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Either that or make this the dream. I don't presume to tell you how to write your story, though. I'm just honored that you're sharing it with us. BTW, the ranch Jenny mentioned going to wouldn't happen to be Lone Wolf Ranch, would it? Do you think you might the pick up the thread of Twin Trials again sometime in the future? I've enjoyed every story of yours that I've found, and am always eager to read more!

Really hope you're making good on your April Fools comment from a couple years back. 😁

What did that poor, defenseless steak ever do to you? 😢

It's only been a few weeks in-story since Jake's change. A lot of stuff has happened to them in that time, and they've been busy figuring out how to run the barony. They haven't much spare time to do research, and with Greg keeping Jake's silver eyes a council secret any inquiries have to be very discreet. Since Brian's eye color wasn't mentioned, they're likely red.

Ugh. That's what I get for commenting from my phone. Typos, typos, typos!

I admit, despite Prince George's assurance about Greg's success rate changing humans, I breathed a sigh of relief when Billy announced Brian had woken up. The heartbreak would have been astounding, for the readers as well as the characters. I wonder how many other Barons are cleared for the info and tech Grace brought for Greg. It's pretty obvious Baron Evans wasn't. I'm betting the number can be counted on one hand, with a significant number of fingers left over. As always, it's a true pleasure to read your work. Thank you for the effort and care that you are putting into this tale. It brightens my day every time I get a notification about a new chapter.

I'm sorry you're struggling with this. It's not an easy task rewriting a story you've already told, especially one as long as the original. You've put in an incredible amount of effort to this point, and in my opinion have improved greatly upon the original. The character development, detail, and world building have been top notch. I'm grateful to have had the chance to enjoy your work, and hope the fates see fit to return their inspiration to you.

I'm still sitting here wondering about the promise Scott made to Greg's dad back in the first book!

Brian's entire role in this chapter was beautiful. The embarrassment of his accident, the sound reasoning for being changed, the forgiving of his father while at the same time making the decision to cut his parents out of his life, and his fear of death before his change all showcase Brian's complex personality. And he's the only one of Greg's friends to choose the tune of his change instead of having conditions force the change upon him. Lovely to read!

If we trust Prince George, Greg will never fail to successfully change a human.

I snorted when I read Alex's reason. 🤣

Some of the Romanian dialogue was easier to understand the gist of than others. Tati's response to Scott, "And I am honored to meet you, My Lord," was enough to understand that Scott had said he was honored to meet her. Sarah's response to her mother, "I wasn't proclaiming anything, Maică," infers that Tati had said something about Sarah's statement that she and Billy were fated mates, but there wasn't enough to understand if Tati was agreeing, disagreeing, questioning, teasing, etc. Tati's response to Greg, "Thank you, My Lord, Sarah thought you'd like a snack after your drive," doesn't really give any clue at all to what Greg said, but it also didn't really disrupt the flow of the story either in my opinion. In chapters 3 and 4 during the conversations with Count Nardone, Marco, and the Count's council, the context for the Italian without translations were clear, and the times you used parenthetical translations weren't disruptive and it was very helpful with Billy's lengthy question asking how Greg's council should address Count Nardone. It made it easy to jump over the foreign text to see what Billy was saying, while understanding that Billy wasn't speaking English. I also thought it was a nice touch having Scott telepathically translate "Dio m'ammazzi" for Greg, though it could be easy to overuse that technique. In any case, the foreign text didn't detract from the story for me, but I still went back and hit up Google translate after finishing the chapters just to make sure I wasn't missing anything or misunderstanding the context.