Erge43

I think that you are the best writer in GA and this story is one of your bests! Bravo!!

As a first chapter it is an interesting piece, as a whole story it's only a bad joke. if that's your idea of becoming a "serious" writer, you can start again.

Oh, come on, man! This is getting too silly! Wake up from your Disney fairy land! Until now Ben and Asher looked like two nice, normal teenagers. All of a sudden they start behaving like a couple of frustrated, guilt ridden old spinsters from some victorian novel. Teenagers are not like that and if you have really met some like that, you should send them to a shrink to find out what's wrong with them.