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Luca E

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  1. Definitely the top story so far, well constructed, engaging, emotional, and dramatic. This story exactly fitted the theme and is strongly recommended. Two lives separated by seventy years, two different relationships, an interconnection which is set in a believable historic context. Dramatic and well worth reading.
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    Chapter 1

    Totally agree with @Cane23. The interconnection of the two storylines seventy years apart was very well done. The historical perspective well researched. Engaging and dramatic. Well done!
  3. A story for carnivores which mixes the esoteric with culinary invention. It's kind of weird and maybe not to everyone's taste, but I think there's romance in there somewhere!
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  4. Luca E

    Chapter 1

    A story for carnivores, well written and entertaining, but I couldn't stop myself from picturing hundreds of wingless chickens, kind of like frogs legs and all those hundreds of frogs who can't jump. I guess I preferred discovering Kai's saga of hollow souls and an explanation of the afterlife. Where will this lead? A relationship? But there's hardly a hint. Maybe a foodtruck, then restaurant, selling chicken wings. Honestly, I prefer a baraque a frite, pizza truck, or 'Spud-u-like.' Still, a nice story (if I could just get the chicken wings out of my imagination).
  5. A very engaging story. The author carries forward the plot through dialogue, there is little description of places, but it's a choice that works, because it focuses on the two central characters, develops their growing relationship and highlights the obstacles in their path. An excellent story, the best so far of those I've read (more than half), I have no idea who the author is, except they're American and older (as pointed out by someone's comment on the map thing) which I'd never heard of and didn't find on Google. Well done!
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    Chapter 1

    The first real story so far. Lots of nice little short tales, lots with twists, but this was engaging. I sincerely hope it has more chapters to come. Well done!
  7. A (light)house visit to solve a mystery with a metal detector that was almost instantly achieved. You can read it, it will only take a few minutes, it's not very substantial, you might conclude there's almost nothing in it, except the discovery of a tobacco tin which 125 years later still carries a faint odour, a bit like the tale that's been told!
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    Chapter 1

    for me a very short story which didn't say much. A bit of a who done it, Colonel Mustard in the library with the...
  9. A nice children's story that would make any kid want to play at detective or try to teach their pet!
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    Chapter 1

    Seems like dogs and cats are the stars in more than one story!
  11. You can't get inside the head of a personal story written about someone you don't know at all, and the references are lost. Did something happen in Montpellier? Whatever the story it's sad and conveys a sense of never having found what the writer was looking for.
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    Chapter 1

    It's painful, reads like a life that's been missed, difficult to understand exactly what happened.
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    Chapter 1

    Nice story, another one with a difference, and that's good, refreshing. Although I wouldn't take the moral of the tale very seriously! Well it's a comedy isn't it.
  14. It had some punch and two definite story lines. I don't think it's finished, perhaps we will get more chapters. Definitely a good read if you are fed up with the namby pamby stories.
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    Chapter 1

    Interesting, different, there should be more. Nice story.
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    Chapter 1

    My life as a dog! If it's to decide on a dog or the cat some readers opted for, there is no doubt in my mind he's a dog. Cats do not stand by human bodies and howl, they do not think about how they might help a human in need of help, they do not try to fetch help. I'm sorry for all the cat lovers, but cats are basically selfish creatures who look out for themselves whereas dogs will give their life to save their owner or family. Nice story, don't have a clue who wrote it!
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    Chapter 1

    I guess it doesn't make much sense, it should be in fan fiction, but there is no category to file it under. It's a kind of homage to: Jerry Cornelius*, secret agent, superhero, adventurer, all things to all men (and women). A figure of almost complete anarchy. Typically destroys repressive authority. Later he is exposed as a false Harlequin, a tragic Pierrot at heart, or simply an adolescent fantasy. *J C is a character created by the British author Michael Moorcock. A character in some way connected to other characters, if not in part also those characters. JC (Jerry Cornelius - Jesus Christ) the initials are not insignificant. In his provocative novel Behold The Man, Jesus is portrayed not as a divine saviour, but as a physically and mentally disabled child who grows up to be a drooling, hopeless idiot hiding in Nazareth. I didn't want to be quite so controversial, but I was inspired by his books.
  18. This might not be written to perfection, but then neither of the two protagonists, Liam and Rick, are perfect. It's honest, raw, and describes a reality which lives off the pages. It doesn't attempt to feed you all the information about what is going on, but contents itself with describing a relationship built online through gaming and story editing. It is refreshingly different in approach and conveys a certain melancholy about struggling through life alone but connected almost ephemerally over a distance. I liked it a lot.
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  19. It's a good place to leave the story, still I'd like to read book 2... so I guess I'm in luck as a late comer.
  20. I have the same question. Ships passing in the night are brief encounters, Rick and his girlfriend are long standing but seemingly connected by an ever thinner thread, and with a relationship hanging by that thread, it might snap and break at anytime.
  21. A girlfriend. I think I might, no, I definitely would, cool things with that revelation.
  22. Tone was easier to hear than to infer... so true, but we all like a challenge, and if you get it wrong, so what! This chapter was an encounter between two guys on the internet before we got dating apps! Well done.
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    Chapter 2: Latency

    Razorline: no sex scenes SyntaxError21: none Razorline: good Oh... no spice!
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    Chapter 3: 10/10

    And now I put more butter on the bread than I was allowed to as a child when the winters were cold and climbing into bed even colder, and I hated the winters, except when it snowed. Another good chapter that eloquently describes a different time and place.
  25. The descriptions are well written and drew me into the event, it presented the reality of the situation and contrasted the way people deal with tragedy in different ways.
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