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Hi Faxity. sorry for such a late reply. Thank you for you comments. I'm glad you enjoying the sex lol there will be more, but I'm also glad you enjoy the other, more important, aspects of the story too. Keep your feedback coming and I'll keep writing

Chapter 8 We practically vaulted off the car scrambling for our clothes. “Fucking hell, my trainer is under the fucking car,” Adam complained. “Never mind your trainer, get some fucking pants on,” I laughed nervously whilst still busying myself with my own wardrobe emergency. We panicked over the whole situation, but in the end we had time to get some pants and our t-shirts on and throw the rest of our stuff into the front seats of the car, where we sat, out of breath, waiting for the car to

Chapter 7 “I can’t, not here. I want to leave. Can you take me away please?” I pleaded. “Come on, let’s go for a drive,” he said lifting me to my feet. “Somewhere more private,” he whispered into my ear. “Are you going to be ok?” asked Lisa, genuinely concerned. “I’ll be fine, I just need some space.” “What’s happened Dan? Wait a minute, where’s Steven? Is he ok?” she asked alarmed having just realised he was missing. My dramatic entrance must have drawn all the attention towards me and ti

Hello irritable1 (I feel rude calling you that). Bare in mind this is fiction and to keep things interesting it needs a little spice here and there. I don't think it's that unbelievable that they would both keep the same secret for so long, these things do happen and Dan was on the verge of coming clean at the beginning of the story. The most farfetched part is how Steven has reacted and behaved, but then again, not an impossible reaction. Humans do crazy things to each other some times. Just how messed up Steven is is yet to be revealed, but how do recover from an episode like this?Thanks for the review, it's the best bit about writing. Please keep them coming and I'll do the same.

Thanks Faxity. You know your reviews mean a lot to me. I wanted to throw a shocker at the readers, I'm glad no one saw something like that coming. I know he's been a bastard and his actions cannot be condoned, but does no one even feel slightly worried about Steven? The guys life has just flipped upside down and he's turned on his best friend and the love of his life. He has no one now... Poor Steven. I might have to kill him off soon if everyone hates him so much lol.

Thanks for the review Cannd. I'm glad you get that moment of obligation towards Adam. This is a, to put it bluntly, shit situation for Dan to be in. He's loved Steven for years and has learned to live with those feelings, even control those feelings when he was on the verge of confessing all, but now this knew kid is on the block and BANG! You know how it feels at the beginning of a relationship. Dan has fallen head over heels for Adam, not to mention the sex, but it's still a difficult choice to make when the guy you loved and gave up on comes chasing after you as soon as you move on. I think Dan has made the noble choice if nothing else. He made a commitment and he's seeing it through. Loyalty and trust are so important in a relationship and Dan has just proven he has both qualities in abundance. As for Stevens behaviour. It is pretty manic, but he did what he did out of desperation and passion. Disgraceful behaviour, but judging by the way he has treated himself over the years and the contempt he looks upon himself with, it's safe to say no one will be able to punish him more than himself. Keep reviewing! I love to hear what you think.

Thanks for the Review Robert. I was very worried about publishing this one as it's sensitive material, plus I knew that I was throwing a bit of a curve ball at the readers. I would be surprised if anyone had saw this coming, especially the characters, which was very important to the spontaneity of it. I've tried to write it as an act of passion. Can you imagine how you would feel in Steven's shoes? Confused, in love, heart broken, betrayed, terrified. He's also been loathing himself for years. It's a complete explosion of emotion which has resulted in a very primitive and barbaric response. The right response? Of course not. But he's done it now. If he hated himself before, imagine how much he must hate himself now? Cue the pity. lol I'm glad you have been enjoying the story so far. If memory serves me well I don't think you've reviewed a chapter before. Please feel free to continue. It's my favourite part of the writing process writing.

Chapter 6 Steven acted as though nothing had happened and, as the day progressed, my doubts and fears eventually made their way to the back of my mind. Another barbecue was arranged, this time on the beach beside the lake. Afterwards a little campfire was built at the edge of the lake around which we had naturally congregated. We were all getting on as one big group now, as though we’d known each other for years. I felt as though we’d all come here together as friends… I felt like I knew eve

Hi there, thanks for the review. Glad your enjoying things and eagerly anticipating an update, which should come soon by the way. I would hope before Christmas. The conversation thing probably comes from reading and writing scripts. When I write like that it changes with every (enter) so if Dan said 'Hello' 'Hi' might be Adam's reply It could carry on... 'hello' said Dan 'Hi' 'What's up?' 'Nothing...where have you been?' 'Collecting fire wood...' You get the idea? I'd probably only write like that if it was two people talking to each other. it would be too confusing if there were more. Anyway I hope to hear from you again. Reviews make it all worth while. Thanks.

Thanks Faxity. When are you going to tell me I've done something wrong lol? I have by the way, didn't you notice? got names mixed up and everything, but It's been amended now. Signet abductions? that's bizarre and awful. As for Steven...lets just say the shit's about to hit the fan. I'm glad you don't know what's coming, at least my writing isn't too predictable.

Wow, big review, very detailed, I like it. First off, thank you for picking up on the name thing. I've edited that now. Who the hell is Claire? lol I have no idea why that happened. Maybe I'm losing it. About the drama side of things, it's sort of the way I was trying to go with things. What got me started writing this sort of thing was reading other stories that are basically pleased to meet you, you're hot, lets have sex, bang bang bang, next story. I wanted to write more of a love story and what's love without it's dramas? Sure there's got to be that level of sexual content, which becomes more prominent in the next couple of chapters, but before that, if it's not a one night stand thing, then the relationship has to build and justify the sexual connection. As I've said in an earlier post, the relationships and the characters are important to me and I'd rather write about them than anything else. On that note, I'm glad you're enjoying the Joey Karl thing. I didn't want them to become lost as supporting characters, it's important that they add something. In honesty Lisa is probably the character that needs more fleshing out, which will hopefully happen very shortly as the intensity of the situation increases. Anyway I've nearly written as much as you here. Please keep sending me your feedback. It's very helpful and you have an interesting perspective of things that I would like to hear more of. I'll keep writing and I'll try and make it good as you asked. Thanks again.

I'm glad that I'm keeping you on your toes in regards to understanding the characters. I'm trying give each character as many dimensions as possible just like we have as people. Everyone has a darker side or a softer side, or something they keep hidden. The least likely of people can turn out to have tempers and aggressive sides. Weak people can find strength and the strong can be broken down. I think to make my characters justifiable it's good to explore all the possibilities and put them in situations that test their personalities etc etc mumble mumble you get the idea. I'm glad you're still with me and still reading. Please keep sending me your reviews.

Thanks for the Review Arazon. glad your still liking things. I admit that I love my cliff-hangers. If I don't finish a chapter with a little bit of anticipation for the next, it's probably because I've finished the story, and even then I might leave you guessing. keep sending me your thoughts. Thanks

You're making me blush now with all these compliments. I'm glad you like it so much. Your comments and feedback mean everything to me and it's what makes me want to keep writing, I'm sure you know the feeling. I can tell you chapter 7 is complete and will be sent to editing shortly. 6 and 7 would have been ready over a month ago, but I've been so busy and stressed that this got put on the back burner. Plus I used to write on the train traveling long distance and now that job has finished so no more trains and that's where I found the inspiration to write. I find it hard just sitting at home, too many distractions. I'll try harder from now on.

You certainly did a lot of reading on the 2nd of November lol. Thank you again for your generous comments.

Again Faxity thanks for your kind feedback.

I've been away from the story for a while as work has taken over, but It's about time I replied to these reviews as they mean a lot to me. Your comments in particular mean a lot as I'm a fan of your writing. I'm glad you're enjoying things. Thanks for taking a look and leaving your reviews.

Chapter 5 The village wasn’t too far away, about fifteen minutes, although it did seem like Adam was driving slow, perhaps to prolong the journey. He knew that arriving at our destination meant he would have to talk and so far the journey had been pretty quiet, broken only by my request to charge my phone through the adapter he had plugged into the lighter socket. He let me of course. I hadn’t used my phone much, so it still had quite a lot of battery life left, but going to the village meant t

Without a doubt the best thing I've read on this site! You're a proper writer. I will be reading the rest shortly. Oh and thanks for following my story, that's how I stumbled upon yours.

Chapter 4 When I woke the next morning my feelings of euphoria and security had somewhat dissipated, leaving behind an absolute train wreck of a hangover. I literally felt like I had been hit by a train…possibly several times. It was safe to say my brain wasn’t firing on all cylinders and it took me a moment to realise what had woken me. It was the sounds of my friends, obviously outside the tent, enquiring as to where I might be. “I think he crashed in Adam’s tent last night. He was absolutel

Thanks for commenting Canuk. I'm glad you're enjoying things so far. "Great writing" ? I must say I'm flattered. I'm enjoying writing this story, and I actually look forward to sitting down each time and continuing Dan's journey. I'm thrilled that you have connected with my writing in this way and hope not to disappoint you in the very near future with chapter 4. Please keep reading and commenting, and if you haven't rated the story yet, I'd really appreciate it if you could take the time. Thanks.

Hi Lisa, thank you for your comment. I agree, a tad unrealistic, but then again not impossible. I myself have never experienced love at first sight, but there are people who swear that they have. For these two characters I think it's justifiable. Both feel loneliness to varying degrees (You'll find out more about Adam soon) and both are incredibly attracted to each other. Also bare in mind they were both drunk when they said that to each other. I'm glad your still reading and commenting. Please continue. Chapter 4 coming very soon

Chapter 3 “I’m sorry, I’m drunk, I’m stoned, I’m fucked up, and I shouldn’t have done that. Maybe I should go,” I mumbled, as a moment of sobriety kicked me up the arse and told me what I was doing. I pushed myself off him and made to get up, but he pulled me back and tried to kiss me again. I pulled away. “Adam I shouldn’t.” “But I thought you liked me. Today…the whole day…I thought that we… I mean what about the song? I thought, you know, that you were… maybe like me?” he said quite pitif

Thank you Kjamieson for your comments. I'm happy you're enjoying things so far and can confirm the chapter 3 has been written and is currently in the editing process and should be with you shortly. Things are about to get spicy, as the plot thickens. Pleas keep commenting on future chapters and if you haven't already found time, I'd appreciate it if you could rate the story. Thanks Again.

Hi Lisa, Thank you for you comments and spotting that stupid mistake of mine. I've corrected the names and I've put the American/British(isms)to my editor to see what she thinks, so they may also be amended soon. Chapter three is in the making just now and shouldn't be too long as I have a four hour train journey today which I'm sure will result in me writing loads. Glad you're enjoying things. Please help me bump up my profile by rating the story (generously) and following me if you like. Thanks again for your support.