Canon Blaze

Very interesting beginning, the end of Chapter 1 is going to make me come back for more, (it also took me a while to figure out exactly what happened, well done). I thought right from the start the story was brillant. The subtle idea of the 'perfect match' came out from the very first paragraph. Attempting to find the symmetry and where everything on the table should be positioned. The character development kept me quite interested and by slowing weaving everyone together made/makes me want to continue to read more. The semi-love triangle, but more like intertangled love of friends, with Brad, Nicky and Donny is quite intruging and I want to know where it will go! I love Beth's character, her tenacity and williness to stick with Donny, which I'm sure will become tested as the story continues. I also find Brad's father and Brad's situation/dyanmic between the two scary but complex and surely will lead to much much more. The character of Brad's father is so well constructed and by making him a government official adds a lot (perhaps more so with recent events...not quite the same but parallels can be drawn). I'm really looking forward to seeing where this goes, and glad that you've got the next chapter coming out soon. Great Beginning!

Very interesting to see how some of your inspiration has come from an image in youth. To attempt to clarify, I saw Andre has unyielding in terms of his sexual advances. He was given many opportunities to slow don't, not take the next step, however at each moment he slowed but continued. He continued to lead Jason down the path of sexual exploration. I'm looking forward to the next installment.

Wow, congrads on the story, it was extremely sexy. One element that I thought was very cool throughout the peice was your interplay of Greek times. Your story reminds me of those of say Alexander the great and his multiple younger lovers and his relationship with the older Aristotle. The element that yes there is an age difference and throughout the piece you see the idea of coming to age and sexuality. It interested me that Andre was also so unyielding. It oddly added to the story instead of making it an awkward situation. I am interested to see how Andre will react to the other patrons of the hotel later, if the piece continues. In terms of your dialog I thought it worked fairly well. The flow was not disrupted between dialog and story. It also did not hurt the story at all. Overall I thought the story was quite good. I would look into developing the characters if you continue writing. The theme of sexuality will def. lead to interesting places. I'm greatly looking forward to further chapters/stories.

I love this clip, I first saw it on towlerroad and fell in love. I showed it to my friends and now we go around randomly breaking out into it. I laughed so hard when all the other little kids joined in the chorus and started singing that they have two vaders as well. Thanks for sharing it on this site.

lol...yah I love fire spinning, however people usually doubletake when I say I spin. I have some pictures of me spinning. and the video is mad crazy, it is an on campus group I'm in called Prometheus. http://video.google.com/videoplay?docid=-8...mp;q=Prometheus. I spin poi.

Hi All, I stumbled upon this site a while back but now have been able to fully explore it. My name's Nick and I'm currently a student at a small liberal arts college (go college life). I love to write but have done far more reading than writing in my life. As all college students know (past and present) reading becomes a big part of your life. I'm getting sick of the constant political theory and dry professional journals and now I just want fiction. Otherwise I'm pretty much a normal college student. I'm into Psychology, taking Korean, performaning in dance and fire spinning shows, like to design (clothes, art, etc), avid reader of the NYTimes, enjoy movies...Thank You for Smoking was amazing, love to hang out with friends and have a good time. I am looking forward to reading peoples work and just seeing what is out there. -Nick