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I see their dilemma, or maybe it's mostly Asher's - he's afraid to get emotionally invested only to have his heart broken if/when Michael decides he'd rather be with a woman - and it's understandable. It also makes me want to know what the statistics say; is it less likely for a relationship where one is bi and the other is gay/lesbian/straight to last longterm? Are bi-people more fickle do you think? Or is it worse to be left for a person of the opposite sex? Because I never got around to comment on the last chapter, I can say I'm glad Michael's back. It's probably the tension and and all those possibilities for misunderstandings between them that contributes to that ... and the possibilities for sex of course ;-p They are just so much more entertaining together than on their own. And you're letting Michael play the romance card a lot in this chapter, is he honest or is he saying what he's been brought up believing his partners want to hear? I do hope he is honest, but I don't expect matters to settle too smoothly. And then there's the upcoming legal matters with the shooting and trial, sounds like Asher has his hands full.

Thought I'd just leave a comment before the next chapter will be up. I actually read this last week, Tuesday, but I've been too tired to comment anything during the week. I must say I missed Michael in this chapter - I think he's my favorite character so far-, and I'm amused at the bad timing Asher is having with his sex life, be it on his own or with a partner. If this keeps up I'm expecting him to be caught in the act not too soon into the future. As for the computer problems, I've always told my students to save their works in at least three different places/media that way something really remarkable has to happen in order for them to lose it all at once, but who listens to teachers?! And as for the porn - maybe you just need different computers for different uses?!

Oh no, I've caught up! What am I going to do now? Do you have any idea how much time I have to kill in this darn hospital room of mine? You have to write faster! And I guess I'm not the only one that was caught up in this chapter, Michael was too - with his past. Poor kid! first an absent father, then a dead father and the responsibility for his mother and his twin siblings at that. It sounds tough enough to push an adult over the edge, not to mention a twelve year old. It definitely explains a lot of the anger he is feeling - I can only imagine what a mixed set of emotions he must have for his father, and then the less than perfect situation at his workplace ... yep, he's got a whole lot of baggage to work with. But I've got to say I've liked Michael most of the time despite his flaws and without the knowledge of his past. In fact I think I like him more than Asher, just because Asher is more likable, but also because I feel at times Asher should act more grown-up because he ought to be more in-touch with his feelings, and not the least with whom he is, while Michel is far behind in that compartment. I think that difference may cause trouble in the future - they are just not on the same page ... yet. Well, I guess I have to wait ... ... I'm still waiting. Have you written anything yet?

How old were these guys now again? They are walking into this (with Michael taking care of Asher and the two of them entering some kind of relationship) like kids, both equally unaware of what it will come to mean to them or what complications might appear. Taking care of someone ill is not an easy job, and even more difficult when you don't know each other. for two apparently grown men I get the feeling they are stupidly naive at this moment - och I get it, they have to be in order for the story to work - and I do like it. It reminds me of some of the classical fandom tropes (and yes, I know that is probably seen upon as an abomination, to compare original fiction with fanfiction!!!) hurt/comfort to begin with (it's also an old classic within straight romance, where the heroine gets to take care of the hero). Will Michael really be sleeping on the sofa? Both Asher and Micahel have changed over the last couple of chapters, and I'm not sure it's for their better. Yeah, Michael has accepted there's something between them, but maybe he should confront himself and what he is doing and why before he moves on. As should Asher - who really should know better! He's acting like a schoolgirl with a crush, all caution, all wisdom gone! I'm so looking forward to all the upcoming conflict these two will run into. I'm really enjoying myself, so keep up the good work.

Hahaha! The last piece of this chapter made me laugh. I can't believe he actually asked his father for help. But then again he has no siblings, or I think that would have been the more logical choice in an awkward situation like this one. Next time he'll remember to not leave his apartment quite so quickly - since one never knows what might happen, and don't forget clean underwear!

This story develops nicely. The conflict in this chapter has a classical feel to it; it's no longer just Asher and Michael but a third part involved. I thought Asher might take Tyler home but was still a little surprised when Tyler called out from the bedroom. Strictly speaking Michael of course has no holds on Asher, they are barely friends as it is, but no doubt it still hurts for Michael. Maybe it can do him some good? Or maybe not? Seeing how I am more than a month behind when reading this - does the health issues still apply? I hope it's settled for the better.

I guess this chapter really answered the question I asked before. So Michael really didn't know? Didn't even suspect, have as much as an inkling ...? Well, I guess it is possible. People tend to see what they want to see. But except for a few rescue missions it has been Michael coming to Asher looking for company, and maybe he just need a friend, but that's no reason to go all crazy like that over the guy in the park; what's wrong with seeing it as a compliment? It will be interesting to see what will happen from here on.

Oh, I like it better and better. I like the two new friends of Asher's,more characters gives new opportunities as for what is coming - it won't just be a tiny chamber play, so yeah, I'm looking forward to the rest of this story too. Do you still mean Michael hasn't realized Asher is gay? Surely he must have by now, or have a suspicion or two after meeting Ian and Milo. i guess I have to read the next chapter in order to find out for sure. (I haven't lost a sibling to cancer - I got my leukemia diagnosis little less than three weeks ago - I can honestly say it's a pretty stressful way to start one's summer vacation. And in fact I can take back anything I ever said about the chapters being too short. At my present situation, this is exactly so much I can manage reading in one sitting.) I'll take a short break and will be back for more.

So it took a little longer than I expected to start reading again. I wanted there to be a few more chapters so I got to read a little more at once, but ... life got in between. When I started reading I figured this would be an all one POV story - Asher's. But that's not quite the case is it? On occasion it drifts toward omniscient, as when Michael came in to the bar in this chapter looking for Asher - is it deliberate? I don't mind changing POV:s as long as it is done well, I don't even mind omniscient ... I juts came to think about it when reading this chapter. So Michael must be up to something, or why else would he come visit Asher like this? It will be interesting to get to know him a lot better. I'm sure he's nothing what he looks like at the moment. Or maybe he just doesn't have any friends? The part about Asher's sister struck more than a little too close to home for me (though I'm not dead yet), and one of the reasons it's taken me some time to pick up the reading again, and I seriously hope there will be no flashbacks to her illness or death or I don't know whether I'll cope. I have quite a few more chapters to catch up with, and I will. Maybe not right away, but I will.

I actually read the first chapter a few weeks back, and for some reason or other never commented. Now I've read the latest three and feel like I should say something ... Actually it was kind of good reading three chapters at once, since your chapters are usually quite short, and I find it easier to both get to know the characters and the plot/action if I can read a longer piece of a story at once. Not that short chapters are a bad thing, especially not if it's an already complete novel/novella, but when you have to wait a whole week for the next one ... Anyway, now I have got to know Asher and Michael a little better. Asher is a really good guy. Like someone already said in an earlier comment, he's a much, much better person than (they) I'd ever be; I would have just past Michael on the street the first time, and the second, I probably would have tried looking in an other direction completely. So yeah, Asher is so far the good guy, but don't you think he tends to fall in infatuation a little bit to easily? Has he no other guys he can be infatuated with? And how old is he? Older than the guy at the reception desk at the sport center. Was it in the first chapter? Michael on the other hand must have at least three different persona (or sides of himself); his working/career choice self, his drunken self, and the self-assured entertaining self, and yet he seems so clueless or naive maybe. He's going to be an interesting acquaintance to make, or so I hope. He clearly has a drinking problem, but the interesting matter is of course why is Michael drinking? And how has he managed before Asher got into the habit of picking his drunken ass up from the street? As for this last chapter; I hope it's not a date. Not because I don't like a bit of - ahem -romance, but because it would make the hunt too short and far too easy. And what was it with Jonesie? Unless he doesn't have information (which he then should have received from Michael himself) about Michael that we don't, I think he was out of line, especially with his last words. Well, I guess that's it. First four chapters make a nice start. I'll see how I'll do, if I read it one chapter at the time, or wait a couple of weeks ... but then I'll probably will have to go back and re-read... hmm, what a dilemma.

This was fun, and I love how the poem is constructed with the simple exposition/introduction, the growing anticipation/excitement, the (unexpected) turning point and the happy end. Like a miniature story in itself. I also loved the different exclamations and how they help to create the growing tension. And then its such a simple and delightful theme and scene. It reminded me of how long it's been since I last took a bath, almost ten years ago. When the tub was full to 2/3 I ran out of hot water, so when I finally got in, the water was no more than tepid. A couple of weeks later my son was born and the tub's been full with toys ever since. Despite the interruption, your bath sounded more successful.

I had no idea (making my comment to ch 17 about your updating on the story seem a bit thoughtless), but assure you that I (and probably all your other readers as well) have all the patience necessary to wait until you have the mental and physical strength you need to keep writing, even when it means no writing at all. It's a lovely story with lovely characters. Wishing you all the strength you need, and take care of yourself.

Phew, that went smoother than I anticipated when chapter 17 ended. Amazing Joey and Andy weren't more hurt, and luckily Roger could help. it could have ended so much worse. But I never really thought you would seriously hurt (well, maybe) or kill Joey (definitely not). These boys are so cute and good to each other, and Roger must be the best friend ever to anyone. But they are only fifteen so no wonder it's not so easy to establish a smooth running and well-functioning relationship, even without Joey's history it would probably be difficult (love is something you learn by experience, and at fifteen ... well, they have a lot to learn). And of course postponing the actual sex is a way to keep the tension up. Good move, imo. The JT part of the story is becoming more and more interesting. Lights out of order, blood on the floor and hit in the head, and we know from before through Andy's father and his insinuations that something has been up with JT's dad. But where is JT's mother? Is she dead too? And what will happen to JT? Is his life in danger too? Don't answer my questions, they are only rhetorical. I'll wait patiently for for the next chapter.

(This is more of a story review of the chapters so far.) I read the 17 chapters over the last two days and wanted to say you had me hooked by the end of the first (short) paragraph. Luckily you didn't make the presentation "my name is ..." to begin with or I would never have continued reading (I usually just ditch stories beginning like that, occasionally my loss I'm sure, but so be it), as it is I just had to keep reading, 'cause I needed to find out what the beginning was about. I also liked that I had to continue with chapter two before I found out what that was. By then I already liked the main character and his tone of voice so I just kept going. Of course it helped that the boys are lovely and most of the sub characters are as well. So far this is a compelling story, sweet, but not too sweet, romantic and with some good foreshadowing, as if it wasn't clear from the first time this camping trip was mentioned something (bad) should happen. The characters are sweet too and their actions understandable, even if Joey's parent's are awful and unsuitable parents one still knows why (however wrongly) they acted like they did, and JT's father is probably a product of his own childhood (he was probably treated the same by his father and grew up doing what he knew even if he hated it when he was a kid). It's a miracle Joey is such a sweet and forgiving child despite everything that has happened to him. The mix of first person POV and third person POV, usually makes me confused when reading and I don't like it much, but you do make it work for me. I like Andy's voice, and I like to hear the story from his perspective, but also think the third person POV pieces contributes to the story ( I am glad however you only have one first person POV in the story or I would have a hard time telling the voices apart). And now ... I've reached the latest chapter and I'm dying to find out what's happened to poor Joey. Why isn't he answering? (Looking at the action history - do I have reason to be concerned? Are you going to finish it? I sure hope you will. So far it's a great read.) Keep up the good work. I'd love to read the next chapters too.

Great, another way for society (or should I say patriarchy?) to control women's bodies, right along practices such as centuries use of corsets, Chinese foot binding till today's breast enhancements, labiaplasty and now - thank heavens - I can complete my less than perfect body with a tightening cream for my vagina. Am I lucky or not? I guess straight/bi men are in for big surprises when they realize that no creams will bring back the feel of their pre-pregnant, pre-vaginal birth girlfriend/wife, and for some even unlimited amounts of kegels won't do it either. But not to worry, there's surgery for that too! And why is it that most of those plastic surgeons are ... men?