Papaya91

I really loved this story. The character development over the course of the story was great! And I just love how you added little details here and there that made the story seem so real, that most authors wouldn't think or know to add - like the baseball glove that wasn't broken in yet. I'm sad that you don't seem to be updating anything on Gay Authors anymore, but I really liked what you did with this story!

Loved it. Hope you write more!

Hello Loving your story so far! I know you've already written the rest of it, I just wanted to throw in my two cents. I think you're a really strong writer, but are two things about this chapter that I think you could have done a little bit differently. When the demons showed up, and the two princes got really badass and destroyed them, you didn't really explain what happened to the other people who were in the area at the time. How about the reactions of the other characters when they see that the prince has finally started to get his crazy awesome powers, the shield of the gods, etc? I think that would have made the chapter better, especially to see the bullies finally put in their place. I also think the argument between the two princes seemed a little bit rushed; how did they grow to hate each other so quickly? Very little was said between them, and none of it was really offensive... I like your magic system that you've come up with, though, and the different planets, the history, etc. Great job, I'm really looking forward to reading the rest!

Loved it. I appreciate how all the characters were kind of 'bad guys,' too; it was refreshing when every other main character in other stories is always the goody-goody hero. I just wish those awful parents had been taught more of a lesson.

I registered just so I could write a review for ya. I started the series like two days ago and just finished this chapter. It's been so good that I pretty much read it straight through! (I know, I know, I've had too much free time on my hands...) It's been so long since I read something good, though - I love your writing style, the magic system that you created (with the spirits, etc.), your characters, and of course the gay love that goes on. I've had a few questions over the course of the series that I've been wondering about, but I think you'll probably get to tying up those loose ends sooner or later. One that immediately comes to mind, though, is Jacob's brother back towards the beginning of Book 1 - he told Adam that his brother died, and there was something about, "I would find out later that this was one of many lies Jacob would tell me," or something... are we going to hear more about that later? Anyway I can't wait to read the next book! (And I hope to every god ever that Adam & Jacob get to live happily ever after, same with Sam & Matty.)