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  1. Mattsd175

    Chapter 5

    You've Got it.. that rush you get in the brain as your reading the words of a story that has you there in Your Minds Eye.. An adrenaline coursing through you ... Great writing that has you wanting More... Corbin, The Cold water and the panic just under control to act and do before ...Gun,Pull trigger Three Times.. loss of awareness, Gone...? The unsaid in my mind as I read Three Gunshots ,Paul hearing them and Act..Move...go.. Paul, sense Paul has to hear from where and instinctive knowledge where to run and find then See,Act do Whatever This Unconscious Life in This wilderness has taught him ..and the ability to have strength to get at, Lift Corbin out and away to cabinThink Fire Warmth Strip both to Bare Skin on skin within Sleeping Bag Then Wait..Not panic... Unanswered questions reveal Harris No Enemy but Who..? Liam maybe a Previous lover ill Keep reading can't stop... No More Comments from me as I want the Adrenaline Rush of first read.. I will Read through again a second time, Then Comment.. Great intoxicating job of Written Words that Grip and hold the Reader within Story..Wayne Gray ! Also I will Be doing the Same with stories Ive read so Far.. on the Great GA...! Read again and Comment.. Thanks Matt
  2. Mattsd175

    Chapter 4

    Paul is Gay likes Corbin ... problem Not Neighbour ! Ok there is..We all have a Past life as Long as it Ain't Murder and or Cruel .. Q n A...Liam When will that be Answered who where n What ? Paul is Good healthy bloke Good Jobs good with hands n tools n Can Do Build own House good Cook as well .. Hands on Me No Problem Corbin Secrets I look forward to finding Out Good flow to Writing a Believable So Far...
  3. Mattsd175

    Chapter 3

    All good job application done .. Paul is he or not..? Secrets to come.. thanks Good Job ..!
  4. Mattsd175

    Chapter 2

    Straight Mountain Man Paul..! Good neighbour No More than that...or ? new Shopping list leads to the cafe and the Server...? plenty to still reveal, reasons and Why... Good flow of story pace .. Wanting more... Cheers
  5. Mattsd175

    Chapter 1

    Im not one for posting comments and I piss myself off for Not doing it from the Start because, especially after A good Story (Which there are Many I've read) appreciation to the Author is probably there Main reward to Continue and I'm Hopeful on this So Far..And stop Waffling.... My goal is to post Comment after each chapter and Hope this Betters that Rush I get on reading a Good Story.. Corbin has come into some Big Lump of cash, where and how to be revealed I hope ? but the story title suggests good intentions. Corbin views a house to possibly purchase one day and appears within 24 hours its Legally his and Keys n Paperwork in hand ? Well,That would Not happen here in England,Thats a Fact ! Corbin has a Dodgy Past or, and secrets to keep.. He is a Gay Man, So what, are the USA people that uncomfortable with that still..the Answer to that is the same here in England. We are both countries people, becoming more comfortable with Gay, But Gay folk throughout have to be aware that People are Not always understanding and good intentioned dirty looks and more are always Possible. Corbin being in a New town is aware of this and or is it something else He has or has Not done.. Bruce the server could be interesting Eye candy does make us look n think.. Sex drive Twitch Normal Corbin at Approx 23 years.. good start to story just weary of False fairy Tale Life Big Money in Pocket with No effort Required Hard Work leads to Better luck End of Waffle...... roll on Next....
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