Hell_5pawn

This story is so awesome! I'm looking forward to the next chapter on the edge of my seat, tossing and turning in bed to read it ... Damn, I've gone and turned into Tristen. What's worst is that my face hurts so much now from smiling so much at the sheer cuteness that is this literary work of ART!

It's definitely struck my fancy, though the long wait times for short (in my humble opinion) chapters. The wait times make me lose interest. I almost wish I found this series when it was actually finished. Granted it didn't have to be completely up, but completed with regular updates is fine for me, cause then I don't have to worry about when the next chapter comes out or if it has been discontinued. I love your writing style by the way. (It forces me to expand my limited vocabulary)

You need to get published. Just some friendly advice.

Quick question: Is Carlos' brother related to Shay? I mean, they look alike, and it is entirely possible that Shay's parents had another child post-virus... So, could Say's possible sibling have children, then they have children... all the way to Estie? (I'm assuming that Carlos' 'stepfather' was a decadent of Shay's parents, not Carlos' parents.) Well, Apparently that question wasn't so quick after all.

When they state their relations to each other, Mira should be Shay's husband and not his brother. I mean, it would make sense that the age of consent would be lowered because the life expectancy would be a lot lower on lucure. Would Konatan and Mira be considered immigrants? Would Shay? Because I don't think that they would believe Shay was born in America. Hehehe. This was my second reading of Hidden Sunlight, and I enjoyed it so much.

I think that if Shay were to have ultimate power, become a god among men, then he should have a few checks and balances, for example the seer could play a role in that to help sway from corruption. But only if Shay becomes powerful enough to need it. That, and the admin gene could be designed specifically to sway, or stop, and thought of corruption. You would think that the advanced mishith race would have thought of that when they made the aqumi. But then, it could be completely against their nature to do such things, so they might not have thought of needing that form of governing the govener. If it seems like I'm rambeling like a mad man, I blame the fact that it's one in the morning. My grammar must be horrid... Not just cause it's one in the morning, but I'm using my phone to type this. Well, G'night! I love the story by the way... Why haven't you updated it in forever and a half?

Please tell me you are almost done with a sequel! Ooooh! I absolutely loved you science, the humor, etc. I was a bit... Surprised when the whole invest bit come to light, you should put a warning in there somewhere. Like in the tags. So, thank you for your time, and effort! I enjoyed this story soooo much! Again... When's that sequel coming out?

Oh for f***'s sake! Jeeze!

Oh my fudging GAWD! I knew it! I knew something was up as soon as I read the line "... Without a background check." In the other chapter. My suspicions were furthered when Eric had a crush on the "older boy". I hope Cody goes to prison. I fear for Eric's safety, and the ones Cody instructs.

Oh FUCK NO! Naw uh. Bastered might kill him?!?

I think that Dabny isn't Zak's father, he might actually be his brother or something. Like a brother with the same dad but with a different mother. I think brother instead of father because of his age... Its off: coledge? And a half brother because his excuse for leaving like that was 'cause of his mother dieing. Yep. This is what happens when I have too much time on my hands. I think of this shite.

I think that Danny is Zak's father. I think that his mum told Zak that he died to cover the fact that a) she found out he was gay and kicked him out he found out he was gay and left her c) a mixture of the first two. O think it would make more sense of she said he was killed instead of left him because a) stops any questions of why he left them it is more painful is someone abandons you knowingly vs. Someone dying. C)stops him from wanting to track down his father and risk getting hurt/abandoned again. It also explains why Angel "knows" Zak; it explains why CJ is reminded of Danny by Zak. So, fair warning for that plot twist, but remember, it's just a theory!

I can toyally see Matt and Mel getting together. Either that or Matt and Alex. I'm swooning over the romance! Oooh! I can't believe how believable their relashionship is! (Yes, I'm aware that's an oxymoron.) Ohmigod! I am in love with this story... I'm still kinda struggling with the British writing. I'm Canadian, you see. But I don't let that stop me from enjoying this lovely story! I giggled like crazy when I read the innuendo near the end.

Amazing. So frikin adorible! Awe! Great story. Great content. Well written... Just... Yes.

Um... How is Rory so oblivious? Especially when it comes to the ones he LIVES WITH! Ugh! I am definitely enjoying this story. I can't stop the nagging feeling that Seth and Rory will end badly, to only have Rory be with Luke in the end... I'm NOT looking forward to the Rory/Seth breakup. Love you to bits DomLuka!