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I agree with him. I don't know if it is formatting error or what but right now the words are so jumbled together w/o spacing between them that it's hard to get into the story. Concept is great but the current draft needs a lot of TLC

“Davis! We’re in New York! This is the best present ever.” Bryce said. He grabbed Davis by the neck, pulled him into a hug, and French kissed him. In their periphery, they could tell the bustling crowd around them were looking at their public display of affection. But they could care less. Bryce had fallen deeper in love with Davis, if that was even possible. “You like your surprise?” Davis asked with glee. “Like it? I love it! I’ve always wanted to come here. How’d you know?” “I'm man e

Ok fixed. Hope you like the new additions. Regarding the phone call. This chapter has driven me crazy with all the errors even after I posted it. Hopefully next chapter will be better.

It had been two weeks since the tragedies in Chicago. Ryan and Kieran were healing from Alexei’s attempts to eliminate them. Ryan, Kieran, and Mitchell worked overtime to get any clue on The Ripper’s whereabouts as well as trying to locate Jacob and Louis. The case had gone stone cold. In Milwaukee and its surrounding suburbs, alert residents continued about their daily lives. The Marquette campus slowly came back to life after the horrors of ‘The Sorority House Massacre’ as the media had call

no Jason's a good guy. I have plans for him.

It stormed that night. Ryan’s disposition was just as stormy. He sat in the hospital cafeteria silently sipping his coffee, stewing over what to do. He went from grieving over nearly losing his boyfriend, to downright anger over the hospital’s treatment over them being gay. He was also angry with Alexei for stabbing Kieran. He wanted revenge. *** Ryan paced the ER waiting room, hoping that the doctors could save Kieran. His family, Bryce, Davis, Xander, and James watched helplessly as he bu

Ryan was in his office later that night. He was exhausted. He had the crime scene photos strewn all over his desk. He picked up a photo of Damien lying on the dingy, bloodstained prison mattress, ear sliced off. He picked up another photo. In it was a bloody message written on the adjacent decaying, moldy brick wall covered in prison graffiti. ‘CATCH ME IF YOU CAN.’ He turned his attention to the second set of photographs. A burned out car in an old parking lot that had been owned by a grocery

The slayings of Maria and Dominik Czorniak at the hands of their son Dino and his subsequent murder at the hands of The Ripper set off a bloody and violent chain of events known across the four states that share the shores of Lake Michigan as the Halloween Horrors. This upswing of violence had destroyed any chance the FBI and local police departments had to keep the locals from panicking. Across Illinois, Indiana, Michigan, and Wisconsin a total of twenty-five murders had inundated the FBI Field

I'm having second thoughts on the title for the story. It might have something to do with it was only uttered once but the title really doesn't match the stor's theme. My only concern is that I have posted nine chapters already and 10 is in its edits. The other concern I have is that it will alienate the readers. So it is your choice GA. Should I change it or no?

Marco is an alias for the Ripper we still don't know his real identity except he is Natalia's brother Lake Michigan Killer was the forged signature Jacob used to make Natalia's death seem like our serial killer did it Morgan is the doctor at the lab Their is also more to it than just Ryan, Kieran, Bryce, and Davis being gay that is causing the Ripper to target them. But let's not get ahead of ourselves

It was the week before Halloween and Dino Czorniak was getting frustrated. After the debacle with Davis Caldwell and Ryan Vincenzo, Colin Meyers and he had been suspended from the force for a month. He hadn’t been back more than three weeks when the body of Colin was found, and he was forced to sit the investigation out. This pissed him off mightily. More of his criminal contacts like Colleen Ventura and his secret lover Natalia had been found dead over the next couple of days. When the Wisconsi

Ryan got a phone call, it was Melinda. They had a body with a gunshot to the head. With that not matching The Ripper case, he didn’t think anything of it. That is until she told him that they had a positive identification on the body: Natalia Caldwell. Ryan's mind was whirring with questions, ‘Who would kill Natalia? Jacob? The Ripper? No, The Ripper would torture her. Did she know something that Jacob wanted kept secret? Does this have to do with the skeletons?’ “When did she die, doctor?” Ry

shes the ME for Milwaukeei think the prostitutes were from downtown Milwaukee where Marquette is located yes ill fix the letter

Chapter 7 is here!!! Read it, enjoy it, like it, and comment on it. Thanks to all you GA readers, authors and supporters for making this story as successful as it is, but please read the story to make it even more so. PS: Chapter 8 will be available soon.

Dino is probably a yer or two older than Ryan and you'll have to read on and find out. CH 7 is being seen by the mods now.