Timby

Wonderful Story!! Now, I think you should try to start at the beginning but have it from Bzup's point of view... What were HIS thoughts, Worry's, etc... When he decided to attach himself to the ship of the Aliens(Humans). Maybe we could finally find out why he Chose Jem, in the Capture room, etc.. You could lay out what Bzup is thinking and maybe his frustration in not being able to communicate, like he does with Bzup-kind, etc... Just a thought