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    Chapter 20

    blb4bed commented on comicfan's story chapter in Chapter 20

    I have to agree with Cannd. I've really enjoyed this story, but this chapter seemed very abrupt. Just taking another paragraph or two to show how Jonas's next day at work went, or the actual exchange between Jonas and Lu about moving in together would have been a little gentler of a conclusion. But, I digress - it was very creative and entertaining and I look forward to your next story. Thanks for the read!
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