’re coming with and that’s final.” Well, it looks like you should have said, “You’re coming with me and that’s final.” or more simply, “You’re coming and that’s final.” then, <Ok, I felt guilty now about griping. “I enjoyed the haircut.”> Gripping must be slang, complaining. I do not think a good idea to use slang. It is better to reduce it to a minimum. It can be more acceptable to be used in dialogues. But not for the narrator. Then, you present... <When I finally looked up, all I saw was my apartment’s closed door. How she managed to be so irritating at one time then so caring the next was beyond me> It seems the last four paragraphs needs some form of mending. Then, after mending the meaning will be real crisp.This happened because you did not care to revise this part. You were in a haste to publish the chapter and that was all. Look at them as you put them one after the other. <<“’Night, Coop. See you at school tomorrow.” When I finally looked up, all I saw was my apartment’s closed door. How she managed to be so irritating at one time then so caring the next was beyond me? The soft knock on the door brought me out of my incredulity at what just happened. “Vern, th-” f**k! “What are you doing here?” In spite of my irritation, I couldn’t help but notice how adorable Mich looked leaning against the door frame with a goofy smile on his face. >> You see what I mean? I miss some logical chaining between these paragraphs. I made this critical work because you write real good. If the general attitude of the writer would had been of I carelessness, I would not had commented at all. I really see a lot of talent in the way you write, Jian.

oh, my! Jian. You are really good writing. Well, I said that in the former review of chapter 2 Well, once settled that you are good writing I do not know how to... continue. Then, as you are so good, and you had like 15 reviews, I suppose full of praises, I can dare comment a few points. I had saved them in a file, to help me with the comments. this part... <<I was deeply bothered and not because I might be randomly hallucinating (which puts my sanity in question), but because I might have imagined Mich to be half-naked (which puts my sexuality in question). >> These comments on tilted letters in cursive are unnecessary. The idea is implicit without the comments. Then, <<to distract myself from 'gawking' at his toned chest and stomach,>> well, I don't mind this word. But in general has a very low frequency. Look at this link, http://www.wordcount.org/main.php In the Wordcount of British National Corpus, I cannot find the word gawk, or gawking, only gawky and has a rank in towards lower frequencies over 55 thousand. The greater the number the lower the frequency of the word. This list was taken from more than 40 thousand files, about written and speaking material. Totaling more than 100 million words. I know it is not the same thing with literature. Literature shows more often rate words. I a list of more than three thousand pages I have, (165,000 words) the frequency of gawky was 27 times among hundred million total words. Then I met this phrase, <<“You coming?” Mich was already at the door and with jelly-like legs, I approached him.>> It took me by surprise the word. I was doubting. Then I checked it. The trouble is that reading fast look as if Mich approached the door with jelly-like legs. Then, is better if you rephrase it like this, “You coming?” Mich was already at the door and I approached him with jelly-like legs. I should not had dare to write any criticism, for the most probably outcome of this is to harvest enemies. I hope, it would not be the case with you, for you are very good writing, and your self-esteem is not put in question. Yours, J.G.

You are really a good story teller, Jian. I will have to erase what I said in my former review that 'I hate winners'. Then, if you are a winner, you fully deserve it so far. I love you as a writer, and I even feel some envy of your talent, Jian. Not any writer worthy of that name ever tells any other story teller that he envies him. But my admiration is genuine, Jian. Here I cannot complain of lack of background. For the story is contemporary and many of the images are implicit. So not any need to tell as many details. Neither I can complain that you are using too many "Saxon words". By this term I mean I refer to word of low frequency. No all are Saxon words, but can come from Norse, Dutch or Latin language. These words make me realize how ignorant I am. I took this idea from Grisham, the famous writer of bestsellers. I read an interview he had and a journalist asked him, Journalist: "have you a secret to have success with your novels?" Grisham: "Yeah. I cannot call ignorant my readers." Journalist: "What... what do you mean, to call them ignorant?" Grisham: "It means, you cannot write words like... sloven, amble, bawl or asperser. If you write words like this, you are probably calling ignorant your readers." An this is the end, of the review. You are so good, I have not found any faults. I do not mean that there are zero faults in the story. All books and stories had some fault or other. I mean, that I had not notice any.

that one was very good, Jian. Well, I had to confess it started being a little bit boring, the first few lines. But later it was improving very fast, and got really interesting. I do not usually praise stories I could not read. Well, I do not say anything when I do not like a story, but this one was good. I cannot say it is a first class story, but is good enough for me to read. Then, I am telling I will read the next chapter. By the way, wow! I have seen this story of yours is a hit with 19 reviews! Damn! Well, I would had not read this story if I would had known this. one. I feel a little hate for the winners. And with this story you look one. Anyway, what was said is what I had said. And I am not going to erase a word.

And these words mean...?

Ya. That is true also. But are they really such delicate? I had the idea that bottom gays were sturdy enough to take hard bangs. So, I am disoriented at this moment. Are they truly delicate and could not take up a big piece of flesh? That is the question I am not able to answer.

That is a good idea. I never met an emo in my life and I was not considering the depressive side of them. Well, I do not like depressive moods at all. But I am not a party man myself. I had never been in a party, of course. I am more a lonely man of books. I cannot feel well in a group with more than five persons. A group of five begins to look a little suffocating crowd.

My theory says that if you find hot an homo, you are becoming more of a top. People, on the contrary, that love stud males feel more of a bottom. So they need someone topping them. It's only a theory. It stands, unless your feeling for the emo is more aesthetic, like in the feeling "I would love to look like them." Then, if you love their look, and want to be like they, is different. Is more like you feel like being an emo.

I started to be ware at twelve. But I had a few fantasies about girls. The problem is that I was in a boarding school permanently, and there were not any girl that I could feel or touch up. Then, out of sight, out of your the mind. One cannot have in his mind permanently an ideal impossible to watch and to feel. But one could have some degree of lust at this age. Or at least a few boys of this age could have a feeling of lust. Then, a few were adventurous enough to experiment with other boys; that was my case. It was not easy, for most boys did not show any lust at this age. Then in my case, I was driven by lust, not by any special instinct to do it with other boys. About this question of substitution in sex, I remember a journalist that asked a famous escapist inmate, "I heard a saying that you had a male lover in prison. What can you say about this?" The inmate replied, "in a prison full of males, the most likely female you could find is another male." Then, when one is young lad and had not any decent job to earn a life, when I felt lust it was very, likely that I looked for another male. By my previous experience with girls, they do not showed any interest in the punky young man I was. Then I was guessing, probably rightly, that females were not interested in relieving your lust in the least. It worse that this. I felt they did rejected me. I probably showed a low rank punky profile. So they could not care less. Then, in my case it was easy to conclude that if I wanted something more thrilling than a lonely jerk off I needed to look for another young male. Then, the famous theory of conservatives about a choice in sex is false. To have a choice you need a situation in which the weight of both options are balanced. To be called "a choice" the case should present two or more options of the same cost, and the rewards should be also comparable. Analyzing this case in this light, anybody would see that options were not balanced. It is a simple philosophical problem. On the other hand, there must be young males that had felt interested in other males since adolescence. They feel a little like girls who like manly males; but not like sissy males, except as sisters or friends. The case of gay women I cannot analyze well because I am not a woman. Perhaps they feel threatened by males, by their rough manners, and lack of empathy. Or even by bad sexual experiences. As lustful males are very fast and rough, while females needs more "frotage"; more rubbing of skin with skin, for twenty or thirty minutes, to get in heat. To get into the play of sex. This is only a theory of mine. A rubbish speculation.

The aria of Queen of the Night, in the Magic Flute, I prefer this one. John Galaor

Ok, Louis. This story has a point of humor that I love also. As always, your style is perfect. It is not exactly the way I would had written the story, but each writer do it in a different way, and takes up different topics to stuff his stories. That is the reason we can read, for each story is different, or is told in a different manner. If we were all writing the same way, or over the same story, it would be rather boring.

Ok, Louis. This chapter is very good also. I was wondering what was the reason I find so easy to read your stories. Then, the obvious answer was "the clarity of the text". It is not that this story so far, was such thriller or something. For it is not dramatic or very exciting. But it is pleasant. So, is in this sort of stories where the quality of the texts maintains the interest of the reading. A careless composition is not pleasant to read, at least for me. For I do not feel sure of myself. Well, English is not my mother tongue. Then, if a text difficult to read, it is calling ignorant or stupid. Then, nobody loves to be called stupid, I suppose.

very good and very interesting, Louis. Perfect language, precise. There are some moments I am unfamiliar with the background, but not enough as dissuade me of the reading. As you are a mature writer, I do not need to shower more praises over you, as would be the case with a young person writing his first stories. It was a pleasant reading, Louis.

Very good, sensible story, Louis-Harris. I loved it from the first line to the last. What more can I say? It has the precise amount of words, is a direct, objective story, and very sure of the facts. Many authors write stories as if it were a distant occurrence, as it were something he had heard asaying or as they had a fuzzy memory of the events that occured. I do not mean that a story should be overblown and full of details, like in Proust's narrative. No, I hate this excess of detail. Too much details rob the scene to the characters of the plot, or to the plot itself. Well, I tend to forget I was trying to praise you work. I am too talkative.

I do not like this lady, for some unknown reason. Perhaps she is of higher class; I am not sure of this. Then... I do not like people that triumph easily. All this are nothing but speculation on my part. I try to imagine that a song with so little quality is going to be printed on discs, if the singer do not pay for it. Then, the song looks a little trashy to my ears, but not much trashier than the pop music in general. But considering that I am an old dinosaur, is not any miracle I do not like pop music. I think all people love the songs from when he is an older adolescent of 16 or 17. Then this is the best music for the rest of his life. It has not any relation with the imaginary quality of the music. I think it does not exists. Then, a little blushing I have to confess that I love a few of the popular songs of 30 or 40 years ago. So, the conclusion of this argument is... there is not an objective quality in music. Many of the classical musics were booed or jeered up when they presented ballets, operas, or just symphonies. They were rejected and despised by their professional colleagues. This is not only a musical phenomenon. Many of the best writers of the past were criticized and insulted by critics and other writers. But this is not only a phenomenon of the arts. I was watching a video of the BBC over famous mathematicians, and many of them were hated by their colleagues to the point that they ended mad, or had blown off their brain with a revolver. Famous mathematicians like Cantor, Boltzmann or Gödel, I am not an historian to mention others, were these I mentioned were hated by colleagues. Well, mathematicians can not be hated by the general public, for ordinary public do not understand maths.

he probably paid to spread this song on the media. He could even could had paid for the disc. But I do not think is that bad, when compared to most of the noise I hear. Just a little worse than average. in music it could happen like with IQ. Most people have an intelligence of 100 +/- 16 points. That is more than 2/3 of the people. Only 15% has an intelligence over 116. Then same thing can occur with the music. Most of it is trashy.

I am too old to appreciate this music. John

It can be as bad as you say. But I do not see a meaningful difference with most popular music that sounds around. John