stefan7891

What in the world happened to this story? author just stopped posting.

for my chapter summary...standing ovation with loud cheers.klebber's graduation speech is so good that i teared up while reading it. it feels like a real speech from a commencement ceremony. and the story about his twin brother drowning i wanted to hug him so bad. that beach scene was so well written. and that date at the pirate boat felt so special. it feels like the start of something good. i really can't wait how this story further develops. also, there's so many qoutable quotes in this novel like this is such a perfect way to describe grief and loss: "That’s the tape that keeps replaying in my head. No matter how many times you tell yourself it wouldn’t have worked, there’s always a version where you do something braver, faster, and better. And in that version, I get to him. I pull him out. I save my brother. But what really happened, though, was that I stayed where I was. I listened to him when he told me not to come and save him. And he drowned."

i personally feel that this story is very relatable to me because it took.me severall times of breaking up with my now husband to realize that there's nothing wrong with him.like i broke up with him 12 times in 5 years before marrying the doofus ten years later. that's why klebber must have had a bad experience with his past relationships because when love is staring right in front of you and you keep on pushing it away, you must have been fucking traumatized for good if you can't see it right in front of your eyes. so i understand why you want to strangle klebber. and i also understand why klebber needs to processs whatever shit he's gone through. the pandemic feels the perfect time to do so.

ok this guy's hot.

i was worried you posted nothing last week. but i'm really glad you posted this. i'm just hoping we get to klebber's twin. it feels like his backstory is there. i also thnk Dennis is starting to develop genuine feelings for klebber. Dennis teasing klebber, that's a start.

i was wondering why you didn't post last week. so you oosting another one this week?

this is one spicy and funny chapter. and the writing and narration about dennis's feelings about klebber's ex hubby was... so good.that whole intimacy thing is so real, that I remember before meeting my husband, an invite to sleep at a guy's place after a date means my mind would be dreaming of wedding bells and forever after. like gay men are so.thirsty for real affection that a flying kiss blown our way would send us clingingn to any man like a lovesick puppy. i really hope dennis doesn't get hurt. because i don't want to hate klebber. i also wasn't expecting they'd have sex near the end, but oh wow... that was hilarious, like i was laughing while trying not to get turned on. i'm wondering why klebber wants to get rid of his husband's memories, like adam hurt him in the past...? that's still unclear for me. but klebber's pleas to adam that adam should stop tormenting him is really sad. it's like the memory of an ex you're begging to let go of but couldn't because he's hurt you and loved you so good. there's so many good and bad things to ponder in this chapter. fastforward to next week pls. did i say that your dialogue writing is superb?

the writing has definitely changed for the better. it feels like it's slightly more serious and gritty. even the descriptions have matured. "Nebulous skies and colossal thunderheads had gathered on the eastern seas, heralding an onslaught of rain and electric fury, rendering New York to a standstill." feels very ominous to foreshadow the pandemic. while I was reading it, i raised an eyebrow and smiled. I thought, oh my, the story has grown. we're not in Kansan anymore, toto. and I love how you're now centering towards their trauma and issues. like how we were when the pandemic happened where I was staring at walls wondering wth's going to happen to me and to us, me and my hubby. like Dennis's fear of flying as a starter trauma package and Klebber's issues with his last marriage, which is still a big question mark...im wondering if we'll tackle every issues they have.

so they're going to have a pet lizard, a cat and a dog? ohmygod. this story got way way better.

whats with the animals in the post scene of episode 1? i was so confused. i'll make my full review of this later.havea lot to say.

you got me nervous there fora.second. i thought part 1 is over. i still can't wrap up my head how in the world they're going to travel together to costa rica. it'd be a surprise to me next week i suppose.

seriously one of the funniest chapters in the story, with dennis shouting at klebber's date, and the narration of him being so jealous. even their banter was so hilarious. husband laughed at Dennis losing his shit when Klebber was about to kiss Lewis and the description of lewis being full of himself was perfection. like you really have a way with descriptions. some descriptions felt very Margaret Atwood. it was like i was there at the dating show,waytchijg as well. not a fan of her writing style but she has strong symbolism and concise language reminiscent of what I've read so far. so how many more chapters before the end of part 1? i don't want this story to end yet.

wow. this is such a great chapter. i felt called out by the therapist's advise.im a product of delayed adolescence that in the 4 years my hubby and I were dating, i tried breaking up with him 5x, because i had such a volatile experience with men. I've never experienced a normal gay guy who didn't have much issues until hubby came, that I always assumed something would come up (cheating or him losing interest). But nothing. 2 more years later, we tied the knot. im assuming most gay men are like this. ive dated men in their 40s who are literal teenagers, who ghosted me because I was wearing the wrong shoe? Another very funny chapter...also, i sense Dennis has anger issues? don't think i've shouted at anyone with how you described Dennis shouting at Klebber. I'm happy Klebber is no pushover and put Dennis in his place. I'm somewhat of a dennis to my husband with arguments, but he puts me in my place and shuts me up. So when are you posting the next chapter? tomorrow? lol.

so true. my husband thinks there's something that hadn't been said that adam was a horrible person since not a single good thing was ever written about him. personally, im also wondering why klebber seems obsessed with adam. like if someone hurt you, if ever adam was horrible, shouldn't you be apathetic over him? but then klebber seemes too attached with adam to the point that he was imagining his voice in his head. my theory is, adam was misunderstood where even maddy doesn't like him, and that klebber's the only one who knows who he really is, like he's a good husband or something. it's still too early to finalise anything but yeah, those are my theories so far.

it seemed adam was controlling: "where they engaged in heated arguments about where to dine out, ultimately opting to stay in and enjoy his cooking and each other's company at home. Where Adam would tell him not to go out, where every move he made was watched, where everything he did was carefully curated…" i havent read any good descriptions of adam somehow.he sounds like a terrible person. hubby and i are trying to read your story with a different eye because theres something dark and foreboding apart from the laughs you'd get from reading what you wrote. yes, the story is very funny but there's something sad about it. hubby's current theories so far is adam cheated on klebber, and he tried to control klebber's every move. also,was laughing so hard at this: "Dennis drew him close, putting his arms around him and gently massaging his back as the little shitter shat away his bodily exodus, relieving his worries and bidding farewell to the remnants of his breakfast as he expelled it from his bowels." how the hell dou come up with these things?