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Code of Silence - 4. Chapter 4

“Kyle, talk to me, what’s the news?” I heard Nick say from the other room. He was speaking to his partner. “Coleman?” He said all of a sudden, startling me out of my thoughts. I started listening more intently. “You’re kidding. It’s been two weeks and these idiots are back at it again?” I shook my head, completely agreeing with Nick’s assertion of James as an idiot. I mean, who else would think another job would be a good idea in such a short span of time, and with all the heat they were receiving. I knew it wasn’t the other guys, they could care less. There was only one person who took a sick kind of pleasure in putting his life at constant risk–James Coleman.

When Nick entered the room I continued working on my laptop and pretending I didn’t just overhear his short conversation. He snuck up behind me and kissed my neck. “Mmm, you smell so good,” he said in my ear. I smiled.

“Sorry, I’m busy babe,” I said apologetically as he groaned with frustration.

“You better get a day off soon, or I’ll pay your boss a little work visit. Scare him with my badge,” he said and I laughed.

“Oh yeah, under what pretenses?” He thought for a second.

“Fair Labor Standards Act. It prohibits keeping employees busy at unreasonable hours.”

“That sounds made up,” I retorted and he laughed.

“Don’t worry, I’ll make it stick.” He kissed my head again and then started heading for the door.

“Hey babe,” I called after him.

“Yeah?”

“How’s that case going by the way?” He paused in his tracks.

“You have nothing to worry about, I’ll have Coleman in prison in a matter of a week.” I swallowed hard thinking of James back behind bars. The guy was an asshole, but I couldn’t just sit and do nothing.

“A new lead?” I asked pretending my best to not sound that interested.

“Better, an inside man,” he said and winked at me, then left the room as my face froze in horror. Who was the inside man? My mind spun with this new information. And another problem posed itself in my head, to tell or not to tell him? If I told, he would probably continue being an ungrateful asshole even though I would be putting my freedom on the line. And chances were, he was still going to go ahead with whatever stupid plan he had going. If I didn’t…if I didn’t then I might never see him again. And all his friends could end up in prison right beside him. Who would look after Lainey and Jess if James went to prison? I couldn’t be responsible for my goddaughter being placed in a foster home. I wrecked my brain for some solutions, but none came. I would have to wait for an opportunity.

I walked into the bathroom while Nick was showering, “Hey, I’m gonna head home. I’ve still got a lot of work to do and I don’t want to keep you up.” He peeked from behind the shower door.

“Are you sure? I don’t mind,” he said.

“Yeah, I concentrate better alone. But I’ll see you tomorrow,” I said and made my way out. My mind spun with a million thoughts as I entered my apartment and threw my keys on the table. I felt guilty for what I’d been doing to Nick. Not only did I physically cheat on him, but I also sabotaged his work, put him in danger by revealing information to his enemy. What kind of a person did that? And for what? Just so I could keep someone out of prison, when clearly, they couldn’t wait to get back there. If there was such a thing as unconditional love then this must have been it, because I sure was not getting anything out of the equation.

I sighed and started making myself some chamomile tea. I needed to relax and focus my energy on figuring out how to deal with this crap. I brought the hot cup to my bedroom and went to take a quick bath. When I got back the light in my room was off, when I was sure I left it on. But I thought nothing of it as I took off my robe and put on some sleeping shorts and a cotton tank top. All of a sudden, I felt a hand cover my mouth. Panic swept through my body and my heart jumped into my throat as I tried to pry it off.

“Calm down, it’s me,” he said into my ear in his hoarse voice. My body slowly relaxed as I realized it wasn’t some crazy pervert off the street. He removed his hand.

“What the fuck?” I asked, annoyed.

“Hi to you too, sweetheart,” he replied. I could smell the booze on his breath.

“You’re drunk,” I stated. “Shit! The tracking device,” I blurted out.

“Calm down, I took a different car,” he said irritated. I nodded my head.

“I need to tell you something,” I said.

“What?”

“Somebody’s been talking to the FBI.” He looked at me for a while.

“Who?” He asked.

“I don’t know, but they’re onto your next plan, whatever that is,” I said. James appeared to be in deep thought for a while.

“Thanks for telling me,” he said, taking me completely off guard. I didn’t expect niceness.

“Yeah, of course,” I mumbled back. He came closer to me, making my heart beat like crazy once again. I was surprised he couldn’t hear it thudding through my chest. His lips were inches away, his face, his arms, everything about him excited me. He was the complete opposite of Nick, who was clean shaven, put together, and got a haircut every two weeks. James was a hot mess of masculinity, and I couldn’t help but want him. He was the epitome of a bad boy, impossible to resist. But he was also a part of me, in a native way that Nick would never be able to understand. We came from the same town and grew up in the same nightmares. We knew each other.

He put his hands on my hips, and pressed his forehead to mine.

“You reek like a bar,” I whispered, trying to get my mind off the intoxicating situation.

“No talking,” he said and forced his lips on mine. I parted my lips, allowing his tongue to explore my wanting mouth. We stumbled toward the bed, his hands roughly touching every inch of my skin. I felt myself already dripping precum as he groped my behind and kissed me with so much need. In that moment, I could have given him anything he wanted. In that moment nothing else existed. He groaned into my mouth as I pressed my hand against the bulge in his pants. We fell onto the bed, ripped off pieces of each other’s clothing, like mad people. I felt him push into me with desperation and an insatiable need. I moaned and he made a primal sound as our bodies connected for the second time that week. He slid in and out of me with ease, as my body was completely ready for him, somehow falling right back into our old pattern, as if no time has passed. We pushed and grinded and groped until we both reached climax, at which point his body slumped on top of mine like the weight of the world. I held him inside of me and put my arms around his broad back. And for the first time in years I felt like I was home. But all of a sudden he seemed to realize where he was and what he had been doing, and he quickly got up and started putting on his clothes. I rolled my eyes.

“James,” I said, trying to convey how ridiculous he was being with my tone. He looked at me as he zipped up his pants. “Stay,” I asked him. He didn’t answer me but continued putting on his clothes. “Come on, this is ridiculous. You’re being irrational,” I said.

“I need you to find out who’s talking to the feds,” he said.

“What?”

“You heard me.”

“How exactly am I supposed to do that?” I asked, confused.

“Find a way, I need to know for sure.”

“So you’re asking me to do this for you, but you won’t stay?”

“I can’t stay!” He yelled at me all of a sudden. “Okay? I can’t fucking stay. I can’t stay. I loved you!” He yelled, out of control.

“I loved you too,” I replied, tears forming in my eyes.

“No, you never loved me, you’re cold hearted,” he spat out.

“You know that’s not true. You were my first boyfriend, my everything. I loved you so much it hurt.” All of a sudden he seemed to sober up.

“I need to go. Find out who it is and we’ll be even,” he said and walked out.

“Coleman!” I yelled after him, but silence was my only answer.

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Well, Ollie has gone from being a masochist to being...an accessory to...

I'm starting to really hate Ollie as a character, especially after this revelation:

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My mind spun with a million thoughts as I entered my apartment and threw my keys on the table. I felt guilty for what I’d been doing to Nick. Not only did I physically cheat on him, but I also sabotaged his work, put him in danger by revealing information to his enemy. What kind of a person did that? And for what? Just so I could keep someone out of prison, when clearly, they couldn’t wait to get back there. If there was such a thing as unconditional love then this must have been it, because I sure was not getting anything out of the equation.

If he felt guilty and he is so desperate to keep James out of jail that he'd rat out a potential police informant to gangster, it will likely lead to the murder of the informant for snitching. This willful act says a lot about how dangerously toxic James is for Oliver. Oliver has lost a lot of my sympathy as the story has gone on.

Oliver is getting unlikable as a 1st person narrator, it's one thing to be psychologically addicted to being mistreated or desperately in love to help a lover, but it takes a whole other level of personal issues to justify allowing your criminal ex-boyfriend information that will likely lead to the death of a law enforcement informant.

Oliver becoming hated by readers is not a problem, if you are designing him to be hated by the readers, but if you are trying to create a sympathetic character for a romance story, I'd recommend you try fixing some of his character flaw in the next few chapters, because he is smart enough to realize what he is doing will likely cause someone's death. If he's amoral for James though, then I hope you can commit to the chosen path, I'll be happy to read that and see how he become a cold blooded murderer. It's like Frank Underwood in House of Cards or Ramsey Bolton in Game of Thrones, amoral character journeys are interesting.

James' character is slightly improved, I can see him slightly more likable than Oliver now, but I feel like I am rooting for Tony Montana or Carlito or Michael Corleone, he's a bad guy thoroughly. He does admit to loving Oliver and it counts for a lot. However, he is still a criminal.

I also realize you haven't mentioned in detail what James is planning or doing that is illegal. If it will get him/his crew thrown in prison again with FBI and State surveillance, outside of drugs or some elaborate "Oceans 11" type heist, very few things including prostitution, fraud, or racketeering gets this level of attention. I understand the idea of keeping things nebulous/ambiguous to keep readers guessing, but at some point, you will need to commit to a type of crime, so there's plot to flow. Drug-themed crime stories are usually straight forward, but may require a lot more background than you may have. On the other hand, capers/heist stories involve a lot of intricate plots and red-herrings, but you know its some kind of heist through inference.

 

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10 minutes ago, W_L said:

Well, Ollie has gone from being a masochist to being...an accessory to...

I'm starting to really hate Ollie as a character, especially after this revelation:

If he felt guilty and he is so desperate to keep James out of jail that he'd rat out a potential police informant to gangster, it will likely lead to the murder of the informant for snitching. This willful act says a lot about how dangerously toxic James is for Oliver. Oliver has lost a lot of my sympathy as the story has gone on.

Oliver is getting unlikable as a 1st person narrator, it's one thing to be psychologically addicted to being mistreated or desperately in love to help a lover, but it takes a whole other level of personal issues to justify allowing your criminal ex-boyfriend information that will likely lead to the death of a law enforcement informant.

Oliver becoming hated by readers is not a problem, if you are designing him to be hated by the readers, but if you are trying to create a sympathetic character for a romance story, I'd recommend you try fixing some of his character flaw in the next few chapters, because he is smart enough to realize what he is doing will likely cause someone's death. If he's amoral for James though, then I hope you can commit to the chosen path, I'll be happy to read that and see how he become a cold blooded murderer. It's like Frank Underwood in House of Cards or Ramsey Bolton in Game of Thrones, amoral character journeys are interesting.

James' character is slightly improved, I can see him slightly more likable than Oliver now, but I feel like I am rooting for Tony Montana or Carlito or Michael Corleone, he's a bad guy thoroughly. He does admit to loving Oliver and it counts for a lot. However, he is still a criminal.

I also realize you haven't mentioned in detail what Nick is planning or doing that is illegal. If it will get him/his crew thrown in prison again with FBI and State surveillance, outside of drugs or some elaborate "Oceans 11" type heist, very few things including prostitution, fraud, or racketeering gets this level of attention. I understand the idea of keeping things nebulous/ambiguous to keep readers guessing, but at some point, you will need to commit to a type of crime, so there's plot to flow. Drug-themed crime stories are usually straight forward, but may require a lot more background than you may have. On the other hand, capers/heist stories involve a lot of intricate plots and red-herrings, but you know its some kind of heist through inference.

 

Thank you, I appreciate your thoughtful feedback as always! 

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39 minutes ago, C. Henderson said:

Thank you, I appreciate your thoughtful feedback as always! 

No problem, like I said, you are writing in my backyard and I've read a few crime novels. It's fun to speculate what direction a story goes in and also look at the characters as they get revealed.

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While I agree with the comment above, for me, the line for Oliver has been crossed beyond redemption. 

There is nothing from this point forward, if what we've seen portrayed is accurate, and that there isn't any subterfuge we are unaware of, prison bars may very well be in Oliver's future. More to the point, his stay as a guest of the Fed's will be short as no one likes a rat... 

“Yeah, I concentrate better alone. But I’ll see you tomorrow,” I said and made my way out. My mind spun with a million thoughts as I entered my apartment and threw my keys on the table. I felt guilty for what I’d been doing to Nick. Not only did I physically cheat on him, but I also sabotaged his work, put him in danger by revealing information to his enemy. What kind of a person did that? And for what? Just so I could keep someone out of prison, when clearly, they couldn’t wait to get back there. If there was such a thing as unconditional love then this must have been it, because I sure was not getting anything out of the equation.

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3 hours ago, drsawzall said:

While I agree with the comment above, for me, the line for Oliver has been crossed beyond redemption. 

There is nothing from this point forward, if what we've seen portrayed is accurate, and that there isn't any subterfuge we are unaware of, prison bars may very well be in Oliver's future. More to the point, his stay as a guest of the Fed's will be short as no one likes a rat... 

“Yeah, I concentrate better alone. But I’ll see you tomorrow,” I said and made my way out. My mind spun with a million thoughts as I entered my apartment and threw my keys on the table. I felt guilty for what I’d been doing to Nick. Not only did I physically cheat on him, but I also sabotaged his work, put him in danger by revealing information to his enemy. What kind of a person did that? And for what? Just so I could keep someone out of prison, when clearly, they couldn’t wait to get back there. If there was such a thing as unconditional love then this must have been it, because I sure was not getting anything out of the equation.

I agree with you, though I can imagine a few plot lines where Oliver is less clear cut malign that @C. Henderson can still do :

1. Oliver mentioned a scheme by his mother and his past drug use; perhaps, he's using again, since discovering what Nick is investigating, and he's not in the right mental state. Between his mother pressuring him, his obligations to Nick as a boyfriend, and James' danger of imprisonment again. Like I said, drugs are an easy out for crime stories, because they can be used to explain so many character contradictions. It's almost like the paste you put on walls to cover holes. Drug-impaired judgements are a legal defense, so no prison sentence.

2. Oliver has a secret story about why James went to prison in the first place, not just what James knows about him. What if Oliver is the one, who ratted out James' gang, in a failed attempt to save James initially, but it was due to that action, James went to jail in the first place. I can imagine guilt and self-loathing being part of a depression cycle for Oliver that caused him to spiral down into doing whatever it takes to save James. Psychologically, this would represent the most complex option for @C. Henderson to pursue, not sure if he's up to the task of writing a character guilt-ridden with such a secret to the point of harming others to make up for a past mistake. Oliver would still be a villain, but he's a sympathetic villain in this case. In this scenario, Oliver should still end up in jail for what he does.

3. What if Nick and Oliver's mother are just as bad if not worst than James? What if Nick is crooked FBI agent, who uses cases like James to cover-up his own criminal activities? This scenario is a wild pitch, but it's not out of the question. If the universe in which Oliver exist is immoral, then most moral people being two flawed criminal lovers, who act out of mutual love instead of greed seems a lot more palatable. Basically, if @C. Hendersonpulls this plot line, the commitment has to be set soon to reveal Nick's alternate traits. Doing any later plot-twist would be very difficult, basically representing a radical shift in story-line. The lesser of evils is the good.

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Very interesting scenarios @W_L

I think number 1 is an overused trope, the the use of joint compound to gloss over the holes, could lead to some interesting sidebars.

Scenario 2 presents the most complex issue, that Oliver possibly ratted out James to save his life from an internecine gang war.

Scenario 3 reminds me of the disgraced FBI agent Michael Connally, who for the better part of 20 years or more actually enabled Whitey Bulger. An interesting sidebar to this is that during the peak of Whitey's reign of terror, his brother William was the president of the Massachusetts State Senate, and in fact the de facto leader of state government. There were many stories alluding to Senate President Bulger reminding political and other opponents of just who his brother was. ( Mike Connally grew up as a next door neighbor with the Bulger brothers)

One other interesting case in point, for years Whitey was given credit for 'supposedly' keeping drugs out of South Boston, when in fact he supplied them. Who can forget the liquor store owner who was pressured to give up his multi-million lottery win to Whitey, so he could then claim income from a 'legit' source.

Last but not least, let's not forget Whitey built his empire by ratting out to the FBI, of all things, his criminal enemies! Some of those enemies were terminated with prejudice and overlooked by the FBI. At one point, the Mass State Police had Whitey caught dead to rights at Logan Airport with a suitcase full of cash, only to be kicked to the curb ny the FBI. There are many instances where the MSP had Whitey, only to be told to go away by the FBI.

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1 hour ago, W_L said:

I agree with you, though I can imagine a few plot lines where Oliver is less clear cut malign that @C. Henderson can still do :

1. Oliver mentioned a scheme by his mother and his past drug use; perhaps, he's using again, since discovering what Nick is investigating, and he's not in the right mental state. Between his mother pressuring him, his obligations to Nick as a boyfriend, and James' danger of imprisonment again. Like I said, drugs are an easy out for crime stories, because they can be used to explain so many character contradictions. It's almost like the paste you put on walls to cover holes. Drug-impaired judgements are a legal defense, so no prison sentence.

2. Oliver has a secret story about why James went to prison in the first place, not just what James knows about him. What if Oliver is the one, who ratted out James' gang, in a failed attempt to save James initially, but it was due to that action, James went to jail in the first place. I can imagine guilt and self-loathing being part of a depression cycle for Oliver that caused him to spiral down into doing whatever it takes to save James. Psychologically, this would represent the most complex option for @C. Henderson to pursue, not sure if he's up to the task of writing a character guilt-ridden with such a secret to the point of harming others to make up for a past mistake. Oliver would still be a villain, but he's a sympathetic villain in this case. In this scenario, Oliver should still end up in jail for what he does.

3. What if Nick and Oliver's mother are just as bad if not worst than James? What if Nick is crooked FBI agent, who uses cases like James to cover-up his own criminal activities? This scenario is a wild pitch, but it's not out of the question. If the universe in which Oliver exist is immoral, then most moral people being two flawed criminal lovers, who act out of mutual love instead of greed seems a lot more palatable. Basically, if @C. Hendersonpulls this plot line, the commitment has to be set soon to reveal Nick's alternate traits. Doing any later plot-twist would be very difficult, basically representing a radical shift in story-line. The lesser of evils is the good.

You guys are giving me a lot to think about, thank you! The feedback has been very helpful. 

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1 hour ago, drsawzall said:

Very interesting scenarios @W_L

I think number 1 is an overused trope, the the use of joint compound to gloss over the holes, could lead to some interesting sidebars.

Scenario 2 presents the most complex issue, that Oliver possibly ratted out James to save his life from an internecine gang war.

Scenario 3 reminds me of the disgraced FBI agent Michael Connally, who for the better part of 20 years or more actually enabled Whitey Bulger. An interesting sidebar to this is that during the peak of Whitey's reign of terror, his brother William was the president of the Massachusetts State Senate, and in fact the de facto leader of state government. There were many stories alluding to Senate President Bulger reminding political and other opponents of just who his brother was. ( Mike Connally grew up as a next door neighbor with the Bulger brothers)

One other interesting case in point, for years Whitey was given credit for 'supposedly' keeping drugs out of South Boston, when in fact he supplied them. Who can forget the liquor store owner who was pressured to give up his multi-million lottery win to Whitey, so he could then claim income from a 'legit' source.

Last but not least, let's not forget Whitey built his empire by ratting out to the FBI, of all things, his criminal enemies! Some of those enemies were terminated with prejudice and overlooked by the FBI. At one point, the Mass State Police had Whitey caught dead to rights at Logan Airport with a suitcase full of cash, only to be kicked to the curb ny the FBI. There are many instances where the MSP had Whitey, only to be told to go away by the FBI.

I agree, scenario 1 is overused and it's way too simple as a plot device.

Scenario 2 is far more complex and probably would take a lot of storytelling work to accomplish

Scenario 3, you guessed it (you know Boston is my 2nd hometown, I'm split between Mass and NH). Whitey's connection to the FBI was a huge reason why the Winter Hill gang became so powerful. One other aspect that won them political support among Boston residents, especially Irish population, they were a major arms trafficker in the US to Irish Republican Army during The Troubles. There was a story that circulated almost 8 years ago about Whitey using coffins to smuggle weapons, it's not an original idea as infamous American Gangster Frank Lucas did it earlier than Whitey during the Vietnam war with his Cocaine shipments, but no one suspected guns were smuggled to Ireland in Irish-American Coffins from the US. Like I said, I know my town and I have read more than a few crime stories. The FBI knew what he was doing too, take that as you will to certain ethnic and cultural allegiances.

Whitey did a lot of stuff throughout the years with Connolly in tow, any of which could be great side stories for a crooked FBI agent.

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@C. HendersonI still think you have a lot of story to write. However, Oliver does need a better motivation than simply love alone. He's too smart to be led by his emotions, too self-reflective having realized his complicity as you wrote him to be. Readers need a balance; I only noted 3 scenarios, there are countless others.

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