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The package posted to discredit West by the mysterious guy who has a grudge is still in play?
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Glad you tied up the Jane story. Lovely ending to the chapter. A moment of humanity in the horror of Andrew’s current work life. Though Will may be a little pissed having expected his man home, in bed and a hug. Did you mean Sarah in this line: Pierre Thorne. The Pastor's son. Dmytro confirmed he is alive, I’ve got Sarah on it now
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Yep it was clear about under the mud so I assumed dead but there had been no further comment, as yet, which if a week or so had passed surprised me. Yes I clocked the documents on the wall but thought this was another copy rather than the contents of the envelope taken to Will. Sorry to be a bore. I just had those thoughts while still very much enjoying the story.
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Couple of questions from the last book which remain. What happened to the operative who was caught looking for Father. Is she MIA? Dead? Alive? There has been no mention of her but I would assume CSIS would miss her. Also what happened when Yani gave the envelope to Will or Lisa or Mel? Other than initial shock we don’t know Will thoughts or reaction to the existence of Edward.
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Ah another thought. If Yani is delivering the envelope to Will that will put him inside the house. Will he stay or sneak back out? Might be an interesting asset to have to hand.
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No it was fine as it is. Leaves a little bit of mystery. As an editor I would have put a pin on it to make sure it didn’t get forgotten or disappear into the weeds.
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Wake up, strong coffee, read the next chapter is becoming a daily ritual!
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I’d like to say well played Andrew. I hope it doesn’t backfire though. How will the Order react to Bob? Hope his security is solid. Go Lisa and Mel! Presumably the envelope Yani has Is for Will. Who will find Edward first?
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I need the next chapter now. I can't spend the day at work with my mind overthinking. You're a rotter Topher, a rotter!
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Great story. Looking forward to the next. My only gripe were typos and inconsistencies but that’s an issue I have with many books as a former proofreader and editor.
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Part One: I Have A Bigger Secret
HolbeckMax commented on Jason Rimbaud's story chapter in Part One: I Have A Bigger Secret
Maybe he hasn't seen Jesse before but perhaps he's seen a simillar face on a younger body?- 28 comments
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Part One: The Junkyard
HolbeckMax commented on Jason Rimbaud's story chapter in Part One: The Junkyard
Is his dad really his dad or were other genes involved?- 41 comments
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Hi I'm Max and I live in the UK
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