Fishwings

Lawl, thanks Bondwriter and Camy : 3 I knew Ms. Bridge would win hearts <3 Of which, I just started reading EleCivil's Laika, and I think it's great~

: D ha, no. I used to own more stereos than the toes on my parrot's foot though. Do you own any Grandfather clocks?

Chapter FIVE is out~ Thx to Colin for editting and thank YOU for readin : ]

Thanks bondwriter and Conner =] I was going to upload chapter 5 today but aparently, efiction doesn't allow word documents nemore -- or perhaps they haven't gotten around to changing it all -- and I quite frankly hate .html coz of the clumsy spacing, so I shall wait it out until they get a fixing.

I agree tenfold =]

Dayum, you write great stories too! I concur, the conversations were awesome : D I like the ending. It's bittersweet, and yeah, very realistic. I'm sure all of us go through the same kind of fear as Aaron, and I can certainly relate to it. As well, I'm surprised how developed your characters were in just three short sections. It's amazing Keep writing!

"Even though inside your embrace I felt warm It was the eye of a hurricane stillness before the storm" Wonderful line : ] It really struck out from the others <3 The ending was rather confusing for me, but I'm guessing perhaps it had something to do with.... cheating? Keep it up =] You write great poems.

Yo I just finished reading chapter six, and I really think the story is great! Brett is pretty awesome, and I think he'd be perfect with Will :ranger:

OH, lol, yerse =] I updated meh story. Here's a link tah Three. Chapter 5 should be out in a couple o' days, depending on meh mood and when I get all my studying done for my provincials exams. ASKJHASDKJHASDKJH. THanks for the comments Ieshwar and Camy : D Of the guy Shawn has yet to meet, you'll read about him soon. Well, very soon to be exact. It's entertaining to keep people waiting

Awesome story so far hot_bsk =] I liked how you started off the story right away, and your effective foreshadowing.

Wonderful line. Awesome poem =] It was quite funny and light hearted in the beginning, but it climbed into a lot of intensity afterwards. You kept me sitting on the edge of my chair the whole time... which is seriously rare for me, because I usually get really bored from long poems, hehe. Keep it up~

... I LOVE this last line! It's hands down beautiful, honest. <3 Your poem is flowing, powerful, and deep. Keep it up!

Thx Conner and Ieshwar! I shall update soon and get that prologue thinger fixed once I complete the next chunk~

That's a great story : D! Great writing, great voice, and I really felt what the characters were feeling. You capture intensity very, very well

Yo, So uh, I've decided to open a discussion regarding a new story I've written [well, started to write] and I'm looking for some feedback. Comments are welcome, and I'm always looking for new ways to improve my writing for it is the first time I've posted up a story, so hit me up with constructive critism as well =] And He Was Gone speaks through the eyes of Shawn, who's life takes a whirl when he meets a boy named Devin. Dilemmas and stakes rise and fall, and Shawn realizes nothing will be the same again as he makes some of the most difficult choices in his life. Things have been pretty hectic here, but I'll make sure to post the next chapter or so in the following week. And He Was Gone. Again, million thanks to Colin for the editting

True self eh? : D I'm my true self; whenever, whereever. The fact that I sometimes put on masks is a part of my true self, too. I don't like to hide my usual side of my personality, though -- and that's when I'm laughing or having fun =]

Goo Goo Dolls ~ Iris And I'd give up forever to touch you' Cause I know that you feel me somehow You're the closest to heaven that I'll ever be And I don't want to go home right now And all I can taste is this moment And all I can breathe is your life' Cause sooner or later it's over I just don't want to miss you tonight And I don't want the world to see me 'Cause I don't think that they'd understand When everything's made to be broken I just want you to know who I am And you can't fight the tears that ain't coming Or the moment of truth in your lies When everything feels like the moviesY eah you bleed just to know you're alive And I don't want the world to see me 'Cause I don't think that they'd understand When everything's made to be broken I just want you to know who I am And I don't want the world to see me 'Cause I don't think that they'd understand When everything's made to be broken I just want you to know who I am And I don't want the world to see me 'Cause I don't think that they'd understand When everything's made to be broken I just want you to know who I am I just want you to know who I am I just want you to know who I am I just want you to know who I am

ARGHMPH!! *attacks* Awesome song!

Yes, holy crap, this is a great story, thats fo sho =] On the contrary to what Camy said, I liked the ending, very much. You made it powerful without making it cheesy or overdone, and the last sentence was something that brought a really nice abstract flavor to the whole story. I think there were little bits on the story that were a bit choppy transition wise, like when sam broke down on Jake, but its nothing really major. The whole story is beautiful as it is-- and I seriously think its a must read~

Thx! And it will be ^ ^!! I got four chapters tah go, and then Ill start postin~

Hi guys =] Kinda new here, so I just stopped by the forums to check things out... and get the hang of things Im finishing up this story that I had been working on for the past uh *counts wit fingers* two weeks or so, and I might post it up. But i douno lol Cheers for now~