Educate me: what is a macguffin? I'm not ashamed to ask!
So, what is Ducan's role going to be? Hmmm... I like the way you introduce the characters in this story. Really subtle and that makes me even more curious!
I love Alan, the transformation into a wolf was a so good. The eyes - his favorite part of transformation - mine too Also the dualism of a werewolf was represented in a way that made me re-read it twice, just because I liked it.
The creation myth was a really funny one! I know you didn't mean it to be funny, but all the creation myths are a bit naive, and that's how they are supposed to be. Really nice touch with it! It just adds some extra-spice to the story.