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Thanks, @Brokenbind I was trying to strike a balance, where it was a monumental moment for Noah, but not one that would make it impossible or severally limit his ability to move on. I think I got there, but we will see. Thanks for reading!
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He's getting better ... slowly! At least he didn't chicken out and tried to fight, so that's something.
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First, I got rid of some grammatical errors that were driving me crazy! There are actually many subtle changes. I've also really focused more on character development, than I did in the original. You'll also notice I condensed several scenes (and took some right out). I have cut out a lot of material that I felt was either unnecessary or redundant. I also have added a fair bit of new stuff, but you'll notice more of that in the upcoming chapters. I hope this new version is worth the read, and is living up to your expectations. If anyone notices spelling or grammatical errors please do send me a private message. I can go back and edit! I'm trying my best to catch everything. I really hate errors!
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*** NOAH *** “Sebastian … I’m not ready,” I say. “We’ll go slow. I won’t hurt you.” “I know, but, I’m just not there yet.” “It will feel really good …” His hands are on my belt again. I can’t move. His weight is on me, pinning me down. “Relax, trust me, Noah ... this won't hurt. It will feel really good.” “Sebastian, not tonight …” His eyes are on me. I can see his determination. My belt clicks. It loosens. “You're reall
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@Parker OwensYou'll get a lot of answers in the next chapter, but it will be a bit of an emotional rollercoaster. As for timing of the next one, I'm just trying to fix one part. I'm not completely satisfied. I think I can make it stronger and better. As you can imagine it is a pivotal chapter. I'm hoping to post Sunday afternoon, or Monday afternoon at the latest. Sorry!
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Glad you liked it! This was actually two chapters that I combined into one, because I wanted to move things a long a bit. And, from what I heard last time from readers was that a longer chapter was okay as long as it was relevant and entertaining. Hope it was! You think I'm that nice? 🤔
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Something happens inside Sebastian's apartment with Noah. I haven't said what yet. That will be disclosed later. But that is one possibility some readers have suggested.
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@Starrynight22 @ObicanDecko I have no regrets 🤣 Gotta make sure they keep coming back for more.
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*** NOAH *** Beep, beep, beep, beep ... The monotonous drone of the alarm clock shatters the dull, aching silence. I stick my lifeless arm out of my blanket in a futile attempt to find and shut off that awful noise. Instead, I manage to knock over half of the items on my nightstand. Eventually I find the right button. Silence returns. All I want to do is just stay in bed with the blanket over my face for the rest of the day. I’m not ready to face the world just yet. All
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@randyjuan @Tonyr Just finished making changes to Chapter 10. I just need to go over it one more time to make sure there are no spelling/grammar mistakes. Should be posted tomorrow afternoon. Sorry for the delay, friends!
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Thanks @frigidjason! I try my best to post after every few days (aim is no more than 3-4 days). This week is a bit crazy with work, and I've decided to make a few structural changes in Chapter 10 so I hope it is out soon!
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And you'll see some of what you said at the end addressed in the next chapter. And I hope, soon, Jordan will redeem himself in your eyes. Lots of stuff is going to happen soon! Hang in there. As for Aiden, we may not have seen the last of him just yet ... Thanks, Jeff!
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*** JORDAN *** He thinks I don’t like him. Where in the world would he get such a crazy idea? Why wouldn’t I like him? I’ve tried including him in my life, invited him to my games, hanging out with him. Fine, there was that time at my birthday party I tried to avoid him, but surely he can’t be angry about that still. Can he? Maybe this is why he’s been a bit removed at times. Maybe it goes even further back? Maybe this is why he didn’t tell me what was bothering him and instead
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I think you’re okay. I know people don’t like Sebastian, I just didn’t realize they didn’t like him that much (and not to give anything away but he’s not done yet). Almost makes me want to rewrite the story to have a surprise twist where he turns out to be the main protagonist. No one would see that coming (though that sounds like way too much work).
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Canada. Thanksgiving here is the second Monday in October. 😃
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Good to know, thanks @Canuk and @FanLit. I just didn't want to bog down the reader with something super long that is too much to consume in one sitting. To clarify, I didn't take out an entire scene but made a few areas a bit tighter. A few things were a bit redundant so I felt they could go. Some parts I think are actually better now than they were in the original. I didn't cut anything that I thought would take away from the story. A few of the upcoming chapters are much longer than this one; good to know I don't need to cut them down! Thanks 😎
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*** NOAH *** Weird. The word shouldn’t bother me. I’ve been called weird before. I know I'm a bit different. But I never thought I was different in a negative way. Just different in my own way. It's never really bothered me what others think of me. But it bothers me now knowing it comes from Jordan. I went out of my way for him. Helping him at the hospital, taking him food, just being there for him. And yet he calls me weird, clingy, and says I’m just his English partner. I gues
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The best compliment you can give a writer 😎. Who doesn't like a good cliff-hanger? Gotta make you want to come back for something, right @randyjuan? @spikey582True, and Jordan's actions aren't really fully supposed to make sense, because he himself is confused. He wants Jenn to stay, and knows she will only because of Noah. But I think the other part is he realizes he is being a jerk, and hates that about himself, and so in his own way is trying to be better. Ultimately, I think Jordan is a good guy, who may not do the right thing at first, but realizes what he is doing wrong pretty quickly. Or at least that is what I'm trying to portray. I may have failed. Hope that makes sense.
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Oh, just wait. Sebastian is just getting started ...
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Yep, the story was originally published elsewhere -- but I am updating and changing it and reposting it here.
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**** JORDAN *** My eyes fling open, my body swings forward. My heart is racing, sweat running down my forehead. What the fuck was that? I look around but he's not here. He was never here. It felt so real. I could feel Noah’s fingers on my face, his hands on my back, his breath on my shoulder. His lips close to mine ... Fuck! It was a dream. Only a dream. Oh man. I flop back down onto my bed landing with a thud. My heart is still racing; I can feel blood r
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Some very good theories! @Howzat Who doesn't like a good cliffhanger? (prepare yourself for a few more of those 😁) @Canuk I was totally confused by what 'vv' meant. So thanks @frigidjason Next chapter should be coming soon!
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*** NOAH *** You don’t need to look at a calendar to know it is the end of September. It's a great time of year. The weather is perfect, roughly in the mid-teens. It's not too chilly and not too warm. The leaves are changing colours; a mosaic of red, orange and brown. Slowly they're detaching from their branches, free-falling to the ground. After months of attachment they must now let go. They drift in the wind, withering away, their beauty fading. Change is in the air. But change is dif
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