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Dom, Your stories seem to get better and better. This one is a masterpiece. You play with your readers like poppets. There is mystery and suspens. With the last cliffhanger, I give up trying to figure out the plot and just let you feed me with great writing Looking anxiuously for the next instalment Pascal

Great story Vance just like your other stories. I agree with Ginge that this one was easier to read than the others. Pascal PS It is also nice that you put some effort into editing. There are not many typos. One mistake though that you constantly make is using "then" instead of "than" with a comparative. It would be nice to correct that in your next story.

I voted for 2 personnalities in one body but I have a feeling it is too easy and there must be something more to it. I agree that the real problem is with the parents. And it all goes back to the circoumstances of the fall.

We know that Connor has difficulty to trust people. He is doing much better, for instance going to see Thom. But Ryan hurt him and it will probably take time for him to trust him again if ever but from some hints left by LB I have a feeling that deep down he is still in love with Ryan. What is that thing about Luigi?

Great story like everything you write. Nice way of dealing with ignorance and prejudice. Fortunately Austin is smart enough to see it and change his whole attitude. There are nice people everywhere you go but you have to go toward them with an open mind.

Thank you for another excellent chapter David. I find your characters perfectly credible and reacting as best as they are able to. As far as Connor is concerned, as he says himself, he has not much experience with relationships and in the circonstances I think he does pretty well. Pascal

DD on his site ihttp://domluka.gayauthors.org/desert/index.html s finished with chapter 36

I may be dumb but since you understand what a SKIT is would you explain it to me. Please bear in mind that english is not my native language

I kind of like peterp's picture of Connor. I don't understand what is wrong with his nose. LB's one on his site is cute but I prefer this one. It conveys the lack of selfconfidence that I think Connor has. C.James' one is certainly cute but I find him too toned and confident. I should re-read (which I might do) from the beginning to have an idea of the other characters. Isn't the picture on Awsomedude a bit old for Ryan/ Pascal

No it is DomLuka an excellent writer

I very much enjoyed this chapter. It is very difficult to imagine what cameron has gone thru all these years and suddenly seing his mother. I think that Vance describes very well the inner conflicts that Cameron experiences especially with the crucial question he asks himself "wondering if she was going to end up hurting him again". I also agree with the concern about him being gay and his future relationhip with his mother. Pascal PS: as a side note on editing, I notice that you often use "then" instead of "than" in a comparative form

LB, I am surprised by your comment as in your story (for those who have done it yet Something Out Of The Blue is a "must read") I find that maggie is a major character and a major factor in Ryan and Toby being so confortable with themselves

Sweet, sweet Connor. He has so much compassion and has to take the burden of the whole world on his shoulders and he doesn't really know how to deal with it. And as usual he has difficulties sharing his emotions although he is doing better. Great chapter Pascal

Hi I am still interested in the site.

I like the idea of Thanksgiving but really the fact that the meal has to be a certain way and no other is so boring. You americans need a bit more fantasy.