Hmm. Wonderful, I love how the actions speak of the characters personalities instead of...Just plain throwing it at the reader in some sort of..I don`t know list. Hahaha.
However, I don`t like one thing here, well as a matter of fact, all the stories online. The chapters are just toooooooo long. I don`t know, probably just my "taste" I lose focus when there`s tons of text and no end to it. Other than that, well done