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The Mouth of Madness It was with some trepidation that Jacob drove through the gates of the Fenwick Estate. Jacob drove up the drive and saw the manor before him, it was quite the beautiful old structure. Jacob parked his car out front and made his way to the front door and rang the bell. A minute passed and Jacob was about to head home when a portly dark haired man wearing a suit opened the door, “Master Robert is waiting for you Sir.” Jacob Mendel took a small step back, “Ah

Jacob Mendel, the school outcast, didn't expect to be thrown into a world of dark secrets and madness when Robert Fenwick asked him to be his math tutor.

Hello, Wanted to leave my two cents on your story so far as I just got caught up in the course of a few days of reading. I like it a lot, you aren't the best writer from a technical perspective (most of us aren't) but your ideas are phenomenal. You're a fantastic storyteller and that is what really matters in my opinion. Great stuff, I'm going to eagerly await your next chapter. I'm glad I kept reading, I thought it was rather jarring when the perspective switched after Dan+Mark got infected. I felt the story was self contained enough with their 'deaths' but I like how you tied it all back together and reintroduced them. As a side note I find the idea of love transcending sexuality to be very romantic and also uniquely 21st century. It's interesting. I mean Dan and Mark clearly love each other, it's a romantic love on both ends but it transcends sexuality. Very cool.

This is a great story so far. I'm definitely planning to keep reading. I don't even know why but the scene where Jeff was praying literally had me sobbing. That was an incredibly moving statement to me. You're a good author, hopefully you're still writing.