Uplifted Spirit

Took me a bit of effort to get the hang of things too. Just as I'm getting it, they changed the site interface. Now that I've gotten the hang of it, I like this one better. Nice people here. Bleeding throught the navel seems logical actually.

Just watched Star Trek Into Darkness this afternoon and it is awesome. I hate fight and chase scenes because they take time from the story, but the movie had a great theme and was well put together. So I was willing to wait through them for the heart of the movie.

I started writing my story Knots during November a couple years back by participating in the National Novel Writing Month. NanoWriMo. The goal is to write 50,000 words in a month. I've now done it four times. Knots was the story of two 9th graders who were best friends. The idea was to talk about the knots they tie in their lives. The odd thing is, they did tie knots, but the knots were not the ones I envisioned when I started. It didn't start out as a story about two gay boys, and in some ways, isn't. I kept wondering if there was a place for it in the regular young adult market because it dealt with young adult sex. So I took the story and began posting it here. I've been editing and revising as I go. The approach to the story is different because I wanted to be different. You'll have to read it to see if I succeeded.

Andy Dillon and I had the hottest sex after his birthday party. I’m not sure what got into him, but it was like he was demon possessed as he and I sucked and fucked. It was like he was a madman. I loved it. A few weird things happened before we had all that hot sex that I couldn’t explain. Dillon welcomed Matt and me, introduced Matt to his parents, and when I stepped away to get something to drink, two incoming freshman, Thomas and Randy came up to me and began asking me all kinds of ques

MJ Even though I carry the name Uplifted Spirit, I hate to say that when everything in my life seems perfect, I expect something bad to happen. Life is really like that. But the opposite is also true. When life seems bad, I expect it to turn gold again.

I understand why you're disappointed in Dillon. But victims often become victimizers. It's sad but true. But my name isn't Uplifted Spirit for nothing. Hopefully, you spirit will be uplifted by the end of the story. Andy sure is in denial. He's been wounded and it's like he's bleeding to death. A slow death is often worse than a quick one. Of course, I'm not talking about real death, but the death in one's spirit when something like this happens. Do you think the two young boys at the party distracted Andy so Dillon could bring Matt up to his room? Are they part of the plot? Again, thanks for your review. I always love it when you say, "Terrific chapter Spirit."

I like that you said the story depresses you so I must be doing something right. Nicely put. I've been reading your story and love your voice and sense of humor.

It is a painful chapter. Poor Andy. Andy had said something on Thursday at the motel that the only thing that would end their relationship was if Dillon killed his parents, Matt, or himself. Dillon didn't kill him, but he wounded him. Will he bleed to death? Let's hope not.

Andy Dillon told me he was spending his birthday on Tuesday with his parents so I waited until evening to call and wish him a happy birthday. He sounded happy. “Thanks,” he said. I know it’s my birthday and all, but I have a surprise for you. What are you doing Thursday?” “Nothing right now. What do you have in mind?” “Can you get away from about three to midnight?” “Let me check. I’ll call you back.” I

Lisa It's all a part of the plot which thickens as we go. I'm doing my best to set up the ending of the story. That's all the hint you will get. I'm posting chapter 19 tomorrow (Thursday) and there are even more surprises to come. Oh, you might have already guessed what they are, but I added something to make the plot even a bit more twisted. So you'll have to keep reading.

You are observant. I thought I fixed that error. Guess not. Need to go back and change it. US

Daithi My original idea was to play off the difference between the two boys. They're best friends, but they are different in so many ways. Some friendships would break up because of this, but both boys are loyal to each other even though Andy gets pissed at Matt. Uplifted Spirit

Love your name furnished soul. You're right. I'm always a few chapters behind with Nifty. Seems that's true with a lot of authors for some reason. It's much harder to edit the story with Nifty, so I usually wait for comments here. I update the chapters based on feedback. Glad you're enjoying the story. Uplifted Spirit

Lisa I love how you find the pinpointed questions. There is a reason why Dillon asked Andy to be his boyfriend. It's there for a purpose. I may not always succeed, but I try not to put anything in that isn't pertinent to the story. Dillon was a victim and I hint that the reason he disappeared may have been because he was caught or was going to be caught and left. There's the possibility that other boys were involved and he was arrested for sex with them and Dillon was never known as a victim at the time. I'm leaving it to the reader to decide. The latter is what was in mind as I wrote it. I wanted to be able to draw the parallel of the victimizer suddenly disappearing. Thanks for the Father's Day comment. Had a great time. I'm spending the afternoon with my grandaughter tomorrow. Thanks again for the review.

MJ85 You are very observant and a good reader. I'm not sure how many others paid much attention to Dillon calling out Matt's name. It's there for a purpose, but you'll have to wait to see why. I like that your thoughts are going back and forth about what is right and wrong about the Andy/Dillon/Matt relationship. It's always a good idea to keep the reader guessing. You're right. Andy was already sexually active and was looking for a guy when Dillon came along. But what will the law think about an 18 year old having sex with a 15 year old, consensual or not? Who knows. Dillon was definitely a victim. Thanks for your comment. It's great knowing what readers are thinking. Uplifted Spirit

Ernie Ernie finally got the courage to ask Carmen Martinez on a date. “Tell you what," Matt told him. "If you ask Carmen for a date, I’ll ask Gina and we can double date. How ‘bout that?” That was just what Ernie needed to give him the courage. Carmen was now the head sophomore cheerleader. She had dark brown hair, which she usually wore in a ponytail like Gina. She was tall and thin, could easily be a model, and moved like the wind through the trees.

Daithi Unfortunately, victims become vitimizers. But Andy was more experienced at 14 than Dillon at 13. So we might question if Andy is a victim or not. Is that vague enough? I don't want to give anything away. I would be hard for Andy to bounce back from. The one thing we know is he's still alive because he's writing this story in his 20's. The question is, why are Andy and Matt writing about this year in their lives? I guess I'll leave you with that question. Uplifted Spirit

Bowling “Second spare,” Matt said as he marked the score sheet showing one strike, three squares with 7, 6, and 9, 1 spare, and 5 open frames. Gina grabbed her ball. “I’m going to catch you, Matt Spence.” She got a strike. “Strike two.” She marked the strike. Allan grabbed his ball as it rolled out of the shoot. “I really suck at this game.” Ernie rolled his eyes. “How can you expect to be good when your arms almost touch the ground?”

Daithi I put that dinner conversation in the story just to get the line about Dillon helping other boys into the story. I wanted to provide a little premonition. It really doesn't make any difference if it's true or not. Makes the reader think just like you did.

Thanks Lisa I like to keep the story focused so didn't have them discuss being gay. Hope it didn't take away from the story. I try to be subtle sometimes and hope I don't overdo it. Andy was too overcome with lust the first time so only had passing thoughts about his being experienced. Then again, Dillon is older and he may have just passed it off as age. Andy does question Dillon's prior preparation for anal sex, and of course, Dillon says he got the info off the Internet. Easy answer. Good to see you're still guessing what's going to happen next. You'll find out a little more in Chapter 17. Thanks again for taking the time to write a review.

DaithiDaithi Glad to see you're still guessing. The next chapter will let you know a little more. Your comments kind of agree with the quote I put at the end of the chapter.

Andy Dillon and I spent Thursday and Friday after practice in his bedroom. Our Friday sex was hot. We didn’t shower after practice. Saved it for when we got to Dillon’s. He lathered me up, massaged my chest and abs, grabbed by ass cheeks, lathered them up, then ran his fingers up and down my crack. All I could do was moan. Without notice, he put his finger in my hole. “Oh fuck,” I panted. He ran his finger in and out, then put two fingers in. I’d put my own finger and a dildo in my ass

I'm not sure if you're like my mother, who had two boys. She said she always wanted a girl because she wanted someone to treat her right. I laugh, because my son actually pays more attention to me than my daughter. They're both great. It's just he contacts me more often. She and I are babysitting my grandchildren this weekend. Guess you'll just have to keep reading on to find out what will happen. After all, a good author keeps their readers guessing. As usual, I look forward to your comments.

Joe Carlson, thank you for the nice comment. I really appreciate it.

Lisa, thanks for letting me know about the typos. Can't believe I spelled bra braw. The stats on teenagers having sex is surprising. As it turns out just under 50% have sex before they graduate from high school. Some one have us believe it's a lot higher. You're the second one who said they had trouble rating Knots. I'm not sure what the problem is, but I see I have a 65 reputation today. You're probably aright about Joan, but what kind of girls seduces a freshman? But I coached football for quite a few years and my sophomore quarterback, who I brought up to the varsity, was seduced by a senior. I suppose some would dispute the seduced part. They did go out and have sex for a period of time before breaking up by time he was a junior. No matter what his parents or I said on the matter didn't make any difference. The interesting thing about Nietzsche, who wrote about man as superman, was that he was a weak and sickly man. He eventually died of syphilis from a liaison he had as a young man. So in that case, he was killed and didn't get any stronger. Lisa, again thank you for your comments and editorial suggestions. I'm actually 70 and my son and daughter are both in their late 30's. It sounds like your two boys are doing well. All you can do is count your blessing, work hard at parenting, and pray a lot. (You did say two boys right?)