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Chapter One: The Culling (Part Five - "Back In The Light Of Morning") I could hear their footsteps approaching from above. Milo and Ricky seemed to almost be in a mad rush to ruin my paradise. So I kissed Jordan's indescribably soft lips and got every last bit of joy out of this moment as I could possibly muster before it was over. "Noah? Jordan? Hey, where'd you guys go?" Came Milo's voice as he felt his way down the dark stairway. Our kiss increased in intensity as the approa

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"New Kid In School 55" Approaching Cody and Sean in the middle of the Spring Break carnival was something that I was prepared to do carefully. It reminded me of the way those guys on the extreme nature shows try to approach an angry, salt water, crocodile in the wild to wrestle him in his own swamp. But, even though they had been at each other's throats since we walked away, they both seemed to drop the hostility towards one another to give us the somewhat passable illusion of a temporary

((Hugz)) My hero! MWAH! Thanx, Em!

Awesome! Thanks, you guys! I'd love to say that I was close enough to set a date for the ebook's release, but not quite there yet! My juggling act leaves a lot to be desired. Hehehe! But SOON!

This was supposed to be ready before Halloween but, you know...'reasons'.

Awesome!!! THANKS, dude! You're my new best friend! (( Hugs ))

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"Kiss Of An Angel 19" There's always this extended pause between us when Tyler first finds his way inside me. A silence. It's kind of rad. Hehehe! Neither one of us speaks. We don't move, we don't blink, we don't breathe. It's just a moment of true connection where his body becomes a part of mine. He plugs himself into the very core of me and tries to adjust to the heat. Tyler always waits for my body to stop trembling before he pushes further. It must drive him crazy, because

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How true. How true.... https://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_detailpage&v=AyYWpk3CqJU

Actually, there's nothing wrong with your sex scenes at all. Those are fine. I just think it's a bit of a harsh contrast to what comes before and after. The writing itself is great. If you wanted to keep it the way you have it, I'd merely suggest building up to it with a few more paragraphs to 'escalate' the reader's involvement a little at the time. Then they'll be ready. Then again, I tend to be a bit wordy sometimes. Something that I've been trying to correct in the ebooks and stuff. But it all takes practice, I suppose. As for writing different stories at once...just concentrate on the characters. Not the story. There's a huge difference, but if you concentrate on the characters, they'll always guide you in the right direction. The story almost plays second fiddle in the long run. Anyway, I'll be around. I'm actually answering a TON of emails this week! So if you want to talk more about Brandon and all, drop me a line at Comicality@webtv.net and I'll try to get back to you asap. I have to be honest though, I really LOVE what you've done with the character on your own so far! But if you have questions, I'll be around to answer them. K? Take care!

I wanted to say thank you for this! I really needed this! And you remind me of why I started writing in the first place! Thank you so much for taking a few moments to share this with me. I hope that I can keep up the standard and keep you smiling the way you made me smile tonight. Sometimes the gas tank is on empty. Thanks for the fuel! You're the best!

Don't worry...even if you're not a "Gone From Daylight" fan, you ca still have fun with this teen love story! It takes place in a world where "GFD" has become a cinematic and literary phenomenon, along the lines of "Twilight", and two cute boys have found a connection through their fanboy service to the series! So check it out when you get a chance Cool? https://www.voy.com/17262/24258.html Have fun....

"Brandon Smiling" By MrM https://www.gayauthors.org/story/mrm/brandonsmilingfromthebillychasechronicles I'm definitely going to take a temporary 'ego moment' right now, hehehe! So smooshes to MrM for this story, which is actually a solo story surrounding the character of 'Brandon' from the "Billy Chase" series! And for all readers of that series, you know that Brandon and Billy have an on again, off again, up again, down again, type of relationship from Book One to Book Nine! Hehehe, so I don't envy what awaits him at all! But it's still extremely interesting to get a private peek or two! When MrM first approached me about doing the story, I was all for it! I was excited to see what he would do with the character. But I was truly surprised by a lot of the angles that he came up with in this storyline. It's not just an interpretation, it's a re-invention! I found myself reading it as if I was meeting this character for the very first time, and that's exactly what an author is SUPPOSED to do! Find something he/she loves and make it their own. So kudos on pulling that off, dude! This story not only follows alongside the "Billy Chase" timeline, but it also gives a healthy amount of backstory as well. I won't give spoilers on any of that, but Brandon's home life, his parents, his beliefs, his desires, all get explained in more detail here, creating a much more well rounded character than the one you usually only get to see through 'Billy's' biased perspective. Typing his thoughts out on a computer instead of handwriting them in a journal, you get to experience Brandon's day to day thoughts as he begins to figure out what his changing life is all about. Including that cute blond boy who has suddenly caught his fancy...and how he goes about finding him. Hehehe, nice touch, by the way! Something that I noticed, but it isn't really a major thing to think about. One thing that you'll usually hear me telling other authors these days...is to try to avoid the 'C' word (cock). Especially in a story like this one, where your style seems to be going for more of an emotional and possibly even romantic impact. Even though I started out the same way, using the same words for my sex scenes...I've learned to see the contrast between one mood and he other. Readers might feel all warm and fuzzy one minute...then you see the words 'he whipped out his hard cock', and it's like 'WHOAH! Ok...we just entered a whole new territory here!' Hehehe!' I can't speak for the ladies, but we fellas can't think with the big head and the little head at the same time. Our blood flow has got to make a choice. So if you want that boyish high school crush vibe...try to skillfully get around whatever descriptions you might see as being a bit more hardcore. However, if a sex scene comes up, and hardcore is what you're looking for...then that's fine to. But make a smooth transition from one to the other. Let things heat up until your audience is ready, and then give them a mouthful! :: Giggles :: The only reason I started noticing stuff like that is because I went back and have been reworking a bunch of my older stories to turn into ebooks, and looking at them now, I see how that can sometimes interrupt the flow that I was going for. It's almost like a DJ scratching a needle on a record to stop the music. Hehehe! And anything that takes your reader out of the moment, even for a second, can lessen the effect of being totally immersed in the storytelling. Other than that, I'll definitely try to keep up with this story! Like I said, it's like starting all over again with a brand new character and a whole new set of thoughts and feelings that I never would have thought of on my own! So check it out, everybody! The link is up above, and it'll be right here on GayAuthors! Enjoy! And I hope this helps, dude! Coming up next? My review for "Knots" by Elias Scott, followed by "Priorities" by ATrueFan! Seezya then!

Thanks so much, Adam! The ebook will be finished next month (A few weeks from now) and I'll be posting it there first, but I'll be releasing new chapters here on the site every week as well! So you'll see more soon, K? ((Huggles)) https://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_detailpage&v=kBTCpoECt88

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Thursday - You wanna know the ONE thing that's better than having sex with Brandon? Having MORE sex with Brandon! Oh dear GOD, every time I think I've gotten him out of myself, or have at least satisfied myself enough to calm the hell down whenever he's around me...we have a morning like we did today and I find myself addicted to him on a whole other level of 'crazy'! We banged each other like the future of all humanity depended on it today. My arms and my legs were weak from holding his na

I just found her about a week ago! She's a writer as well, and talks all about the writing process without pulling any punches at all! LOL! God, I think I'm in love! She gets it! Finally...someone who lets me know that I'm NOT crazy! Or...at least that I'm crazy and in good company! So to all of our GayAuthors writers, I'm sure you can relate! Enjoy! https://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_detailpage&v=1R5AWNycMx4 https://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_detailpage&v=HvT0BNx7ntQ

The Shack's official online magazine has just released it's 26th issue today, just in time for Halloween! Brand new content awaits you! Stuff from Pete, ATrueFan, Cirrus, Mike84, Uncle Bob, Binneyan Smith, as well as a newbie to the family, Chad Blackman! So check it out, and be sure to show them some love for the work they put in! Also, a brand new chapter of my first ever zombie story, "Shelter", has been added! And an extended short story that I wrote just for this Halloween issue, called "Recharge"! So GO! Have fun! You've got PLENTY to read today! Hope you all enjoy it, and I'll seezya soon! https://imagine-magazine.org/releases/volume-26/ (D'OH!!! I said 'it's' instead of 'its' in the header! Hehehe, the system will letme edit everything but that! Ah well!

Hahaha! I just spent all that time talkin' you up, dude! Don't go talking about glaring problems NOW! I'm your wingman on this! Honestly, though, I really didn't find anything else wrong with this story at all. The flow and rhythm of it works, the dialogue and characters is believable, the story is clearly described and well planned out...you really did a great job. And not just a great job for your first time, but a great job overall. If you scroll down further on the Café forum, or look at some of the other pages, you can see more reviews that I've done on other stories as well. The character thing I think has come up once or twice before. Character is a big thing for me when I'm reading, so as soon as I get a name and description and stuff...I start to put that image in my head. So I keep adding characters, and they clog up the brainworks pretty quick. Hehehe, but don't worry about that for now. You just keep writing! It'll be second nature to you in no time!

"Bobby's Story" By Uncle Bob As one of the first bi-weekly reviews that I'm finally bringing back to the Comicality Café, I have to say that I was really surprised that this is the author's very first effort! REALLY surprised! What you get with this story is such an honest and vivid flashback to a time when we were all experiencing that first awkward sexual awakening and trying to figure out what it all means. I could totally relate to every single situation in the first half of this story, where the main character, Robert (or 'Bobby Jay', hehehe, cute!), first begins noticing boys around the tender age of ten, and moves forward into his high school years. It actually brought back a lot of memories for me, hehehe! I enjoyed that! If you give it a read, you'll see what I mean. It can be a confusing time for us all, especially when you don't have a roadmap to 'normal'. I don't want to give away too much of the details, because I feel like the story has a bit of a reveal after the halfway mark. It's nothing super 'shocking' or anything, but it's a cute idea that I think is better when read within the context of the story. But it's an enjoyable ride seeing Bobby Jay evolve over time in this story, while short and sweet, still gives you enough background to make you feel like you've known the main character for years. I would like to see a bit more from these two if there's more story to tell. It could be left alone, but there are a million different other ways for this story to go after the last words are spoken. I would love to find out a little more about the 'Kevin' character, and how he fits into all this. I would love to know if Bobby Jay decides to come out or not. What him and his new love interests' friends and family might say. And of course...some more 'hot' times together as well would not be a bad thing! There were a couple of little things that I noticed. For me, personally? I try to only 'flesh out' the main characters in he story, and allow the others to sort of stay in the background as far as details are concerned. In the beginning of the story you get to see friends, boys and girls, that are fully introduced. First name, last name, hair color, eye color, etc. But then we move on to Junior high school or high school, and they're never mentioned again. Which is fine, because they're not major parts of the story, but I didn't realize that ahead of time. I find that most readers, once you fully introduce a character, sort of lock that image away in the back of their mind as though they're going to be quizzed on it later. That 'back of the mind' closet gets cluttered pretty quickly. So I'd think just a first name would be fine for a character that only shows up in one or two scenes. Maybe a short description if necessary, but that's it. It keeps everybody's focus on the main character, and the readers won't get invested in a character that will disappear at the end of the paragraph. Also...if you decide that you want to keep the descriptions in, I would suggest changing it up just a little bit. Have some fun with it. For example, there was the description of Louise Shaw, where you wrote: "Louise had brown hair, hazel eyes, a cute little nose and a friendly smile." Which is totally fine. Straight to the point, totally effective. Sometimes, simplicity is the best way to go. However, you also described Steven in a somewhat similar fashion. Then Toby. Then Bobby Jay, himself. It works once or twice, but it becomes this noticeable 'grocery list' of details when it comes to four or more people. For Louise, hmmm...I'd say try something like: "Louise always did have a friendly smile, a bright glow in those hazel eyes, curtained on either side by the locks of her brown hair. A cute little nose, making the picture complete." In your own words of course, but you get what I mean. You can maybe mention just one or two features at a time as the scene takes place. Letting the image of her come together a little slower. Then it's not just "She's this tall, and she's this cute, and she has this color hair, and this kind of smile". It varies things up a bit. But seeing as this is your first story, that's a very SMALL issue to even think about right now. All that comes with practice! So, YES, you guys! Great story, from a first time author that you might want to keep an eye on! Uncle Bob! Check it out! I believe he's adding it to the new issue of Imagine Magazine (Being launched this coming Friday! http://www.imagine-magazine.org), and if I get any other addresses from him as to where you can find it, I'll be sure to post it right here! Cool? Thanks a ton, dude! And I'll be back soon with my review of "Brandon Smiles" by MrM

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"Gone From Daylight: Blood Ties 38" As a small armada of soldiers swarmed out of their vehicles, heading towards the glass doors of the lobby, I could feel the tension beginning to increase within me. After Dashe's sanctuary, Erick's warehouse, and a number of other situations, I had almost gotten used to the formation. I recognized the pattern. And I knew that this could go really bad, really fast. I reached for Taryn's hand and pulled him a little closer to me. Silently swearing to pro

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